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zoso
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Thu Jun-25-15 06:29 PM

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"See Attle"


          

White painted wood
Rotted brown from the tears
that fell from a gaping hole
of the city's collective fears
Eroding the tales
Exposing the nails

When I awoke from my state of solace
and proceeded on into the world
I left with a chipped shoulder
a ripped knee
a poster of a kidney
and
an image of the sea

And a head of questions
Starting with
Why?
These chords replace the thunder in the sky
Ending with
die?

Because this time
the storm couldn't weather the guy
Where does one take refuge
When the natural disaster
occurs inside?

Hello

Hello

Hello?

How low?


Nevermind.

  

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RE: See Attle
Jun 27th 2015
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RE: See Attle
Jun 30th 2015
2
ahh, very nice.
Jun 30th 2015
3

ASIEM
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Sat Jun-27-15 10:01 PM

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1. "RE: See Attle"
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i like the flow of this even the somewhat allusive message but i wont pretend to know exactly what is meant...care to say?

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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zoso
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Tue Jun-30-15 04:24 AM

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Thanks. Inspired by the early 90s Seattle grunge music scene. the gloominess of it, and Kurt Cobain.

  

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ThaAnthology
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Tue Jun-30-15 12:45 PM

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I like the rhythm and the tone. I scrolled down to see the inspriation lol. I can see it, the grunge vibe. Really cool piece. Thank you.

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