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tonka truck
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"gotta let me go"


          

they tired to erase me
they tired to steal my glory
they tired to make me look fake see
but humbley i return fire

they tired to kill me
they tired to purchase me
they tired to dirty sexy money cover me
but infected thier main frame burn'n desire

open'n up a live wire and sparks hire
bullet shells hit me in the chest taking me higher
asking lord or lords Jesus to mummfle a dreamer
ammit sword but i was ignored it struck grills of hummers

leaving them choken on side of the road burners
2 fingers was the bringer of life passenger
pass'n azure gates after life under
ground known as oser mason ruler

evil scales splita a thug nigga nwa animal road runner
jaw breaker see a clevelander snoop dog pounded well rounded
ducking lulu's sickles now thier in a pickle africa's horn
feels the ripples from lone star fire controled by water

nuturing the earth doctors even feared my rebirth born star
slipping m's purple hills in my armory shield asking
themselve how was i healed kneeling infront of the white powder
white power memory buddha leaking from long last hour

body was shaken i was awaken no mistaken walking on laws
tiger claws rip'n astral plains playing temple egyptain games
last think on mind is fame taging toes with pain in moms heart
pops carrying a fathers feather in the dark eyes on the mark

shannon sharpe catches lies no more why i wasn't signed
but confined while murders went free can't let liberty fuck me
this ain't my story just humility of an beat my own dick
gotta admit i'm sick but last time sperm flicks "howcome?"

"judge king, officer shepard"

they tired to erase me
they tired to steal my glory
they tired to make me look fake see
but humbley i return fire

they tired to kill me
they tired to purchase me
they tired to dirty sexy money cover me
but infected thier main frame burn'n desire

\\\\\\\\\\death upon my enemies///////////

dragon means:
mylordTE-TE
THEENDTOEVERYTHING

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
onsen
Mar 25th 2008
1
RE: onsen
Mar 26th 2008
2
      RE: boutdammtimme
Mar 26th 2008
3
           RE: boutdammtimme
Mar 28th 2008
4
                RE: boutdammtimme
Mar 30th 2008
5
                     RE: boutdammtimme
Mar 31st 2008
6
                          a rappas de light
Mar 31st 2008
7
                               RE: a rappas de light
Apr 01st 2008
8
                                    Bitchpleez
Apr 01st 2008
9
                                         RE: Bitchpleez
Apr 01st 2008
10
                                              '10 inch rim ryder
Apr 01st 2008
11
                                                   RE: '10 inch rim ryder
Apr 01st 2008
12
                                                        LOL
Apr 02nd 2008
13
                                                             RE: LOL
Apr 02nd 2008
14
                                                                  Pornlip
Apr 02nd 2008
15
                                                                       RE: rabbit pebbles 4 brains
Apr 02nd 2008
16
                                                                            identity crisis
Apr 03rd 2008
17
I liked this
Apr 03rd 2008
18
Returned Exchanged No Refunds?
Apr 15th 2008
19
RE: gotta let me go
Apr 21st 2008
20
RE: gotta let me go
Apr 21st 2008
21

Babynoon
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1. "onsen"
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the ultimate kozui to put out a kaji-im notta jap'but king?

there once was ever a burn to kill this feel'and it is real
the crane fell from the building
each brick of my labor sent my soulback to its savior'
Kami sama is the green kusa by your fence'point in case (see)
they didnt make her-she chocolate him or he'God did tete

i left forever today to not want for nothing'you;you;or you
or tha truck.

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tonka truck
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2. "RE: onsen"
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i'm so over you sarah marshall

haha
nice peace but what you do when you find out it's been your family the ones stealing from you causing you to fall?

you destory them like you do the other enemies
please forgive me but you'll never hear from me or see me again
off to the big top

  

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3. "RE: boutdammtimme"
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........trapezetimme.....TTUTT

im too off to the hills, but forget you benny'it was gymnastically fantastic on sum assstick

over you aint no sleep missing in action'just relax kid.

