I thought I won him
It was me who had been beat
Can't you tell I'm hurt

Open your door please
Challenge this thought to help me
Make it tangible

Taken in by you
I succumb to your black will
It is very sad

How is it to you?
You know, the degrees of love
Drives you crazy right?

"I'm scientific, but my reflex gangsta"- Black Thought

I enjoy them alot now....I dunno I guess cause I didn't have to put much effort into them lol

you make haiku real
easy to read so do more
and i will be there

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder

>you make haiku real
>easy to read so do more
>and i will be there

^^^^^Nice lol that made me giggle

I don't know how you missed me...I'm around!

very nice Pep. glad you did this. How do you feel?

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>very nice Pep. glad you did this. How do you feel?

Nice to see you came back to check up on me lol....I love em...can't get enough of em.

;)

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To change, we must face the dragon of our appetites with another dragon... the life-energy of our Soul...

Thank you mamas....means a lot coming from you.

I can tell you are straining a little bit to fit the format; wording things oddly to fit the meter. Keep at it, it will become more natural.

Hmmm I wouldnt call it straining...I meant for them to say that.....simple ones kinda bore me...it's like your just writing words down that don't make you think



Simple ones bore me
its like your just writing words
with no feeling there




I mean I understand the meaning of them....I guess if its not self explanatory it seems like im straining lol

But thank you for your input



>I can tell you are straining a little bit to fit the format;
>wording things oddly to fit the meter. Keep at it, it will
>become more natural.

-if i had my way
i would've been a killer
i would have given them
violence, violence
and shotguns shotguns
if i had my way-

I thought I won him
It was me who had been beat
Can't you tell I'm hurt

very much so...

*nods*

great 1st

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la simplicite a son mieux...

>I thought I won him
>It was me who had been beat
>Can't you tell I'm hurt
>
>very much so...
>
>*nods*
>
>great 1st

Thank you so much mamas...it came from real feelings....those are the ones that turn out the best...I'm sure ill have more to come because i haven't been doing well.

you suck fucking shit
talk about ass fucking please
that's what people want

Mike-4
Dean-2
Rupp- Dead and racist

Suck my fucking ass
Im telling you it taste great
Serves yo ass a plate

suck my big ol balls
they fit in your mouth just right
please suck them gently

Mike-4
Dean-2
Rupp- Dead and racist

Oh come on, be nice
I'm just a girl from Jersey
Getting her write on

i am so sorry
i never meant to offend
please do not hate me

Mike-4
Dean-2
Rupp- Dead and racist

awww yaay...

Im all Haikud out
I was worried for a sec
Happy Holidays

n/m

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I write stuff everyday



<--------Love at first sight....even my tongue couldn't help forming a heart.

I don't recognize your name, but then ... I've been away for a hottt minute.

Considering these were your FIRST haikus -- I'd say you done good! --

The fact that they have a meaty substance attached to the haiku meter rule makes it even more meaningful, nahmean?

*Good Job*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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I love that you enjoyed my Haikus...it wasnt that long ago i was asking how to do them lol

Yea I post mostly in GD.

>I don't recognize your name, but then ... I've been away for
>a hottt minute.
>
>Considering these were your FIRST haikus -- I'd say you done
>good! --

hehe

>The fact that they have a meaty substance attached to the
>haiku meter rule makes it even more meaningful, nahmean?

Yea mostly everything I right about has some meaningful behind it.....a lot of things I write come from strong emotion.

>*Good Job*

Thanx


<--------Love at first sight