"One Night Stand" Thu Oct-05-06 02:30 PM by lexx3001
As I have mentioned earlier, I will be posting some verses from my groups demo. We are putting it together currently, so I was curious what you thought. here is one from a song called "one night stand":
Hold up and hear me out, I gotta talk to you i'm not on that same ol' this is something new ill tell you from the start and what i say is true no need for looking back at the things you do - you just do it
were getting wild tonight dont listen to what they say - they just jealous types just breathe and stop - get it amplified go on and turn it up another notch or five - then let it drop like the back of a Cadillac on some hydro tip you know i got that heat just me and you thats the master plan my definition of a one night stand so think about it take a minute and meditate ill make it worth your while so dont hesitate yeah you got that - its not to pass away so if you wanna do - lets do this yesterday ---Chorus-- All i need is an all night plan speaking out to all my fans try and do that all i can working out all my scams (sp?) thinking of a one night stand (repeat) ----------
this was written from a point of view where one night stand means me talking from the stage to a listener, trying to convince the listener to spend a night with my music (show, etc). nothing serious
ok, constructive criticism, i can take that. The thing is, I do have alot more clever, complex material. But as of late, I wanted to simplify the delivery. There really isnt much i can say, except that it definately reads much weaker than it sounds within the songs structure.... but hey, now i gotta think on this. that bad, huh?