The End

I sat there with her,
kinda hovered over her in the dark,
waiting. She seemed comfortable,
and I... well, I was trying to be
there for someone who didn't
want me to be; but somehow, I didn't
care.
We sat there, among mud,
bugs, and the stale air
counting the hours as they passed,

Alone.

A police car pulled up in front of
the big, old house. vanessa and I
could see it from where we were,
it was a policeman. We both knew
where this was going. He slowly
pulled into the driveway, got
out of his patrol car with his
chest poked out: showing off his ego.
We watched. Still. Peaceful. Good little gurls.
He straddled, checking for his nightstick
and other officer paraphernalia. We
weren't impressed.

*bang bang bang*
He knocked away at the door.
We still sat there, trying not to
breathe.. *bang bang bang*
"Is anyone there? This is Officer Pelote."
He manned the front door, blowing off
steam, and awaiting an answer.
*bang bang bang*
"Hello! This is the Windermere Police. If anyone's
home, I'd like to come in and talk with you
about a little gurl named vanessa."

vanessa shrugged her shoulders,
and dashed from under the house on her knees.
I cried. I noticed her shadow getting
smaller. She was brave. She was being
the vanessa I loved to hate.
"I'm home, and I'm vanessa."
"You know what I'm here for,
don't you little one?"
"Yeah. It's cuz I did something
I wasn't sposed to."
"Yes, and you're in a lot of
trouble, but we'll talk about that down
at the station. Where are your parents?"
"My daddy ain't here, and I don't know where
he is either."
"Your mother?"
"Dead."
"Is there a family member I can call to...?"
"No."
"Okay then, come with me."

Officer Pelote took vanessa by the hand,
escorted her to the back of his
car, and nodded... as if he knew I was there
watching them.
I sat there, wiping the tears away from my
face and mixing them with the dirt.
vanessa wasn't even scared, but
I was... for her.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt





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felt...enraptured by this

the *bang bang bang*
had the effect of shotguns altho they were door raps, because of the set-up u provided...i love girl tales...i liked this alot especially due to the assignment of roles "the brave/bad one" "the lesser feelin one who wishes to be like her"

good stuff


























¤make her lips slide apart like buttons -kkt¤

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the main character truly wants to be like vanessa... not exactly like her, but at least.. have some of her will to risk... thanks.




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girl, I dig how all of your drops with this has really begun a very intriguing series to look forward to...keep it up, this one gave me slight shivers....I love the first paragraph!

peace



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As today I know I'm living but tomorrow
Could make me the past but that I musn't fear
For I'll know deep in my mind
The love of me I've left behind
Cause I'll be loving you always."
-Stevie Wonder


"We are not separate from Spirit, we are in it"
--Plotinus--

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts, if you remain true to them, your world will at last be built."
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excellent epic, great storytelling

oya

brb...

-Otto

We sat there, among mud,
bugs, and the stale air
counting the hours as they passed,

Alone.

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there is symbolism imagery and foreshadowing in these lines...you hooked me mindful, and i couldnt look away....wonderful work...

-Otto

stanza from Part 4.. thought it would be a great way to begin part 5.. thanks for your interest and comments on this series... it's finally complete... for the moment. Peace~




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at creating a scene, detailing a moment & stretching it out.


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make my skip.

the okayquote corner:

niggas can't fight the inclination to be typical. © aeon

don't suck his dick no more either © mash_comp

yay bitch © ronni

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c if i give a fck if u like me | u know i don't

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*sigh*

I can (((Exhale))) now! -- *smiles*

You've brought the whole series to fruition wonder~fully with Part 5!

~Excellent Story~Tellin' Skills~


Actually -- Excellent "book writing" skills!


I want an AUTOGRAPHED copy of whatever you write -- (WHENEVER IT DROPS) -- *smiles*

Note: Will send money & INBOX you with addy! -- *wink*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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response...

happy now?

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Why she's a sexy bitch:

Well, the answer to that only requires one look at her. But in true sexy bitch fashion, Charlize is much more than just a pretty face and amazing body. Though she lost her accent to make acting easier on herself, Afrikaans is her first language. She's a true mama's girl...even after her mother shot and killed her father in self defense, she remains extremely close to her. Oh yeah...and she's a great actress. Beauty, talent, intelligence, and loyalty...what more do you need?

"I haven't lost my culture, just my accent." - Charlize Theron

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blackout?

i mean... you have a serious knack for story telling and i love it.

dot . dot . dot .

☺ ☺

I guess U know me well, I don't like winter
But I seem 2 get a kick

very nice, i'm going to have to read the others tomorrow...

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if you are a bully, i beg you treat me good ('cause) i'm like a stepping razor won't you watch my sides, i'm dangerous © peter tosh

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*smiles* thanks.


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if you are a bully, i beg you treat me good ('cause) i'm like a stepping razor won't you watch my sides, i'm dangerous © peter tosh

I don't have time to be readin some fucked up shit like that...ha ha nah i'm playin wow it was long but i loved every bit of it nice drop

RIP:K

I want the first copy!(okay a copy autographed by you seeing as though I might get mobbed trying to get one)

Tre, I've read a lot from you, and I have to say that from all I read, I would have to say this is very different. I did read the last, and I think its cool how you stuck with it, being on point.
This was well put together, and truly dope.
Keep breaking beyond the limits

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writing one entitled Esmeralda.. um, I'm kinda fickle when it comes to people and speaking to a lot of them, so I doubt if.. I'll ever publish it majorly or do any kind of rigorous promotion *shrug*... Thank you L.. tho.. thank you very much~


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We watched. Still. Peaceful. Good little gurls.
He straddled, checking for his nightstick
and other officer paraphernalia. We
weren't impressed.

~hmmm...."Good little gurls."....and "We weren't impressed"....those lines are the sort of gems that allowed me to sink deep into this piece. Very nice right here.

...

I just read the series in it's entirety and it seems that the character of the piece is intrigued/captivated by this little girl and "Good little gurls"...well...we have 2 culprits now don't we?

sisters

peace.

let's play ping pong ■

and patiently awaiting the next installment.

i'm pushing this post up. like i hope your head is.

---i'm here---

"...do what scares you..." -- l. varela