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godsweat
Member since Jan 16th 2008
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Tue Sep-02-08 10:05 PM

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"the corner"
Tue Sep-02-08 10:07 PM by godsweat

  

          

it's so street
where the road and the tires meet
so hit the deck or get hit in the chest
when them tires screech
where two strikers with priors
sleep when the buyers sleep
could be home, a box or office,
when oz and the wire meet
preach
i couldn't be reached in the choir seats
i was in dire need
did what was required to eat
oscar robertson
was who i aspired to be
lead the league in feeds
then retire to the beach
frequent flyer
could be found in them higher seats
cinnamon haze, minimum wage
wouldn't hire me
even if they did
i would quit for they fired me
a no call, no show
it don't require speech
those just the writer's feats
i'll ride on your entire fleet
iron leaves attire creased
but, i'm anti-static like dryer sheets
you dudes tired and weak
and entitled to beef
biters of speech
heats'll cause your vitals to cease
r.i. peace

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
RE: the corner
Sep 03rd 2008
1
RE: the corner
Sep 03rd 2008
2
RE: the corner
Sep 04th 2008
3
yeah i can feel it
Sep 06th 2008
4
the corner
Sep 07th 2008
5

wonluv
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Wed Sep-03-08 08:16 AM

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1. "RE: the corner"
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dope...u make me wanna write...good stuff man

~sicknature~ My financial skills/discipline need Jesus. -J-Skivvy

****We need more Pharoahe Monch!!!****

  

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phelonious
Member since May 21st 2005
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Wed Sep-03-08 05:44 PM

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2. "RE: the corner"
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>it's so street
>where the road and the tires meet
>so hit the deck or get hit in the chest
>when them tires screech
>where two strikers with priors
>sleep when the buyers sleep
>could be home, a box or office,


This is a real strong opening. You're doing a real good job of playing off a literal meaning with a figurative meaning...Real flexible and attention grabbing......

http://www.youtube.com/user/cierno?feature=mhee


Check it out

  

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HueyNewton
Member since Feb 27th 2005
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Thu Sep-04-08 05:20 PM

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3. "RE: the corner"
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pure realness on the mic . . hip-hop!!!!!!!!!!!!

still struggle like the art form
-xxx

they showed us phYsically, we could reach infinitY, but mentally, through the century, we lost our identitY
-Rakim

  

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Rajeniro757
Member since Jun 08th 2003
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Sat Sep-06-08 08:08 AM

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4. "yeah i can feel it"
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you had some real lines in this piece

R.I.P. Martin alexander (Marty Gra) Alston - my brother, my mentor , my friend-

  

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godsweat
Member since Jan 16th 2008
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Sun Sep-07-08 10:01 PM

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5. "the corner"
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ppreciate the looks board...i'm will continue to plug away!!

  

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