I saw you on the metro platform in Chinatown one monday afternoon after I got off of work
I said I saw you but you didn't see me you was all cracked up asking people passing by for change
you looked right into my eyes but you didn't see me so translucent is the world to you only dollar bills and white rocks make way to your sykie
I closed my eyes and prayed for you right there on the platform in front of gray and black suites and high heals clicking the saddest song I've ever heard your clothes looked like you've been sleeping in the gutter broken bottles and dirty dipers your pillow lulling you into a deeper hell then the one your living every day
I said I saw you but you didn't see me and these tears and these years have passed like lightning over a distant ocean and aunti you have missed a couple of boats
Grandaddy died cousins got babies hearts have been broken children locked up where have you been?
I am still praying I want angels to come and create a miracle in front of all these people lift you up from haties and make you lie down in green pastures cause if the lord is my shepherd then I shall not want and dosen't that go for Aunties also who've lost their way their children their home their self respect somewhere she stepped off the path
God get her back on lead her besides still waters restore her soul like you said you would didn't you tell me thats what you do isn't that what I learned in Vacation Bible school I mean she didn't see me even though I was bighter than bright in plain view of her sight Lord let this sinner's soul be more than alright My Auntie is walking thru the valley of the shadow of death dowwn here underground in Chinatown Where fearing no evil is not understood
you felt un-noticed nobody was paying attention
That's what happened to you You thought you was alone nobody paying any attention thou art with me just didn't apply to you thy rod and thy staff didn't comfort you Nobody prepared a table before you in the presence of your enemies Nobody anoined you head with oil and your cup overflowed with sadness
You ain't never experience no goodness and mercy this monkey on your back following you all the days of your life this nasty bloodsucking monkey
I saw you standing there asking for change on the metro platform in chinatown you looked right through me but I will never forget to pray that one day you will dwell in the house of the Lord Forever
God is a Woman - the ansestors
He trailed run-on sentences down my spine - jenefah
A circle is/ a sunbeam that saw/ itself and fell/ in love - Nikki Giovanni
loved the religious references used in this piece.. i got alot of visuals reading this too.. i saw the homeless lady panhandling through the crowd and came upon you.. i saw you standin' there watchin' her and prayin' like you said in the piece.. i enjoy'd the read.. ______________________________________________ "..Spielberg/ when I spill words on tracks i'm a sick dude, you can't feel worst than that for you slow-minded dudes, i'll reverse it back I got a sick flow, see? ain't no nursin' that.." -Jay Z
"I fly like a fish you swim like a bird together we wilt like a flower." -mensa
That homeless lady was is aunt, very deep piece for me. She is a crack head, and she has aids, we see her on the street from time to time. A release of sorts, scared people would judge at first. After that thought passed, I posted. Thank for the love on that one.
God is a Woman - the ansestors
He trailed run-on sentences down my spine - jenefah
A circle is/ a sunbeam that saw/ itself and fell/ in love - Nikki Giovanni
4. "RE: A Psalm of Auntie" In response to Reply # 0
word Dehejia...this was heartfelt...i saw you in a crowded place with your focus pointed towards your sick aunt and all the usual noises were silenced as you prayed and the words of your poem were read by my eyes...this was nice...I'll say a prayer for her too...
5. "It's time for testimony..." In response to Reply # 0
Praise n Worship shall ensue following Sista Madawaka'z Psalm for Auntie...
*noddin*
madawaka...phhhh...woman...this piece here is def...introspective, narrative, so raw & yet definitively pure and real...mmph. ayayayeee...dammit. i'm done.
and in others, i can't begin to know what you felt
that was a beautiful piece, tho
_________________________________________________________ "Two centuries ago, a former European colony decided to catch up with Europe. It succeeded so well that the United States of America became a monster, in which the sickness, and the inhumanity of Europe have grown to appalling dimensions." ~~Frantz Fanon
"age aint nuthin but a number/cuz/when i was young/i lived my future now everyday/is deja-vu to me/and numbers/ are just another form of chains" ~~Muse
"what have u bought into/how much will it cost to buy you out?" ~~saul williams
8. "still trying to find the words. . ." In response to Reply # 7
somehow "powerful" doesn't seem an adequate description. this poem moved me. very visual. . . fave line(s): "and your cup overflowed / with sadness." keep blessin'. peace.