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4. "RE: boutdammtimme"
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what?
still crazy as usual
but i guess i'm getting to like it.
why not we all are different aren't we lol
anyway wuz up
i see you must miss me if you keep writing love letters smirk
akward shady eyes in a way i love you to
that's where i'm at the city for lovers and i'm feeling the board walk breeze

see yeah

holla

  

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5. "RE: boutdammtimme"
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people be makin me mayid(ghettobonics)lol

u luh dat stuff don't u? battinmy eyes face tilted arms folded tappin my heels.lol

loves foul sweetness

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6. "RE: boutdammtimme"
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decompose apple peels
va LPN license who would steal
attempting 2 kill
a career minded iron will
family games fuck a recording deal
stabbing high heels
into stalker hearts how does it feel
what i gotta do to be healed
from this 8 year bill
board collapse a lung and watch all these bitches be sprung
hung gar on my come shots strung out crack headschasing that roc
you mock me but this is the end of child's destiny child
and rob wild fuck em all leyt'm all die
fuck the money it's pass big faces
as the meat from my fingers get caught in your braces

  

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7. "a rappas de light"
In response to Reply # 6
Mon Mar-31-08 08:23 PM by Babynoon

          

why go there? u lost me on reply tah 5

u ok?anyway.......Truckboy

fish a hook rot out'fuck in a mouth bitches be stale
They be stir fried stink stint'whatevers your hell make a hit to sale'press hot on tails
fuck yah hoar'i got knocked up by Dell
Cyber stalker youdahone tah go to jail'you got lit after bail by Big Deal Shruggin Shoulders'promote this'
keep it real'fuck how u feel
Bitches need tah keep it real n' tha mahhhfuckin Vill villan vendetta vermin verbin lacey you traced she'
Butt face u crazy!
sniff your daisies'mockin birds space seed'have them babies
Cum in where you're wanted'don't feel like being bothered'
Get strung out Budah' yah souls to old in grimmie'they gonna know so stop tryin to out shine she'
if u wan test call them haters'
Beta to upgrade u and throw yah steez in a crater'deeply burried
question: do you believe in slowing ur hurry???? oo oo

I just busted your cherrynmouth'pop lockin on worry?
break it down'
Don't u
W
O
R
R
Y

it'll be over'this was a coutesy.

EDIT: cyber genetic gynnastics part 90000600...............000 inf.

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8. "RE: a rappas de light"
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look under the sack
and find no nuts
so what you misfits don't get it
and i'm covered in your vanity
hell isn't angery it's the people
attempting 2 out shine TT
little cops crawl like capers in yogurt
i wish it was over
lifes lesson
stop wearing guess
and put on a dress
because she ain't fresh and she ain't clean
it's just a contusion
that had her brain moving
to the scrotum
upgrade
or degraded
i really don't think i'm
W
O
R
R
I
E
D
about being engraved slain slaid and laid in a grave
of marbles that's the best company any way because
father will make them speak even if my soul is the west coast tormentor

but hey check out myspace.com/ladysnoblood new video

no respect
no hand checks
and you pussy smells like deep fried bird neck stew dropping on a sunrise wet beach

bitch have a nice day

don't pray for me because i'm not into kneeling at the alter

  

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9. "Bitchpleez"
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Blockbusters called'ringin ur nuts bitch I got the squeeze'
Don't try to erect more bullshit'flush that kindof shit in ur beach kid'

bitchplease

you tired of kneelin?boutdammmtime'a new profession hun?'lol
pray that the next job keeps ur mouth suckin life than deathcome'
here's a verse
"kiss my converse!"
kill the common connect the dayafter effects das yah microsoft check'
Virus ironically hackin ur zest'somethin smellin fowl? its seeds on ur lips
check urself'that dicks undercover'find ya lover

im tired
of lettin go

I've let it go
let me grow
I let u know

I let it go

now how's this yo?
you back fo mo

bitchplease

im drowning to let go
im prouder if you know

hell aint far to go'

bitchplease

boutttdamtimme u let it grow.

