I've not forgotten about the chasing dreams|catching butterflies series, this just came to me, and well... it would not have been right to brush it off...


The Bowlegged Man in the Coffee Shop

I’m watching him
Standing on bowed
Legs and wondering
Just how tall
He must be.
His pear eyes;
Glazed with sadness
Speak to me, Mooning me
With years of
Pain and I begin
To feel sorrow for
Him.

His head, a holding
Space for movie
Titles and rap songs;
So conveniently attached to
His long neck.
He births a sigh
Of rejection to
Tell me he’s not
Interested. And, I
Become dust, blown away
By an evening breeze.

©Tremaine. L. Loadholt

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no shit in 06.

you should know that
when you smile sincerely
it has a beautiful effect ©sunshine

His head, a holding
Space for movie
Titles and rap songs;
So conveniently attached to
His long neck.

you have added this nice little "jolt" to the smallest details that i'm really diggin...this was really solid tre...



you know i almost missed this becuz i thought i read it already(lol)...u and i have double the work on the boards...don't think that's happened for quite some time.

kima
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if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.

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i asked him for his approval on having a whole section dedicated to him (since i'll be using his name). i'm thankful for the response i received... so, there'll be tons more of these poems. i was working on one the other day while i was out to lunch, and i had to stop myself b/c the words weren't coming easily to me. i'll get back to that one though. thanks for noticing. *nods*

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l'amour est la médecine fidèle d'un dieu.

i think i feel my skin going scaled.
can i come up for air? ©amel larrieux

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me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

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no shit in 06.

you should know that
when you smile sincerely
it has a beautiful effect ©sunshine

You have such a gifted touch with these words. It comes on gentle yet strong. I felt like I knew the man...

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Can it be I stayed away too long?/
Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/
It's not my thing trying to get back/
But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five

and say with it a while and i really like it.

there's a sense of pity for the man in the cafe, that I almost think turns into admiration and then the speaker being blown off in the end was excellent.

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there's a sense of pity for the man in the cafe, that I almost think turns into admiration

because the speaker does pity him; yet she cannot stop watching him...

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Pinwheels and Hula Hoops: my book
http://www.lulu.com/content/132318

http://msmind.blogspot.com

no shit in 06.

you should know that
when you smile sincerely
it has a beautiful effect ©sunshine

i loved the lines

his pear eyes
glazed with sadness
speak to me, mooning me
with years of
pain and i begin
to feel sorrow
for him

as always you come with the nicest post on the boardz
one day i hope to be like you

like you said no shit in 06


peace

i thought i'd already replied to this. your work is inspiring. the picture painted here is vivid.

@asiaradiant

and endearing. A quality piece. Thank you for this.

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This doesn't quite click w/ me for some reason. Maybe because I felt like you described him in a less than flattering and seemingly marginalizing fasion, so it made no sense for me to care about the subject's rejection.

Hi Tremaine!


>He births a sigh
>Of rejection to
>Tell me he’s not
>Interested. And, I
>Become dust, blown away
>By an evening breeze.

I love the way this ended so lightly and then gone. But it didn't really come together for me before that point.

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hey lady... i hope you're here to stay a while... if not, it's soooo good to see you. thanks for your words on the poem...

hey Toe: i see your point *nods* although, i really wasn't going for sympathy for the speaker... good to see both of you...

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l'amour est la médecine fidèle d'un dieu.

i think i feel my skin going scaled.
can i come up for air? ©amel larrieux

All I shall say is, that dude is crazy in this piece cause you would've only brought 'Happiness' to his life. Then again he must 'Heal' first before encountering a brandnew chance at 'love'.


You described his sadness so extremely well that I can vision his 'puppy dog' face.


have a blessed year and more to come
from Babynoon *

You always manage to make even the harshest characters human, with a gentle touch..

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Can it be I stayed away too long?/
Did I leave your mind when I was gone?/
It's not my thing trying to get back/
But this time let me tell you where I'm at-- Jackson Five