I really appreciate those words from you, this has been a hard time for me, but the full moon will be high in sky tonight, and I will let its rays wash over my soul. Cleaned I will be from this sadness. Can't wait to see you on thursday.
God is a Woman - the ansestors
He trailed run-on sentences down my spine - jenefah
A circle is/ a sunbeam that saw/ itself and fell/ in love - Nikki Giovanni
God get her back on lead her besides still waters restore her soul like you said you would didn't you tell me thats what you do isn't that what I learned in Vacation Bible school I mean she didn't see me even though I was bighter than bright in plain view of her sight Lord let this sinner's soul be more than alright My Auntie is walking thru the valley of the shadow of death dowwn here underground in Chinatown Where fearing no evil is not understood
"I was that ball of yarn, your pussy want'd to get caught up in."
Giovanni
satisfaction comes to those who satisfy themselves...
This was a very deep and moving piece sista. Plight felt on many levels. I dug it, having delt with my fair share of family members with drug addictions. I'll be praying for her and you.
"Thoughts and dreams drip from your mouth, onto my tongue, down my throat to my heart"-symphonygoddess
"the hypnotic was a tiger-eyed red bone, who's feline "fysique" was capable of seducin' Jehu to spare this Jezzebel 8 moons,"-Giovanni
"I wish I wasn't me sometimes"-BiLAL
"The slowest melodies coated me; Soothing rhythms stoked the fire in my belly; Music was the lamb that made a lion out of me."-Esthero
15. "now this here is a poem" In response to Reply # 0
Whew.
I really admire the ability to see through a seemingly ordinary daily event and pic out a greater meaning. Even better to be able to describe it as you've done. Great read.
---I'm here---
"...aint no vietcong ever call me jiggy..." - a brother called quest
16. "MUCH love to you n yours" In response to Reply # 0
haven't read many of your stuff..but this is my fav so far,it's straight up emotion and particularly because i can relate..replace Auntie with Uncle and I'm there with you.
Much love
this part was golden:
>I said I saw you >but you didn't see me >and these tears >and these years >have passed like lightning >over a distant ocean >and aunti you have missed >a couple of boats
~respect~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "..Time stands still to tie its shoelaces"- DanjaRuss
"..Time will tell..f/king snitch that it is!"-DanjaRuss
"..girl..lead my inspiration, and I will never leave you"-Gregory Isaacs
---------Q------------
"..if One Man's amazin..pray tell, where does that leave You??"-D/russ
17. "RE: MUCH love to you n yours" In response to Reply # 16
I know I have acomplished something good when people say things like you just said. Glad you feel me sweetie. This love yall are giving me, I can't even explain...
God is a Woman - the ansestors
He trailed run-on sentences down my spine - jenefah
A circle is/ a sunbeam that saw/ itself and fell/ in love - Nikki Giovanni
18. "this was phccing real." In response to Reply # 0
u had me caught from the beginning -- my attention never wavered...even tho' @ times, it felt slightly unfocused and hazy, top 2 bottom it was brilliance...the 23rd psalm is one drummed in2 us as kids in Ghana, and so this was all 2 familiar 2 me -- i caught all yr references and it was amazing 2 c them skillfully woven in2 the thread that was yr pCe...u have my admiration 4 what u just did w/ yr words...
"cause if the lord is my shepherd then I shall not want"
...original and creative and just str8 up inspirational...u really did good w/ this madawaka...
"amazing---- how one inhales and exhales constantly why are lungs turned inside out and right side in when one can't control one's breathing?" (c) The Genius That Is My Sister Tremaine.
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