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Intrepid Vixen
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Mon Jan-26-09 08:22 AM

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"I. Vixen"


  

          

vexes many
removes the velum off your cerebellum
languishing in rhythm's prison
encased in solitary confinement
whispering to words committing verbicide
varacious verbals shut up in my lungs
written sanity on the walls of insane flows
poetically waxing floors with eager content
in your veins IntraVenously pumping with complexity
I. Be prisms distorting mind views readily
crumbling mounds of speech-tacular wit
polishing off your veneer until I consume your psyche
virtually becoming a virtuoso of trapped vernacular
a visionary stealing your tongue
vociferant
avoidance
futile attempt

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When One learns
to live without fear,
then One cannot be broken.

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 26th 2009
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RE: I. Vixen
Jan 26th 2009
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RE: I. Vixen
Jan 26th 2009
3
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 26th 2009
4
Thank you!
Jan 28th 2009
6
      I.Intrepid
Jan 28th 2009
8
           RE: I.Intrepid
Feb 25th 2009
10
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 27th 2009
5
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 28th 2009
7
      RE: I. Vixen
Feb 05th 2009
9
           RE: I. Vixen
Feb 25th 2009
11
RE: I. Vixen
Nov 01st 2009
12
RE: I. Vixen
Nov 02nd 2009
13
RE: I. Vixen
Nov 02nd 2009
14
RE: I. Vixen
Nov 03rd 2009
15
RE: I. Vixen
Dec 27th 2009
16
      RE: I. Vixen
Dec 28th 2009
19
*rubs eyes* I could have sworn I responded to this...
Dec 27th 2009
17
RE: I. Vixen
Dec 27th 2009
18
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 03rd 2010
21
Damn! Ms V
Dec 30th 2009
20
RE: Damn! Ms V
Jan 03rd 2010
22
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 01st 2014
23
RE: I. Vixen
Jan 01st 2014
24

ak_reborn
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Mon Jan-26-09 11:50 AM

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1. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Hot throughout, i really liked, at times it sounded as is rhyming words were lost, but then again i could be wrong, gotta take into consideration the pronunciation of uk, it differs greatly, But other then that, fantastic.

Fav lines...

>vexes many
>removes the velum off your cerebellum
>languishing in rhythm's prison
>encased in solitary confinement

>in your veins IntraVenously pumping with complexity
>I. Be prisms distorting mind views readily

Overall, the whole drop was ill, but those lines flowed perfect to me.

Intoxication, my voicebox rocks the nation
Sweet affiliation, the Doe Or Die situation - Az

  

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empro
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Mon Jan-26-09 12:18 PM

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2. "RE: I. Vixen"
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>vexes many
>removes the velum off your cerebellum
>languishing in rhythm's prison
>encased in solitary confinement
>whispering to words committing verbicide
>varacious verbals shut up in my lungs
>written sanity on the walls of insane flows
>poetically waxing floors with eager content
>in your veins IntraVenously pumping with complexity
>I. Be prisms distorting mind views readily
>crumbling mounds of speech-tacular wit
>polishing off your veneer until I consume your psyche
>virtually becoming a virtuoso of trapped vernacular
>a visionary stealing your tongue
>vociferant
>avoidance
>futile attempt


i liked the very first 3 lines a lot. This flowed nicely and it appears to have a confident rhythm to it. Thanks for sharing with us

stay ^

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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Mon Jan-26-09 08:19 PM

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3. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Thank you for the feedback, Empro and AK. This is a poem that has another side to it, but that's for another time. Thank you for the look!
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When One learns
to live without fear,
then One cannot be broken.

  

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soulsugar
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Mon Jan-26-09 08:59 PM

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4. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Word painter
Carpenter of verbage

...how you chose to express how hot you are shined through with confidence paint all over and to the end.

n/work

also tell me were you in response to one that may have doubted your hot ness or is this a freestyle

im old and loose my way sometimes lol

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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Wed Jan-28-09 11:41 AM

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6. "Thank you!"
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Thank you Soulsugar. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. This was written as an alliterative project of mine. It's kinda like a "Who I am?" type piece. I figured let me switch my style up. I recently did another one entitled "I. Intrepid." I'm still testing it out but I'm going to post it up. It's still a little rough though.
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When One learns
to live without fear,
then One cannot be broken.

