I guess i dont need to tell you to sound angry. Try listening to Tupac's hit em up, that'll heat you up, it always gets me heated in a way. But yeah, sound angry,haha
8. "I'm listening to Cum Original" In response to Reply # 0
Your lyrics are dope as hell
But you do sound a little off beat with the track at certain spots, but I think you've got great potental to be up there with Jean Grae once you get it down to a science
9. "RE: i need feed back!" In response to Reply # 0
i would give feed back but i couldn't figure out what the hell was going on! first it stalled then it said person had no rap so i saud fuck that but i could tell they be wack? the lack depth and back bone clones!
12. "RE: i need feed back!" In response to Reply # 0
send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO
get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were much better than that last joint. delivery was much better, you actually sounded excited a bit
cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin with the other joint.
overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never sound like your talking. and your punches should be accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for punches, they should jump out at me.
as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood. imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint blank period --------------------------------- http://www.myspace.com/ItstheUnion <---The Union=my group download the advance Manifesto here: http://www.zshare.net/download/unionomics-zip.html my words could save the world, but they're not reflexive/ for so many that
13. "RE: i need feed back!" In response to Reply # 12
hmm interesting
i thought that send in the contenders had the most punches
maybe it was my deliv but i did it over (the site doesnt let u delete once u finished.. so i just redid it on pt 2)
cum original-damn dog, that shit had some killaz..
u liked get lifted? i thought that wasnt direct at all but yeah deliv was amped.. that verse is OLD as hell that is prolly why cuz i didnt read it
aiight tho.. good advice cuz fuck that im in it to win it
and i have fun doin this shit so good looks
i just hope it doesnt take me months to get a rap deliv right
but maybe i should just use the fuckin deliv style i had in get lifted
>send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO > >get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were >much better than that last joint. delivery was much better, >you actually sounded excited a bit > >cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin >with the other joint. > >overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it >tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my >style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle >tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never >sound like your talking. and your punches should be >accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for >punches, they should jump out at me. > >as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the >rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a >battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood. >imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they >oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint >blank period
shouldn't say it all or it will be taken stolen by the Devil God's my only vacation
14. "RE: i need feed back!" In response to Reply # 0
I like your beats Missy -- AND your flows! -- -- (But I'm no battlecat, nor a freestylist, so my feedback would be kinda different)
That particular board you're on seems to have quite a few heads who can school you with pointers for voice control & flowing with a vengeance -- ~BattleGallakSteeze~
And thats another way to let off steam -- *Like working on a punching bag in the gymn* -- Takin' frustration OUT on the bag! -- -- So I'm all for it cuz it's just another form of therapy, along with creativity.
Your lyrics are tight -- fresh -- and on point, and you have a delightful voice, so go 4 it!!!
You ARE pretty "hungry" for attention right now tho -- (Under the circumstances) -- So please don't get hooked ^UP^ with any of those fellas on that board and complicate your shituation any more than it already is, aaiight?
*Peace Sis*
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
what? i'm a dragon inter scoping show boating is not me snooping in the corner for that one burner that hea turner that is real fire i'll become a liar and sell my freedom for a life time of bliss death to a kiss fuck hip hop and my pen it make me sin on a daily but ou go ahead lady swing that sword and dye bye the metaphors no matter what i can't be ignore even if i still was asleep and snore god lord will take care of me
fuck fighting in mudd i'm a loving thug on 02 i need you? ha
get wit it let you pussy lips hang all over battle cats battle raps how you like that!
20. "RE: i need feed back!" In response to Reply # 0
your lyrics are awesome... you gotta get your delivery up tho... you slip of the beat alot and it doesn't really sound intentional... i'm rootin for ya sis... respect...
alot of the deal is that I have to fit my verse into their timed shit and also use their beats.. theyre kinda cliche i need more drum and bass or soemthing but thanks for the compliment
shouldn't say it all or it will be taken stolen by the Devil God's my only vacation
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-- (But I'm no battlecat, nor a freestylist, so my feedback would be kinda different)
-- So I'm all for it cuz it's just another form of therapy, along with creativity.
