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marywalsh
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Wed Jun-18-08 03:15 AM

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"You make me feel long."


  

          


Take deep breaths
today and yesterday,
on the plane,
three movies,
one too same.

What’s come over me,
I thought I saw your face
wearing a smile,
dimpled on the side,
tears falling to rest
upon your cheeks.

Like a memory
you’re here for a while
and then you’re gone.
It slips around me,
and tickles me,
wet upon my cheek,
and then you’re gone.

7 days melt into one,
funnel down
into a very small hole,
cylindrical, worm-like,
two heads,
one on each end.

You make me feel long.

Art:

maryhoulihan.blogspot.com

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
Awwwwwww --
Jun 19th 2008
1
know what makes me feel long?
Jun 22nd 2008
4
i loved the title
Jun 21st 2008
2
RE: You make me feel long.
Jun 22nd 2008
3

PhotoSynthesis
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Thu Jun-19-08 05:27 PM

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1. "Awwwwwww --"
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There's something about ^this^ that makes me *smile*.

Words -------- all jumbled ^UP^ like leaves ... together in a pile of poetry.

Feels good to kick around in these words.


*Nice~Ness*





A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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I am Nhate N8Backwards
Member since Jun 18th 2008
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Sun Jun-22-08 02:27 PM

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4. "know what makes me feel long?"
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That was sweet, i don't under stand the word long for this, i think sad when io think long but you seem to mean some kind of contentment, it's odd. feels right though. nice stuff. it's pretty and reminds me of lace.








p.s. chicks with tall legs and short torsos and a low cervix.


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mindful
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Sat Jun-21-08 01:11 PM

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2. "i loved the title"
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and the sensual effects your words give off...

favorite lines:

Like a memory
you’re here for a while
and then you’re gone.
It slips around me,
and tickles me,
wet upon my cheek,
and then you’re gone.

7 days melt into one,
funnel down
into a very small hole,
cylindrical, worm-like,
two heads,
one on each end.

definitely digging this. Peace~

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Art is man's constant effort to create for himself a
different order of reality from that
which is given to him ©Chinua Achebe

  

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ASIEM
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Sun Jun-22-08 12:32 PM

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3. "RE: You make me feel long."
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yeh what they both said...

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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