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ak_reborn
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Tue Mar-16-10 03:53 PM

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"Far cry"
Tue Mar-16-10 03:56 PM by ak_reborn

  

          


From days, ultra violet rays shine upon my golden,
skin, olive tone'n im thin, thinking of boning,
notion to sin, im smiling sober posing a grin,
at a thirty six on twenty four posing for men,
speaking, my badden slang like my denim jeans hang,
bless the spirits,
my only vision is the city limits,
escape danger, and lead my life not as a failiure,
mastermind tactics to quick grapple my paper,
slick rick em, pitch em fourth fifth 'n,
whipping this cream, see my man in the beam,
benz european cause hes repping the homeland,
freeze in the trunk like,
demolition,
lab, sylvester stallone, twenty ten edition,
many men are missing from the present,
this my far cry, mark mine, so feel the essence.









ultra violet rays illuminate

Intoxication, my voicebox rocks the nation
Sweet affiliation, the Doe Or Die situation - Az

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
RE: Far cry
Mar 20th 2010
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RE: Far cry
Mar 20th 2010
2
RE: Far cry
Mar 21st 2010
3
I Have 2 Agree w / You Pitbull ...
Mar 21st 2010
4
Youze A Trip, Boy!
Mar 21st 2010
5

HueyNewton
Member since Feb 27th 2005
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Sat Mar-20-10 02:47 PM

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1. "RE: Far cry"
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i need some retrospect like a 80's music groove
need another move cuz I dream in color
the color is from bronze & golden with blue skies
it's a far cry now since hip-hop has changed

lifE imitates art
-xxx

they showed us phYsically, we could reach infinitY, but mentally, through the century, we lost our identitY
-Rakim

  

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Pit Bull
Member since Oct 23rd 2006
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Sat Mar-20-10 03:34 PM

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2. "RE: Far cry"
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Its really pretty cool, the way I come and go. It lets me drop in on my favorite writers here and there and see on where they've progressed to. Its like seeing a niece or nephew once every six months; you're shocked each time how much they've grown, how much fuller and more complete they are. Except writing is a skill, and as long as we keep doing it, we never stop growing.

I know I say this all the time, but you've come a long way. Further than I would have ever thought you would have the first time I read your shit. This one here had my head nodding even without a beat. In particular, theres two things that really impress me about how you've changed as a writer. You've turned away from using old, tired rhymes that anyone can use (i.e., love/above, old/gold, etc etc), essentially stepping up your rhyme scheme complexity. This magnifies the power inherent to the words and rhythm. The other is your subject matter has matured right along with you. There's still that aggressive undertone, but it works mixed together.

Keep writing, bro.

"What is done in love always takes place beyond good and evil." -- Nietzsche

  

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ak_reborn
Member since Sep 24th 2005
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Sun Mar-21-10 10:42 AM

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Thanks for peepin fam. Ha, huey, i see you and i feels it..
Lucky or Pit,whatever u wanna go by lol,its been a while since u been around fam, appreciate the love, im always trying improve, learn new things, whatever it takes.

Intoxication, my voicebox rocks the nation
Sweet affiliation, the Doe Or Die situation - Az

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Sun Mar-21-10 11:00 AM

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4. "I Have 2 Agree w / You Pitbull ..."
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My baby boy has grown ^UP^ -- lyrically as well as chronologically --

The maturity level in his flow is obvious ... and growing stronger with every post -- *Yuuup*








A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Sun Mar-21-10 11:03 AM

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5. "Youze A Trip, Boy!"
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>slick rick em, pitch em fourth fifth 'n,
>whipping this cream, see my man in the beam,
>benz european cause he's repping the homeland,
>freeze in the trunk like,
>demolition,
>lab, sylvester stallone, twenty ten edition,



*Keep Going / Keep Growing*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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