  

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soulsugar
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Wed Jan-28-09 04:08 PM

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8. "I.Intrepid"
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Wed Jan-28-09 04:09 PM by soulsugar

          

Don't holdback

let loose the flow
kind of like a jazz band letting themselves go or when in love letting pride break free.

yea this is left field, but you got me I hope
(i will read it when ever you're ready to bless us)

and I like how you made each word somehow connect as the concept revealed itself.

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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lol, I understand exactly what you mean, Soul. It was kinda like that...an explosion of sound and I wanted words that would make people feel it. Or something lol I thank you again for always giving me feedback on my pieces. Much love.
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then One cannot be broken.

  

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Time
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Tue Jan-27-09 01:46 PM

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loved this all the way through..
could defintely see you spittin this in a cypher and scorching the circle for the next emcee

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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Wed Jan-28-09 12:21 PM

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Thank you, Time!
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then One cannot be broken.

  

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ASIEM
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9. "RE: I. Vixen"
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wow u r back and with a venom ur work always makes the vocab increase in new perceptions of verbage taken for granted often besides your passion peeks thru yet again
where u been at?

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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Intrepid Vixen
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11. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Asiem, I lost my password when I switched internet providers back in '05 and I remember telling one of my friends it's gonna come back to me in a dream and lo and behold, you know it did. lol But, I'm back now! YAY!
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then One cannot be broken.

  

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ASIEM
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12. "RE: I. Vixen"
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cause veracious is precisely best here

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




www.myspace.com/asiem61

  

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WILDOUT
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13. "RE: I. Vixen"
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don't have time to read this right now
but I will.

It's been way too long
when i saw your name i was like

Dope
she's back!

  

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I think ASIEM just ^UpPeD^ this from the dungeons of "February '09" ... She ain't back -- -- (At least I didn't think so) ... but I wish she were ... and I wish I had seen this earlier ... but better late than never. Her work always had a creative (((SHINE))) that tickled my imagination and made me *smile*

I miss her! -- *sigh*





A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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15. "RE: I. Vixen"
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this made me smile.. reminiscent of something from my past. and thats a good thing.

congrats. great piece.

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Intrepid Vixen
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16. "RE: I. Vixen"
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I's BACKKKK!!! Again, I lapse. I admit it. It's terrible of me. I am going to make the effort to stay on here! Who dusted this off?? I was like whatttttt???? Hahahahaha Thank you for the look most definitely for all of your comments.
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then One cannot be broken.

  

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WILDOUT
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19. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Gang your finally back
i'll be lookin out

  

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17. "*rubs eyes* I could have sworn I responded to this..."
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"speech-tacular" has got to be my favorite wordplay used in this... Definitely a good read... *nods*

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ASIEM
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18. "RE: I. Vixen"
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in many ways i was vexed by u as in perplexed astoyour appearance disappearance but i must say i understand i did the same a coupletimes...it is always wonderfilled to see writters reappear after being away i get to admire you all overagain...there is much new talent herein look forward to seeing you in action again. this piece represents u well full flavored beast

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




www.myspace.com/asiem61

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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21. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Awww, thank you for welcoming me back! I've been on here trying to catch up and read and filling my spirit with the love up in here. 2010!!! And I hope is a wonderful, prosperous year for us all!
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Universadevine
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20. "Damn! Ms V"
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That some crazy verbal spitish.

DOPENESS!!
I's likes your flow and wordage.
I dunno how I missed this one?? ?


Chosen me choses you.

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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22. "RE: Damn! Ms V"
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Thank ya, ma'am. This is an old piece but written like 5 years ago and I recently decided to write its companion piece to it a few months ago. It's on here somewhere if I can find it. I appreciate the look.
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ASIEM
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23. "RE: I. Vixen"
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Vixen after reading this thread I see this is something familiar to have many miss you and again outta nowhere you appear as welcome as before must be the Vixen in you or is it the Intrepid hence a female fox or Resolutely courageous; fearless. no it's the combination who can resist that? Good to see you posting when can we expect some work?

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




www.myspace.com/asiem61

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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24. "RE: I. Vixen"
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*virtual hug* Yours was the first piece that I read. It's been too long. I'm writing a lot. Songs, poetry, stories. Goodness...words are flowing like a faucet. I had to come back. I'm working on some things now. I hope to have something up today. how are you dear friend? What a wonderful New Year's Day indeed.
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then One cannot be broken.

  

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