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ms mimi diva
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"good fairies"
Fri Aug-18-06 03:01 PM by ms mimi diva

  

          

Who killed little Miss America?
the flaxen haired
tawny curled beauty
that so many secretly adored?
Was it an
adulterous
slight
of hand
cutting through the night
or was
it the sight of her
an angel
freeze

framed

in her family photo?

innocence and knowledge
dancing on her forehead
like sizzling beads of sweat?

who will dance for us now
who will be the coveted dream
that no one has
but we all long for
like the ache to the tooth
before the good fairies come?

http://worthwatering.blogspot.com
Can it be I stayed away too long?/
Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/
It's not my thing trying to get back/
But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
yeh Akeela said it best...
Aug 18th 2006
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I Dunno About The Subject Title ...
Nov 30th 2006
2
RE: I Dunno About The Subject Title ...
Nov 30th 2006
3
      :::DARK FAIRIES' TALE:::
Nov 30th 2006
4

ASIEM
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Fri Aug-18-06 10:37 PM

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1. "yeh Akeela said it best..."
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"prestidigitation" and "Barby" was no more as she was before

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Thu Nov-30-06 12:07 AM

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2. "I Dunno About The Subject Title ..."
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But I like the concept and flow of this -- Yuuuup*

S'specially right here:

>innocence and knowledge
>dancing on her forehead
>like sizzling beads of sweat?

>who will dance for us now
>who will be the coveted dream
>that no one has
>but we all long for
>like the ache to the tooth
>before the good fairies come?

I mean -- I see where the fairies title comes from -- But I don't tie it in to the flow until the very end, nahmean?

Don't pay me no mind tho -- I need to take my butt to sleep! --




A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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ms mimi diva
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Thu Nov-30-06 12:49 PM

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3. "RE: I Dunno About The Subject Title ..."
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Thu Nov-30-06 12:53 PM by ms mimi diva

  

          

Thanks, Photo. I see what you mean. I'm not wedded to the title, either. It says something, but not really enough. I was considering something along the lines of "little mrs. america and the great toothache", but decided it would be cliche. This should read like a dark fairy tale. That's really what the Ramsey case is all about.

I'll put some more thought into it. Maybe another name will come up.

http://worthwatering.blogspot.com
Can it be I stayed away too long?/
Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/
It's not my thing trying to get back/
But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Thu Nov-30-06 12:55 PM

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4. ":::DARK FAIRIES' TALE:::"
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^That^ would've done it for me! -- *I Think*

Or something with a light but sinister~twisted~ironic take on it, nahmean?

But like I said -- I see where it tied in at the end -- I just found myself looking for the good fairies and there weren't any! --

Nice work nevertheless ...

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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