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10. "RE: Bitchpleez"
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fo sho you want mo
of that haldol o no
your crazy don't no
what to call you a gent or a lady
but i guess baby fits
yo profile because yo mouth is defile
that's wht's smelling fowl
at noon one after noon a noon got struck
now all this ho want to do is suck
i see twinking off your words
because i left your jaw broke on a curb
and the verbs drizzle hemoptasis
but no dazzle come backs
you remind me of horse shack
bad boy mace
all up in yo face
and i'm glad you embrace the welcome
but you didn't wipe your lone star card
and got swipe up under the
heading fuck yo ring and the wedding
even thought i am the best man
i wouldn't even let you hold my dick in yo hand
your enemies are your number one fan
that make the blades run
threw your torso
kicking you back to the 80's
grab a kango
wonder womens lasso
and snatch up a big bird asshole
even macco can't fix it
it's finished
nice protraying to be innocent
common wealth for a common scent fire cold
now duck dodge balls and roll

you've been out shine
going 4 mines
where's your nines
moore tattoo jibber slabber
hollar not for a dollor but four a nut job

in yo mouth-e 40
you don't know me fam

  

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11. "'10 inch rim ryder"
In response to Reply # 10
Tue Apr-01-08 01:59 PM by Babynoon

          

Low rydin ur tonnka junk on 10inch rims spinnin'thinkin u hot
They think not'innocent who? u tried to plot'
ur mouth fowl smellin ur pork n bean fart'ur assmouf rots
im as innocent as your wallpaper profiled changeable face coverups'
im as innocent as you having sex with your ex's mother'

You the low down n dirty'i just know the who you is'
you know the I is'
but I don't want $1 to give'to u ur last meal at mind your Biz'
they serving trash combos again'

im half woman half not takin yo shit'
my pussy is allergic to wack dicks that pull tricks'

straight bitch
straight gat wimp'
pop ur own lips
they look monkey like chimps'

im crazy
im crazy

yeah

you're insane b

and im crazy 4 anticipat-in'
after ur insanity prognosis'true b

The diagnosis to tete:
you lack closure'enjoy yah pitty party wack-free'te te lean back-free

im half woman
half findin u worthless'

find ur nut sack in a snickerbar'i can sale that for free'
make $0. a transfer sent to ur banco'
nig u gotsta go!





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12. "RE: '10 inch rim ryder"
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april fool and you must be the joke
riding on rubberburner and stanking thunnder pop pa wheelies
with no spokes you tiny pussy can't save willie
just like ike made tina your just a cherry turner dope

yes you are i'm addicted pseudo
to the way other nigga's get it
salvation screaming army revolving door
you never get it hoar enough grab the soap

if your boared

and say my name while strokes in tubes
why cliff pick pack clubs strum lining chicks
who claim they so innocent but at ever other corner
they bent and getting cheeks smack gobbling dicks

baby you've been drinking to much lil kim
stay off the rim and those retarded sundowner punch bowels
and roll up your sleeve and get with this zero

coming from half woman half niggro
what that make you dike

elbow deep but i ain't no captin save a ho
even though i got the anker and you the one with the simplex shanker
cold soar on your up treason just because you want to be on my lable
i see your easy just what is the meaning

behind

i hate you
i love you
bipolar
B

yeah hold this.

peace who ever you are and if your name don't began with my get lost!



  

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13. "LOL"
In response to Reply # 12
Wed Apr-02-08 11:50 AM by Babynoon

          

pardon me lilwillie I mean pop a millie bitch still fakin like vanilli'vanilla,but sour come shots meltin ur mans mouth'peace is ceased
you got nerve to breathe'after Christ
I tried to save your wife if I had a dick trust atleast id do it right'put it in right

lol damn

fix your agender and your gender malefem hermanthadites made you'
and we question "so What u are?"

Please get help your mind is sicker than rabbis sicker than ur male friend havin ur baby'hermandite typo click
you wan dis try again if im a dike than you're next kin'

I touched one pussy and this is it'
and it came wishing you went'north to the end and fell off'
Dikes no disrespect,but this dick's blamin me for the rise he could never deliver'
so remember him or shim shehim faggot limp mr.tonkapinto a nosie cyber ho'

Lil kim swallowed cans you would know, but to compare makes you suspect'uve been fucked n ur mouthhole'each word stinkier than the shit u wrote last go'
whatevers next flush the hurt in stoolheart'im sendin whocares in regards.

