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gsquared
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Mon Dec-01-03 10:13 PM

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"Atlas"


          

Atlas did a hand stand
and bullets whizzed past
Jesse Jackson's ears

Blood showed the way
to the polls and
all of it was red

The soft winds of
change blow quietly
and are often taken
for granted

Within is
heat held
that rises as
it expands and
widens, full of

surprises

Triggers pull
the plug on nature's
plea for patience

Motherly love
knows no bounds

Willing partners place
a peacock's fan over
coy smiles implied but
never stated

rocks rust over time

ringlets of age
curl around a singularity

particles of faith
trace geometric precision
into and out of time,
strands that
contain instructions for
life itself in
every dimension
when all is
in good health

and health

is
wealth








a couple of Geometry songs and a beat for rappers http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/geometrymusic.htm


"The Hiphop community exists as an international culture of consciousness that provides all races, tribes, religions, and styles of people, a foundation for the communication of their best ideas and works. Hiphop Kulture is united as one multi-skilled, multi-cultural, multi-faith, multi-racial people, committed to the establishment and the development of peace."

--Hiphop declaration of peace, Temple of Hiphop





http://www.GaryPatrickGarry.com

"I'm stalling in flight
Hovering over horizons
Waiting for night"

"My turn to speak in tongues"
--Photosynthesis

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
RE: Atlas
Dec 02nd 2003
1
thank you otto...
Dec 02nd 2003
2
The Wisdom Of Solomon --
Dec 02nd 2003
3
RE: The Wisdom Of Solomon --
Dec 02nd 2003
4
archive
Dec 03rd 2003
5
RE: archive
Dec 03rd 2003
6
toothpick...
Dec 03rd 2003
8
RE: Atlas
Dec 03rd 2003
7
RE: Atlas
Dec 04th 2003
9

Otto
Member since Dec 19th 2002
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Tue Dec-02-03 05:13 AM

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1. "RE: Atlas"
In response to Reply # 0


  

          

WOW...man, very socially pertinant...the las tpart, where u said health is wealth, is awesomely true...wise, indeed...i like this part, this is where i feel most of the meaning is at for the piece...

The soft winds of
change blow quietly
and are often taken
for granted

Within is
heat held
that rises as
it expands and
widens, full of

surprises

Triggers pull
the plug on nature's
plea for patience

^^^^^^^really good job g, ima keep this...

-Otto

  

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gsquared
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Tue Dec-02-03 10:19 AM

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2. "thank you otto..."
In response to Reply # 1


          

:>)





a couple of Geometry songs and a beat for rappers http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/geometrymusic.htm


"The Hiphop community exists as an international culture of consciousness that provides all races, tribes, religions, and styles of people, a foundation for the communication of their best ideas and works. Hiphop Kulture is united as one multi-skilled, multi-cultural, multi-faith, multi-racial people, committed to the establishment and the development of peace."

--Hiphop declaration of peace, Temple of Hiphop





http://www.GaryPatrickGarry.com

"I'm stalling in flight
Hovering over horizons
Waiting for night"

"My turn to speak in tongues"
--Photosynthesis

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Tue Dec-02-03 03:06 PM

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3. "The Wisdom Of Solomon --"
In response to Reply # 0


          

The humor of Bill Cosby --

And the musical genious of ??? -- *chuckles*

(I ain't tryna blow ya head up -- so I'll stop right now!)


Luv' the flow -- Luv' the message laced within! -- ;^)


And thanx 4 the INBOX! -- *smiles*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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gsquared
Member since Oct 26th 2002
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Tue Dec-02-03 04:08 PM

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4. "RE: The Wisdom Of Solomon --"
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...thanks so sincerely, seems like a good piece to me too...suffering a lot and staying alive brings out the best in ya, you know that....as for the inbox, I only wish I could be santa claus...





a couple of Geometry songs and a beat for rappers http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/geometrymusic.htm


"The Hiphop community exists as an international culture of consciousness that provides all races, tribes, religions, and styles of people, a foundation for the communication of their best ideas and works. Hiphop Kulture is united as one multi-skilled, multi-cultural, multi-faith, multi-racial people, committed to the establishment and the development of peace."

--Hiphop declaration of peace, Temple of Hiphop





http://www.GaryPatrickGarry.com

"I'm stalling in flight
Hovering over horizons
Waiting for night"

"My turn to speak in tongues"
--Photosynthesis

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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Toothpick
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Wed Dec-03-03 06:30 AM

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5. "archive"
In response to Reply # 0


  

          

This is one a tha best I've read from you in awhile, G, (though I have been kinda absent)....and that's saying a lot for a poet like you.

You've inspired me to write something a little more political... I been writing too much about my own depression, and my poetry now seems to be only for myself, and nobody else. I've crossed the line between personal and private. That wasn't my goal when I first started out writing......thanks for kicking me back on track.

peace,
2th.

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http://fivedeadlyeverythings.wordpress.com
bamf.

  

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Ambergirl
Member since Oct 07th 2003
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Wed Dec-03-03 08:34 AM

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6. "RE: archive"
In response to Reply # 5


          

This is much appreciated. You touched on alot here, a nice piece. I'd like to see more from you on these topics.

_____________________________

divided
you wanna walk ahead of me
and the fact that you can't
is a thorn
now ain't it? ~Nathaniel


So it is better to speak/
remembering/we were never
meant to survive
Audre Lorde


Don't believe me/Keep

  

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gsquared
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Wed Dec-03-03 12:08 PM

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8. "toothpick..."
In response to Reply # 5


          

...if I did anything to inspire you in any way at all well that's the whole point of good art, so I'm very flattered, thanks man...



a couple of Geometry songs and a beat for rappers http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/geometrymusic.htm


"The Hiphop community exists as an international culture of consciousness that provides all races, tribes, religions, and styles of people, a foundation for the communication of their best ideas and works. Hiphop Kulture is united as one multi-skilled, multi-cultural, multi-faith, multi-racial people, committed to the establishment and the development of peace."

--Hiphop declaration of peace, Temple of Hiphop





http://www.GaryPatrickGarry.com

"I'm stalling in flight
Hovering over horizons
Waiting for night"

"My turn to speak in tongues"
--Photosynthesis

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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the Light
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Wed Dec-03-03 11:19 AM

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7. "RE: Atlas"
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My favourite lines:
>
>Triggers pull
>the plug on nature's
>plea for patience

I think this piece is excellent. I love the politics of the poem and how they are written to be incisive but not overbearing. Also, I like the short line format, which lends some urgency and gives a more direct feel.

peace,
the Light

<http://mysite.freeserve.com/guerilla_poetry>

____________________________________________________

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*stop by, say hi*
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"in faith
we shall board our imagined ship and wildly sail
among sacred islands of the mad till death shatters the fabulous

  

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deepthought74
Member since Sep 06th 2002
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Thu Dec-04-03 01:40 PM

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9. "RE: Atlas"
In response to Reply # 7


  

          

Well done..u dropping science up in here!!

Deepthought

"When I hear wack rhymes, I get fed up"- Krs-One

"Even when I'm bragging, I'm being sincere"-LL

Verse One:

Could you tell me who released our animal instinct?
Got the white man sittin' there tickled pink.
Laughin' at us on the av

  

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