Rose petals ...cling tightly ...to the stem Reminding him that holding on can sometimes be *Painfully Nice* Like life rolling dice expecting to win but fearing to lose Yet, whatever I choose thorns prick quick drawing ruby red blood As I swim in a flood of combustible mixed emotions Drinking from time like bubbling ancient herb potions Sometimes history is a mystery Alchemy at its finest As he sticks a rose up under my nose and replies: This is for you; watch out for the thorns ( ( ( YOUR HIGHNESS ) ) )
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
~Complex with the creative content on a conquest with concepts and context as concrete as poetry ~Its real and ill when I be sitting still yet still rocking to my mental rhythme. ~Its just right when I write
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
... and thanx to all of you who feel my "Royal Pain" -- *Empathy Appreciated* --
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
Torn between your better judgment and the whirlwind that is emotion. Being presented with a beauty that can simultaneously cause ugly pain. Very nice way of putting it. o) You seem to be more aware of the danger than you are wrapped up in the "lowliness" of the gesture...______________________________ {Diffident:Reserved in manner}
{Alchemy:A medieval chemical philosophy having as its asserted aims the transmutation of base metals into gold,
>You seem to be more aware of the danger than you are wrapped up in the "lovliness" of the gesture...
Nahhh ... There's an even balance between the two ...(Danger vs. lovliness of gesture)-- I prolly didn't do a very good job of depicting it tho -- -- *my bad*
Thanx 4 Peepin' ...
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
13. "Come Closer ... Lemmme Hug Ya ..." In response to Reply # 12
*E~Huggs* --
then ...
*Photo pops Shakeet ^UP^Side Da Head* --- Where the hell you been?!?!? --
I ain't letting U go til' you write summmthin', dammmittt!!! --
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
see this has got to be nice as I love the poem and I hate roses, something to do with being pushed into a rose bush as a four year old and having pretty much everywhere scratched up.
I like the balance between the good and the bad in this poem, in fact my only complaint is, 'ruby red blood' seemed maybe a tad obvious but hey, I haven't written in ages so what do I know
...I hate roses, something to do with being pushed into a rose bush as a four year old and having pretty much everywhere scratched up.
^those^ kinda incidents can leave emotional scars that last a lifetime, huh? --
*So Sowwwy*
But you know, you're right about the ruby red blood -- it's kinda repetitious ain't it? -- -- (Blood is red ... period) -- But it ain't always "ruby red" -- it can sometimes be a thick brick red or almost maroon or blue/red depending on the medical state of the person ... (whether they're dying and/or losing oxygen -- or the blood has been exposed to oxygen for some reason) -- *Photo sticks out tongue ... SO THERE!* --
... funny thing is ... I'd been talking with someone about the theater play "WICKED" -- you know, that prequel to the "Wizard of Oz" or the WIZ or whatever?!?! -- But the play about the witches in the Wizard of Oz.
They were explaining to me the *power* of the "Ruby Red Slippers" that one of the witches wore -- and I guess those words: "Ruby Red" stuck in my head, yaknow?
(((Oh Well))) -- It's always good 2 C your name on the board Gee -- You NEED to write summmthin' -- *Pretty Please With Brown Sugar On Top* --
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
a cool afternoon blitz like a strawberry malt on a hot, humid day I decipher ya wordz like ice cream in the freezer/w mixed emotions purple lilac discussions I smell in the wind -SMILE} . . NICE 0ne!
lifE imitates art -xxx
they showed us phYsically, we could reach infinitY, but mentally, through the century, we lost our identitY -Rakim
my favorites from you and i've been reading you for a long, long while (even though sometimes I don't respond)... i thought the Your Highness could have been left out at the end (if that is apart of the piece), but the following lines flowed brilliantly and actually made the poem for me:
Yet, whatever I choose thorns prick quick drawing ruby red blood As I swim in a flood of combustible mixed emotions Drinking from time like bubbling ancient herb potions Sometimes history is a mystery Alchemy at its finest As he sticks a rose up under my nose and replies: This is for you; watch out for the thorns
definitely good writing, definitely good for reading. Peace, lady~
I always appreciate your comments, ms. mind ... particularly your "critiquing" comments ... because I know you're a quality writer and you don't add fillers or fluff to your stuff -- -- (Yeah, like I do) -- but you've hit the nail on da head with this problem I've had my whole tenure on OKP:
>i thought the "Your Highness" could have been left out at the end (if that is apart of the piece)
... yes it was part of the piece, and it was 'sposed to RHYME with *alchemy at it's FINEST* --- finest / your highness
But see, there's my dilema right there ... Always tryna rhyme --
It's an obsession or an addiction that I need to break free from ... but it's hard, cuz I'm a rhyming poet.
I'm gonna work on that soon ... by writing a pCe with absolutely NO rhyme whatsoever -- (It'll take a while, I'm sure ... but thanx for the motivation to try!)
*Much Appreciated*
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
20. "RE: Royal Pain" In response to Reply # 0 Mon Jun-15-09 02:48 PM by Nathaniel
reads like a letter, "this lady knows of what she speak(s)"
King James Bible states in (1st Corinthians 14:8-9)-"..Again, If the trumpet does NOT sound a clear call, who will get ready for battle?..So it is with you."
I gots nutthin' but luv for ya ... *and U know this* ... but ^this^ weren't for you! --
... witcho "arrogant" self -- *chuckles*
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
... but U know ... we "must" play catch ^UP^ -- (((Forreal Tho)))
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
^^^That equation might capture the chemical essence of the physical thesis that is photosyn"thesis," but it does not "photo"graphically capture the de"light" that is your benevolent (ultra beneviolet) soul.
... Glad to oblige you Otto -- (At least for a lil' while) -- but gsquared's words will 4~ever be imbedded in my sigs -- *Yep* --
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
something bout the thorns the sweetness the smell of rose petals all intertwined in the mix of what appears to be opposites... another conundrum complex simplicity in it's finest
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..." ASIEM "Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran (Be and it is) " A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
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