"The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop" Thu Jul-27-06 10:44 AM by mindful
I've not forgotten about the chasing dreams|catching butterflies series, this just came to me, and well... it would not have been right to brush it off...
The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop
I’m watching him Standing on bowed Legs and wondering Just how tall He must be. His pear eyes; Glazed with sadness Speak to me, Mooning me With years of Pain and I begin To feel sorrow for Him.
His head, a holding Space for movie Titles and rap songs; So conveniently attached to His long neck. He births a sigh Of rejection to Tell me he’s not Interested. And, I Become dust, blown away By an evening breeze.
1. "RE: The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop" In response to Reply # 0
His head, a holding Space for movie Titles and rap songs; So conveniently attached to His long neck.
you have added this nice little "jolt" to the smallest details that i'm really diggin...this was really solid tre...
you know i almost missed this becuz i thought i read it already(lol)...u and i have double the work on the boards...don't think that's happened for quite some time.
kima ------------
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.
i asked him for his approval on having a whole section dedicated to him (since i'll be using his name). i'm thankful for the response i received... so, there'll be tons more of these poems. i was working on one the other day while i was out to lunch, and i had to stop myself b/c the words weren't coming easily to me. i'll get back to that one though. thanks for noticing. *nods*
3. "RE: The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop" In response to Reply # 0
You have such a gifted touch with these words. It comes on gentle yet strong. I felt like I knew the man...
http://worthwatering.blogspot.com Can it be I stayed away too long?/ Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/ It's not my thing trying to get back/ But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five
4. "I read this yesterday..." In response to Reply # 0
and say with it a while and i really like it.
there's a sense of pity for the man in the cafe, that I almost think turns into admiration and then the speaker being blown off in the end was excellent.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "I'on wanna hear no yang yang from yo' transistor"-The Honorable James Evans
11. "RE: The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop" In response to Reply # 0
This doesn't quite click w/ me for some reason. Maybe because I felt like you described him in a less than flattering and seemingly marginalizing fasion, so it made no sense for me to care about the subject's rejection.
14. "Heart The Size Of A Redapple" In response to Reply # 0
All I shall say is, that dude is crazy in this piece cause you would've only brought 'Happiness' to his life. Then again he must 'Heal' first before encountering a brandnew chance at 'love'.
You described his sadness so extremely well that I can vision his 'puppy dog' face.
have a blessed year and more to come from Babynoon *
15. "RE: The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop" In response to Reply # 0
You always manage to make even the harshest characters human, with a gentle touch..
http://worthwatering.blogspot.com Can it be I stayed away too long?/ Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/ It's not my thing trying to get back/ But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five