the kids shrill over
the music, tagging each
other with super-soakers,

whipping through a street
littered with empty hug bottles
and candy wrappers

i stumble upon police
tape lining a neighborhood
where blaring speakers

are piled like totems
above the bodies
sweaty from riding back-

beats a Dj unleashes
from his makeshift booth
among the row houses'

warped wooden porches
of scattered dominoes
and shuffled cards

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"I used to walk through the valley
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clever. the first 2, or 3 I hope you don't edit. They pulled me i to a place, and minus police, I think I was there this morning.
These are senryu-like, envoking scenes and senses. Wonder what the final edits will bring in emotion.

">beats a Dj unleashes
>from his makeshift booth
>among the row houses'
>
>warped wooden porches
>of scattered dominoes
>and shuffled cards
>"

and that too.

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whipping through a street
littered with empty hug bottles
and candy wrappers

i stumble upon police
tape lining a neighborhood
where blaring speakers

are piled like totems
above the bodies

especially the above lines... Peace~

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Block Party (suggested title)

Small spelling question: Did you intentionally make houses a possessive?

Otherwise, thoroughly enjoyed

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First off, thanks Delrica for checking the piece. This came out of a writing exercise that Derrick and I did at 24/7 on Saturday. We called out five words to each other and came up with a poem on the spot using those five words. Secondly, yes, I did intentionally make houses possessive because of the the "warped wooden porches" on those houses.

Again, thanks for checking. Hopefully, I'll have something new to post up soon. Pacers!!

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First off, thanks Delrica for checking the piece. This came out of a writing exercise that Derrick and I did at 24/7 on Saturday. We called out five words to each other and came up with a poem on the spot using those five words. Secondly, yes, I did intentionally make houses possessive because of the the "warped wooden porches" on those houses.

Again, thanks for checking. Hopefully, I'll have something new to post up soon. Pacers!!

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"I used to walk through the valley
like Psalms 27"
--

First off, thanks Delrica for checking the piece. This came out of a writing exercise that Derrick and I did at 24/7 on Saturday. We called out five words to each other and came up with a poem on the spot using those five words. Secondly, yes, I did intentionally make houses possessive because of the the "warped wooden porches" on those houses.

Again, thanks for checking. Hopefully, I'll have something new to post up soon. Pacers!!

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"I used to walk through the valley
like Psalms 27"
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>where blaring speakers
>
>are piled like totems
>above the bodies

yes

soul.

Carisia, Dawn, and Keith shrill
over the music, tagging each other
with super-soakers, whipping
through a street littered with empty
hug bottles and candy wrappers

that's dope!, Derrick says
when we stumble upon
police tape lining a neighborhood
where blaring speakers are piled
like totems above sweaty bodies

riding backbeats a Dj unleashes
from his makeshift booth
among the warped wooden
porches of shuffled cards
and scattered dominoes

i was in the eighth grade when
my boy Adrian and i crashed
Ashli's party and refused to leave
'til we were chased away by her
older brother and some classmates

we barely escaped the ice water
hurled at us from a cooler, shrieking
as loud as the kids at this block party
on a street tourists skip over, looking
for the city they've seen in postcards

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"I used to walk through the valley
like Psalms 27"
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when i read it
meaning to say sumthing,
but i was rushing off to class

so, im back
& when u have the final final copy
send it
b/c i feel sum definite things here

i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel