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Street Poet
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Sat Jun-07-08 10:51 PM

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"Fix You"


          

She tried her best but didn't succeed
The realities of the world have broken her heart
I see she's in a time of need
She said she's so stressed that she can't sleep
Her life is going in reverse

I hate seeing her so hurt

She's beginning to smile less and less
Mental health issues are starting to manifest
I feel helpless
I don't know what to do

As the love of her life
I told her baby don't worry
Because I'm going to try my best... to fix you

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
Heart Warming ...
Jun 09th 2008
1
RE: Fix You
Jun 12th 2008
2
RE: Fix You
Jul 08th 2008
3

PhotoSynthesis
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Mon Jun-09-08 11:02 PM

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1. "Heart Warming ..."
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You've expressed "her" feelings of failure, disappointment, frustration, sleepless~ness, & stress ...

~And~

Your feelings of helpless~ness, pity, frustration & hope -- (Hope that you can fix her) ...


*Felt*


If ^this^ is true to life 4 U -- Just be sure you have the "MASTER" fix~it MAN on hand to help you fix her -- You can't do it by yo'self -- *Word*




A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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poeticorgasms
Member since Apr 06th 2005
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Thu Jun-12-08 05:33 PM

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Lovely piece, very short but it really got to the heart of things

When the pen hits the paper, I ink !

I am a Glutton on America filling myself with worthless things.

  

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Jahlovall3305
Member since Sep 25th 2007
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Tue Jul-08-08 10:05 PM

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>
>
>She's beginning to smile less and less
>Mental health issues are starting to manifest
>I feel helpless
>I don't know what to do
>
>As the love of her life
>I told her baby don't worry
>Because I'm going to try my best... to fix you

>Even under stress
>she tried to impress
>and all she have
>feel like less
>what a mess....
>Then came you
>doing your best
>to fix what she had left.

I'm feelin this one. thanks!
>
>


As soon as healing takes place, go out and heal somebody else. Maya Angelou
No man is free until all men are free.

Jah*lov*all of YOU>>>>

  

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