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rubbersoulonice
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"I looked up"
Sun Jul-16-06 02:29 PM by rubbersoulonice

  

          

I pour up Broadway in the early afternoon
Trying to get home home or not home and I see you
Lean out your window 12 floors above me
Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think
At that height anyone can be a lover
Or a stone woman and I think
Angels grow in your hair
Voice sounds like cheap champagne
Bubbling into me
You, the architect
Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean
Sunday morning sky
I trail on by
Suspended above the scene you are pulling us all up there
The building, the street, the metro
It is the third day
She is risen
She exhales perfect rings

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Something like Eldridge
Cleaver meets John Lennon

  

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Mother Naked
Jul 16th 2006
1
RE: I looked up
Jul 17th 2006
2
RE: I looked up
Jul 17th 2006
3
LOL...he keeps you comin' back too huh?
Jul 23rd 2006
6
      sometimes, in all heterosexual-ness, i'm
Jul 23rd 2006
8
           aiight
Jul 23rd 2006
9
                dude, you act like all this homosocial love...
Aug 04th 2006
16
This looks easy
Jul 18th 2006
4
RE: I looked up
Jul 20th 2006
5
this
Jul 23rd 2006
7
classic
Jul 25th 2006
10
RE: I looked up
Jul 26th 2006
11
RE: I looked up
Jul 26th 2006
12
your username has always been intriguing to me
Jul 26th 2006
13
inspiring.
Jul 27th 2006
14
RE: I looked up
Jul 28th 2006
15

rubbersoulonice
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1. "Mother Naked"
In response to Reply # 0
Sun Jul-16-06 02:49 PM by rubbersoulonice

  

          

Mother naked I lay
With the breeze passing over me
The ceiling the white of forgotten messages
Tunes drifting though the room could have been written for this moment
Mother naked I know
She's determined now
Mercy will not pass the barrier of her teeth
and
Mother naked it's reeling and
Mother naked I move to the window and look at the Bronx
Veiled kingdom
It's no longer her mercy that I need
Just to know
Grace hasn't died in her
Mother naked I smile
And look for messages on the ceiling
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Something like Eldridge
Cleaver meets John Lennon

  

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seraph219
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Mon Jul-17-06 11:37 AM

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2. "RE: I looked up"
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Glad to see your words again. How's the city treating you?

  

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rubbersoulonice
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3. "RE: I looked up"
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It's been ok. I'm in a language institute right now so I'm not getting a lot of time to do anything other than study, but hopefully that'll ease off in a month.

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Something like Eldridge
Cleaver meets John Lennon

  

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Foneticcus
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Sun Jul-23-06 01:02 PM

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6. "LOL...he keeps you comin' back too huh?"
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*smiles*

startlingly vivid.

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"Pimping ain't art...but grabbing guns is?!"
(c) Menphyel

"I've come to realise that I never loved Hip-Hop as a whole,
just a particular era that happened at the same time as
I was actively checking actively for new music."

  

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blaksilence
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Sun Jul-23-06 07:52 PM

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8. "sometimes, in all heterosexual-ness, i'm"
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glad to see your name.

no pause.



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blaksilence
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Sun Jul-23-06 08:20 PM

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9. "aiight"
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pause.



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Foneticcus
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16. "dude, you act like all this homosocial love..."
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you're showing ISN'T mutual?! are you nuts? LOL...

i cracked up just readin' yr message anyways...

& i'm saying tho -- don't you feel me on rubbersoul?

gosh, some of us might need to throw ourselves back in the mix here...

the creative juices are runnin' too dry, & we need a funky fresh, well-timed kick in the seat of the pants.

*re-reads*

(um...now if all that ain't pause-heavy, i dunno what is!)

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"Pimping ain't art...but grabbing guns is?!"
(c) Menphyel

"I've come to realise that I never loved Hip-Hop as a whole,
just a particular era that happened at the same time as
I was actively checking actively for new music."

  

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empro
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Tue Jul-18-06 05:51 AM

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4. "This looks easy"
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the way it flows seems almost effortless. Maybe the same of how i look at making up rhymes. But poetry is hard as hell for me. This was very clear, crisp, and detailed. Thanks for posting

  

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Frank Parlous
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Thu Jul-20-06 01:28 AM

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5. "RE: I looked up"
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i agree.. this was form to the point of formlessness
i love the gargoyle smoking cigarettes..
... beautiful painting my friend

amaZing
isn't it?

  

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blaksilence
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7. "this"
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Sun Jul-23-06 07:47 PM by blaksilence

  

          

and mother nature

makes me want to write something.

'preciate that.



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tah-haa-haa.... - k

  

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Ezzsential
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Tue Jul-25-06 06:33 PM

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10. "classic"
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as always ur shit conveys a new perspective, literally!
luv it
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UncleClimax
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11. "RE: I looked up"
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>I pour up Broadway in the early afternoon
>Trying to get home home or not home and I see you
>Lean out your window 12 floors above me
>Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think
>At that height anyone can be a lover
>Or a stone woman and I think
>Angels grow in your hair
>Voice sounds like cheap champagne
>Bubbling into me
>You, the architect
>Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean
>Sunday morning sky
>I trail on by
>Suspended above the scene you are pulling us all up there
>The building, the street, the metro
>It is the third day
>She is risen
>She exhales perfect rings
>
*jaw drops*
gorgeous.
u make me envy u
the best compliment i can give.
>Something like Eldridge
>Cleaver meets John Lennon

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12. "RE: I looked up"
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inspiring. beautiful too.

@asiaradiant

  

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mindful
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13. "your username has always been intriguing to me"
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your words, just the same:

Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think
At that height anyone can be a lover
Or a stone woman and I think
Angels grow in your hair
Voice sounds like cheap champagne
Bubbling into me
You, the architect
Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean
Sunday morning sky

love the lines above... it'd be an understatement to tell you, you paint a great picture... Peace~

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STIMULI
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Thu Jul-27-06 12:25 AM

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14. "inspiring."
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both very beautiful.

  

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Nowachaoticthing
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Fri Jul-28-06 03:13 PM

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15. "RE: I looked up"
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I agree with all the positive vibes posted here. It didn't feel like i was reading... it was as if I were swept away.

Lovely poem.


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