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the_best_part
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"pause"


  

          

i thought about you today
between my left foot and the sky
you crept in and orbited the outer realm of my thoughts

sometimes
between the coffee and the shower
or
the loc and the lips
you slide in
a faint yet persistent memory
causing me to

pause

i usually grab you with a swiftness
shoving you down deep into the darkness
where i place things i no longer want
or need to desire

it goes right away
fade
away
as nonchalantly as it came

but this time...
right now...

when the pause came
i was in the mirror
between the eyebrow and the scarf
i saved you from the darkness
and held you up to the light
examined why you still exist
in the pauses

all i could come up with was
because...
you showed me what it could be
how it could be
how it should be
then you vanished

i spent all that time
thinking you'd taken my heart with you
then spent more time trying to forget
but for some reason
the memory couldn't completely be erased

now i think i understand
why you still gently skim across
my heart and mind
like stones skipped
you created movement

now i can appreciate
what you brought
instead of cursing what you took away
i know the possibilities
my heart plumped full of expectation
my soul running over with gratitude
the pauses where you live now
are just small reminders of how
extraordinary you were
and how amazing i am today.

thanks. peace.

@asiaradiant

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
this seems like the perfect tribute
Jul 03rd 2010
1
RE: this seems like the perfect tribute
Jul 03rd 2010
2
more about him...
Jul 03rd 2010
3
i won
Jul 03rd 2010
4
RE: pause
Jul 06th 2010
5
RE: pause
Jul 08th 2010
7
      RE: pause
Jul 08th 2010
8
           RE: pause
Jul 13th 2010
9
this was tasty
Jul 07th 2010
6
RE: this was tasty
Jul 13th 2010
10
RE: pause
Jul 20th 2010
11
Damn...
Jul 24th 2010
12
RE: pause
Jul 26th 2010
13

mindful
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Sat Jul-03-10 09:07 AM

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1. "this seems like the perfect tribute"
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to someone who brought you down, but brought you up and made you better from it all too... I loved the following lines:

pause

i usually grab you with a swiftness
shoving you down deep into the darkness
where i place things i no longer want
or need to desire

it goes right away
fade
away
as nonchalantly as it came

but this time...
right now...

when the pause came
i was in the mirror
between the eyebrow and the scarf
i saved you from the darkness
and held you up to the light
examined why you still exist
in the pauses

all i could come up with was
because...
you showed me what it could be
how it could be
how it should be
then you vanished

*nods* Your work is always inspirational to read...

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the_best_part
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Sat Jul-03-10 11:33 AM

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2. "RE: this seems like the perfect tribute"
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exactly. thanks.

@asiaradiant

  

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the_best_part
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3. "more about him..."
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he pushed me to my limit
and then made me go further
than i thought i ever could
in the conversation
in the thought
in the bedroom
in the art

he built with me
stacked love on top of worth
used creativity to put it all together
and softened the hard edges with laughter

we had a good thing
that turned into power
that could've left me empty
but instead
it's made me full

i whispered to him
fuck you, you hurt me, you asshole
but now i'm screaming
thank you, you grew me, you lost me
i won.

@asiaradiant

  

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the_best_part
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Sat Jul-03-10 11:48 AM

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4. "i won"
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because...
he helped me to get here
and where i am is...
ready to be heaven
in which god dwells
my heart is the heated center
that pulses and sustains the earth
my love is like water
smoothing sharp stones
flowing and reaching crevices
otherwise kept dry
my sex is
integrated with spirit
soul and heart
if i were his
i'd be his masterpiece
his most precious work of art

@asiaradiant

  

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ASIEM
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Tue Jul-06-10 10:04 PM

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5. "RE: pause"
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Tue Jul-06-10 10:06 PM by ASIEM

  

          

how many times must a nigga think every fuckin great poem is about him self centered egomaniac arrogant muthafucka
then again
i felt this before
even heard it whispered in my ear
still i frown from the pain
of how real it is
growin up aint easy
when everybody else wanna
make life so fuckin sweet
it's bitter too
and then we realize
every moment
every person
has every purpose
4 everything
2 b free
to choose over again...

oh yeah i simply love what you do for me in here so "do me baby like you never done before till i just caint take no mo"

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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the_best_part
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7. "RE: pause"
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man, you...lol. sometimes i gotta just keep quiet.

@asiaradiant

  

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ASIEM
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8. "RE: pause"
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no please do indulge me u have a special way wit your words n ur experiences are so vast clue me in what was that thought to ur reply from me?

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




www.myspace.com/asiem61

  

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the_best_part
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9. "RE: pause"
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i liked your first reply to this. that's all i'm gonna say.

@asiaradiant

  

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Zin
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6. "this was tasty "
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.... you were the thought that lingered on his frontal lobe
... slightly cocked like the brim of his cap
.... Tx state of mind
... her accent seasoned like brisket
..... she had lemonade thoughts ...refreshing


this is just what you made me think of .... i really dug this! lady you have come back

sig.~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Guess who's Back

  

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the_best_part
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10. "RE: this was tasty "
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yes sir. you know me.


> .... you were the thought that lingered on his frontal lobe
>
>... slightly cocked like the brim of his cap
>.... Tx state of mind
>... her accent seasoned like brisket
>..... she had lemonade thoughts ...refreshing
>
>
>this is just what you made me think of .... i really dug this!
>lady you have come back

@asiaradiant

  

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HueyNewton
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Tue Jul-20-10 01:51 PM

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11. "RE: pause"
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yo, I just wanna read a book by you cuz ya got skillz ma . . {}

ain't no freedom in the village
-xxx

they showed us phYsically, we could reach infinitY, but mentally, through the century, we lost our identitY
-Rakim

  

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Nowachaoticthing
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12. "Damn..."
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from the opening lines, you had me...

"i thought about you today
between my left foot and the sky
you crept in and orbited the outer realm of my thoughts"

Your poem is essentially how my ex-girlfriend made me feel when she "disappeared". Definitely felt.


"To be a poet is a condition, not a profession."
- Robert Frost

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Africa65
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Mon Jul-26-10 12:14 AM

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13. "RE: pause"
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very meditative and calming as if you were searching and found the answers with a calm discovery beautiful like Miles playing solo

  

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