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c71
Member since Jan 15th 2008
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Thu Jun-20-19 05:09 AM

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"I format the rhymes step by step"


  

          

implored by those who devour sour candies like a dandy

pursued in the course of nature evolving when we solve

the conundrum that comes from having a view set

towards the upper decks kept in check by implied

guilt trips like pink slips nipped in the bud

shudder to think what would be coming next

within the context expected to recover from

setbacks counteract the impact implicit

rhymes revisit old hits then flip lines

crucial times like Ray Cappo and Porcell

can't close my eyes surprised that

the format closes doors shut conduct

rhyming forays into the maze displayed

in public subject to examination

frayed nerve endings rendering meanings

that seem dreamlike it's your life

so keep it tight

  

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RE: I format the rhymes step by step
Jun 21st 2019
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thanks, appreciate the encouragement
Jun 22nd 2019
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SynsCei
Member since Mar 05th 2008
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Fri Jun-21-19 05:05 PM

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1. "RE: I format the rhymes step by step"
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Fri Jun-21-19 05:06 PM by SynsCei

  

          

I dig it man.

PG's critiques of the ones he's done on mine, has basically been like:

Solid wordplay, but the references kinda water it down.

I've used that critique to try and up my rhymes with feeling and not references.

Clearly, you post like 2847 times a day (it's not a jab, it's a playful elbow), so I hope you read this and continue as I enjoy reading your writtens.




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No need to get my mental status cold stressin

  

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c71
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Sat Jun-22-19 07:47 AM

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2. "thanks, appreciate the encouragement"
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yep

  

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