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Ezzsential
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"i need feed back!"


  

          

www.loud.com/ezzsentialsoul

what u think of my first BATTLE rhyme? be honest





shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
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well...
Mar 28th 2007
1
yeah im listenin to otha cats on there
Mar 28th 2007
2
FAM!!! i gotta rep for the femalez forreal!!!!
Mar 28th 2007
3
heres what i think of myself lol
Mar 28th 2007
4
hmmm
Mar 28th 2007
5
      theres this one cat on there
Mar 28th 2007
6
           RE: theres this one cat on there
Mar 29th 2007
7
I'm listening to Cum Original
Mar 29th 2007
8
thanks lol
Mar 29th 2007
11
RE: i need feed back!
Mar 29th 2007
9
are u saying theyre wack?
Mar 29th 2007
10
RE: i need feed back!
Mar 29th 2007
12
RE: i need feed back!
Mar 29th 2007
13
RE: i need feed back!
Mar 29th 2007
14
yeah
Mar 30th 2007
15
      RE: yeah
Mar 30th 2007
16
           rofl
Mar 30th 2007
17
aight its like this
Mar 30th 2007
18
i posed new trax
Mar 30th 2007
19
RE: i need feed back!
Mar 31st 2007
20
yeah its not
Apr 02nd 2007
21
      added new trax show me love please!
Apr 02nd 2007
22

SONO DEF
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Wed Mar-28-07 08:36 PM

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1. "well..."
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i'm not much of a battler, but i'll say it was pretty good, we all got some improveing to do, so keep it up, not bad at all

SONO MEANS I AM, ARE YOU?...

  

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Ezzsential
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Wed Mar-28-07 08:45 PM

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2. "yeah im listenin to otha cats on there"
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and they re good.. but its just inspiring me to come harder nahmean?

its ampin me forreaL~! (rubbin hands)

i luv battlin and i aint scurred eitha =P



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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Ezzsential
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Wed Mar-28-07 11:12 PM

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3. "FAM!!! i gotta rep for the femalez forreal!!!!"
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gimme some advice forreal




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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Ezzsential
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Wed Mar-28-07 11:14 PM

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4. "heres what i think of myself lol"
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my delivery needs work

lyrically im pretty good..

im not sayin im all that..
BUT MY DELIVERY!!!!!!!!grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr ima practice...



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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SONO DEF
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Wed Mar-28-07 11:22 PM

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5. "hmmm"
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I guess i dont need to tell you to sound angry.
Try listening to Tupac's hit em up, that'll heat you up, it always gets me heated in a way. But yeah, sound angry,haha

SONO MEANS I AM, ARE YOU?...

  

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Ezzsential
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Wed Mar-28-07 11:30 PM

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6. "theres this one cat on there"
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www.loud.com/DelBugotti

hes fuckin hot yo, but on the delivery

i mean his bars are sick but hes not that original

its like i heard cats that spit like him before so many times

but he is hot so i gotta step my game up



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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SONO DEF
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Thu Mar-29-07 11:29 AM

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7. "RE: theres this one cat on there"
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keep practicing, you'll get where you need to be

SONO MEANS I AM, ARE YOU?...

  

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empro
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Thu Mar-29-07 01:55 PM

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8. "I'm listening to Cum Original"
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Your lyrics are dope as hell

But you do sound a little off beat with the track at certain spots, but I think you've got great potental to be up there with Jean Grae once you get it down to a science

Solid playa, very solid indeed

  

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Ezzsential
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11. "thanks lol"
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playa


shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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tonka truck
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Thu Mar-29-07 04:00 PM

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9. "RE: i need feed back!"
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i would give feed back but i couldn't figure out what the hell was going on! first it stalled then it said person had no rap so i saud fuck that but i could tell they be wack? the lack depth and back bone
clones!


