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muted
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Wed Aug-23-06 11:30 PM

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"fye"
Wed Aug-23-06 11:46 PM by muted

          

cruising the highway
i experience an immediate high
as i exit i irrigate the air
with concrete bass rhythms
and crunked out saliva
that at this moment splatter
narcotic laced ignorance
across the outreached juts
of inner city row houses
and their innocent inhabitants
and since madam earth
has blessed this day with
the warmth of a mother's heart
the exterior is loaded with
perked ears with generationally
divided perceptions

my first glance is a vision
of the young man
representing an impressionable
state of mind
finding a thirst for my profane
showering of material conquest
still in his search for
the determinants of manhood
shamefully i feed his curiousity
with the impeccable flow
dictating a tall tale of gunfire
with fabricated funerals
the young man is soaking in
the liquified lyrical libations
while ignoring his
elders boring beckoning

the elder sits rocking
in a porched patio chair
with her mentality already positioned
to disregard anything i spray
in my impromptu driveby
yet my perception is of disrespect
but she spies all day on
my pre-concluded demographic
musically i tell about my habits
and her mirrored eyes dispise
the trebled highs
that bend twisted poetic
dispatchments of deragatory
female references
that burn deep beside
her past's abuses

abuses that cycled down
to her unexpecting daughter
who happens to be the model
whose experiences teach
the young man his role
yet her roles instructed
by this over sexualized
feminine verse
as the thump now
saturates the block
with her prideful admissions
of explicit undertakings
her canals numbed
her whole life soaked
in the material
that composes my spit

as philanges reach
to lower the volume
in attempts to reduce
the inevitable destruction
cooling the tide
yet its a theory that
the worst symptoms
beset upon the victim
in nearest vicinity
the actual father of the funk
can he possibly be
just a carrier of the trait
owner of the veins
that pump the disease
but its a certainty
he knows its just entertainment....

-whiz

muted.muxtape.com
(what i like)

  

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wow
Aug 30th 2006
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again
Aug 30th 2006
2
RE: fye
Dec 17th 2011
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ainra
Member since Aug 21st 2006
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Wed Aug-30-06 12:07 AM

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Nice!

  

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mindful
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Wed Aug-30-06 10:19 AM

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you are everything but muted...

i love the alliteration used found in the following lines:

the liquified lyrical libations
while ignoring his
elders boring beckoning

the elder sits rocking
in a porched patio chair
with her mentality already positioned
to disregard anything i spray
in my impromptu driveby
yet my perception is of disrespect
but she spies all day on
my pre-concluded demographic
musically i tell about my habits
and her mirrored eyes dispise
the trebled highs
that bend twisted poetic
dispatchments of deragatory
female references
that burn deep beside
her past's abuses

abuses that cycled down
to her unexpecting daughter
who happens to be the model
whose experiences teach
the young man his role

*nods* Peace~

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shalimarre.kar
Member since Dec 14th 2011
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Sat Dec-17-11 12:31 PM

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fyer

  

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