Edit: im pray n that u wake up soon.....before noon gets mad atchu.


I know them buttons

check MJB's track ROSES! I dedicate it to you sweetheart.

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14. "RE: LOL"
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str. off the chain gang
and base heads bang
i see you standing infront of the seven 11
open all night wit fangs
dripping white owl peach
so what i sleep naked on the beach
but you need to change your dialog
because your pencil is bog
down with perverted sound
effects you got a man but why you keep coming around because
i'm keeping you so so so wet
and i don't have to clear a dam thing up
but i don't fuck wit the same sex
leaving you eye lids vex
this ain't no voo doo who do
hex i'm the first to accept christ
as savoir of life and god's son
but i'm not they one 2 claim i'm a christian
leading wit curse words and flipping birds to get bye
i don't try to blend
i don't pretend to be something i know nothing about
that's why i shout and blow buddha from my lungs
king knog couldn't even handle this dragon
lost wieght now my pants saggin
no i'm not bragging i got a big one
or a stiff one i'm a realist
you just want to feel this
penis the realist nigga you ever came in contact
and i ain't even blow out your back
so why don't you stay off my sack
or just roll it up between your tongue
i'm done

queen elizabeth- to the top next drop drop it hot
and rub it on you belly i really don't believe your a lady a man
that is confuse

i'm looking for a woman
no a she be he be

nice .org
you should do porn key west chi-town bump on

  

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15. "Pornlip"
In response to Reply # 14


          

.....track record you've been redirected'
don't attempt to reroute me or thee they know who she could be'retro or eccentrically this right here is the O C old see'

let it be
let it be

your dickhead can't help them or me'keep the infected in check
Dr.Nuki Yaki wants you checked again T'
remember not to die from sex Te'
perverted?who? if I wan it I can get it'but rather airsex 8yrs moreover'
mind write some knew scripts cause this right here is not it.


ROSES M.J.B
dedicated to you

love sent always

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16. "RE: rabbit pebbles 4 brains"
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you say i was redirected
hey got to respect it
who am i attempting 2 save
you ain't a slave
and the rest of them are brave
concave blood cells
waiting for band rebel sickle sells
make red spots on fronts of hoods
i no that i ain't no good
wit this rapping and stuff
but until you had enough
you ain't got no choice but to listen
jesus was not god
didn't even carry a rod
like moses you already know this
but at least if i believe he was ressurrected
like osirius and lazurus demon then my faith has meaning
trinity triad the three holy or some same pure ones
i'm really tired of you talking that scum suicide alley cat talk
if you the person you say you are just walk the walk
i place you in a school girl chalk check the box
if you want to get down
but all you do is clown
you must be a lonely old person with nothing else to do
yeah i boo who because i'm homeless
wit a lpn license but it ain't in my hand
a paralegal but ain't got a motion to stand
on haven't eat a full course meal in about a week
but i ain't week and my sneekers starting to squeek
when on the run but i ain't done and i refuse to plea bargin
wit a cops following around the block
i come here to speak my mind and all you spill is cock
come follow me you say if you want it you can have it
but i haven't even seen it the trust the honesty
your personality just alot of brandy bunch
thongs stuck on a computer screen i use to get mean
and dawg people for fun butknow i refuse to pull the trigger of a gun
never saw a picture of you if your taller then five two
or fatter then 122 then i'm threw
you talk about the company you keep yo crew drinkers
you a all day smoker i'm not down for that
infact i don't even know why i mumble at all
i accept the defeat and humbley fall
so why don't you call ems
and brag and say your the best
i've been trusted with some much less
but soon babynoon i'ma have so much more
and i don't hope i'm for sure
being poor is part of the struggle
my god the dragon i believe chest tize his childern before the be reward to make sure thier worthy to be praised
i don't care if people say i'm gay
i'll find friends one day
i tossed awy those whos say they love me
mainly family they don't call me
the set me up to take the dump
in the bushes and they want me to support thier vision come on you must be kinding you want to be real with me you want to feel me
i paid the fee for VA nursing license but guess what
my so called family wouldn't even give up because i got it sent to thier address what a mess w-2 papers too trashed in a garbage can zoo
haven't seen you know who for approx 8 years my daughter really don't know the exact time from blurred eye sight from to many tear
nobody cares except my moms and i hate putting her threw this
yeah i'm the youngest and i know it's breaking her heart
specially when dallas police hand gator a dart in the dark for litter
it kilt her can you remember the journey from chi town to motor city even then no one showed me pitty couldn't spare a penny
but yet i didn't still or kill for money i just went hungery in soup lines but i smile and say everythings fine now you come attempting to play mind games for a little bit of fame bring it let it rain
i use to it but you know this well i hope you do
everything i write on here is true turn down for jobs because of 16year old out dated theft charges father was murdered when i was two
but i grew now i post raps and in the mist of it the computer collapse and it's gone what's up wit that i started making beat
and somebody stole my recipe you talking about just let it be why wont they let me be the stole mom's money that she gave to me for christmas when i was staying in the deluxe motel who i'm tell they say i'm a thug a mence but it at finish craved in granite
but i fanilly understand it i ain't no bandit but the rob me
pilgrims pride they wouldn't even let my videos ride on myspace all the hard work no response from nobody but a chick that thinks shes it
not but you don't see me climbing to the top emipre state building waiting to drop because it's all a plot to break ones spirit and covert you into what they want you to be but i be god dam if it's going to happen fuck my family except my mom fuck those stealing my videos, my beats my rap sheet,fuck those church people saying they care i rather get but fucked by a big bear he was once here
hello are you listen you think i'm tripping but in all fairness i wish death upon every body who stir the pot
and that's that keep being smart and i'll blow a silemt fart
and you'll never here from me again

itire to give you props but you to big for your britches

peace out
holla
at you later
if i feel like it

  

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17. "identity crisis"
In response to Reply # 16
Thu Apr-03-08 11:56 AM by Babynoon

          

oh
when you feel like it'

if I feel like being bothered, that is





Life's wierdly rhetorical'to add again my wall is thick not hollow
My ego is as big as a hair follicle'
if this bothers you

reroute your crew they're feelin blackangels'im white like Charlies Angels and you call me dangerous???
ur whole crew of faces r venomous'i got bit so i'm forminpuss? plus ur the genius and I never accepted anything meaningless'
all I do eventually make sense or cents,but for this riot we're rankin ish'

this was useless
no one needed
to peepthis

and I put this where they shouldn't have 2see it'but u got the great gift so they must see this ishhhhhhhhhhhh.


endedit
no editing P dot S n

I do get ur motto sum objections,but n do time the wrong was so right.

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18. "I liked this"
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especially the repetition - on that, I think you can omit the "They tried to" from the preceding stanzas after the 1st line. I think it will be just as powerful, and will make your language more precise.

On the positive side, I really LOVE the rhythm you develope here, and the metaphors and similies are clever and on point too.

Thanks for sharing.

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19. "Returned Exchanged No Refunds?"
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Hey what's happenin'Rog?

I came n to check the re-runs and the ish's eye fun' reading our little battle under the sun
No hard feelings we've watered the small fire'
that's what I like'i bought a ticket to battle, but needed a refund'
your product aint hittin'your rap is for dumb bitches'thats why i don't get it'
im not the one don't get sensitive'ur cross eye keep it focused'im not lookin and you're still booking? lol

I won
not you kid'

I brung the hit list' you got sprung by my word gun'
they got you done

we found your feet on a run'we shot your mind with death thoughts when your ryhme comes

u r done! done done ((echoed))

'your shits been off beat til the Sam Man got down and out tapped your try 'like stop
You still get Booooo oooooo off eachtime'bye bye

I came to drop u a line'you can never ryhme'Ezzential notices too that you're a waste of all womens time'
Get another boyfriend and you will be fine.

loll

I love you bitchass
Fuck u

Edit: Add

ps: yeah im distasteful to you cause I had to hate you'it was written.

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20. "RE: gotta let me go"
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ya'll two
come on
shit
was funy
no fairy tail endings ever happen in new york
VA is for pirate lovers of plundering shark fins

soup anybody

"nice"
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pull


the truck was towed from times sq. to shadeyville......fx.

thank you
4uplifting this masqurade

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