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The End - To Everybody

  

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Ezzsential
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Thu Mar-29-07 06:56 PM

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10. "are u saying theyre wack?"
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if so i appreciate the honest feedback
i KNOW i gotta work on my deliv.. ima bumop it up tho










peace




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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knowledge3754
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Thu Mar-29-07 07:05 PM

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12. "RE: i need feed back!"
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send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO

get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were much better than that last joint. delivery was much better, you actually sounded excited a bit

cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin with the other joint.

overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never sound like your talking. and your punches should be accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for punches, they should jump out at me.

as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood. imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint blank period
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Ezzsential
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Thu Mar-29-07 11:47 PM

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13. "RE: i need feed back!"
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hmm interesting

i thought that send in the contenders had the most punches

maybe it was my deliv but i did it over (the site doesnt let u delete once u finished.. so i just redid it on pt 2)

cum original-damn dog, that shit had some killaz..

u liked get lifted? i thought that wasnt direct at all but yeah deliv was amped.. that verse is OLD as hell that is prolly why cuz i didnt read it

aiight tho.. good advice cuz fuck that im in it to win it

and i have fun doin this shit so good looks


i just hope it doesnt take me months to get a rap deliv right

but maybe i should just use the fuckin deliv style i had in get lifted


>send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO
>
>get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were
>much better than that last joint. delivery was much better,
>you actually sounded excited a bit
>
>cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin
>with the other joint.
>
>overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it
>tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my
>style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle
>tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never
>sound like your talking. and your punches should be
>accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for
>punches, they should jump out at me.
>
>as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the
>rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a
>battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood.
>imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they
>oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint
>blank period










shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Thu Mar-29-07 11:58 PM

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14. "RE: i need feed back!"
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I like your beats Missy -- AND your flows! -- -- (But I'm no battlecat, nor a freestylist, so my feedback would be kinda different)

That particular board you're on seems to have quite a few heads who can school you with pointers for voice control & flowing with a vengeance -- ~BattleGallakSteeze~

And thats another way to let off steam -- *Like working on a punching bag in the gymn* -- Takin' frustration OUT on the bag! -- -- So I'm all for it cuz it's just another form of therapy, along with creativity.

Your lyrics are tight -- fresh -- and on point, and you have a delightful voice, so go 4 it!!!


You ARE pretty "hungry" for attention right now tho -- (Under the circumstances) -- So please don't get hooked ^UP^ with any of those fellas on that board and complicate your shituation any more than it already is, aaiight?


*Peace Sis*








A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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15. "yeah"
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what u said lol!

na im playin but its like this i aint puttin my pics up there to let peeps see me.. i dont want a man from there. lol



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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Fri Mar-30-07 02:54 PM

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16. "RE: yeah"
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what?
i'm a dragon inter scoping
show boating is not me snooping
in the corner for that one burner
that hea turner that is real fire i'll become a liar
and sell my freedom for a life time of bliss
death to a kiss fuck hip hop and my pen it make me sin on a daily
but ou go ahead lady swing that sword
and dye bye the metaphors
no matter what i can't be ignore even if i still was asleep
and snore god lord
will take care of me

fuck fighting in mudd i'm a loving thug on 02 i need you? ha

get wit it let you pussy lips hang all over battle cats battle raps how you like that!

Freeworld Order
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Ezzsential
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17. "rofl"
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sometimes i duno where u be comin up wit that shit ff foreal lmaoo

but na i just posted sum new trax tell me what chu think..

damn i need to get up on my deliv



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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Ezzsential
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18. "aight its like this"
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wait until cats talk shit its gona piss me off
u guys seen me do this for for years
so show me sum love!!!

make a profile and show love
or join in yourself

i love u guys-showed ya luv on my page



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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Ezzsential
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19. "i posed new trax"
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peep em i have like 4 now..

(some are messed up but thats only cuz they dont let u erase them? so i just had to remake them)

thanks guys

oh and i already wrote my peice for the PROM

1



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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willi_dudat
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20. "RE: i need feed back!"
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your lyrics are awesome... you gotta get your delivery up tho... you slip of the beat alot and it doesn't really sound intentional... i'm rootin for ya sis... respect...

over and out
du

"It's the return of the gangsta, thanks ta..."

-du

  

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Ezzsential
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21. "yeah its not"
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alot of the deal is that I have to fit my verse into their timed shit and also use their beats.. theyre kinda cliche
i need more drum and bass or soemthing
but thanks for the compliment



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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22. "added new trax show me love please!"
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shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html

  

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