i love you but i cant sit still enough to please u.
where your angles push into my circles i see ur depth but i can't reach u.
how i love u can only be defined in dictionary terms... love;1.the sound of ur heart two steps away from orgasim. 2.the smell of ur breath after tasting me way down there. 3.Coltrane's "Sentimental Mood" 4. a movement not rested in this universe.
u informed that i had been outside so long that the color of my woman walls had ripened past the ripest open seed of a peach. ... i had become too sweet to touch too woman to stand by your side.
and all of that just made me diagnol to your parrallels. how can you love with conditions wrapped up in fears?
the cracks in your SIDE walks are much more interesting than your actual square there's surface and ground where you usta hold me together.
and i am standing now in the middle of our understated contraption.
and wonder...
will ur rain bathe me once again?
or
beat it's beads against my soul.
kimabe2005
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.
2. "RE: terrain" In response to Reply # 0 Mon Nov-07-05 07:32 PM by PhotoSynthesis
You ever take a bite of summmthin' that was just so good -- It makes ya wannna hit ya moma? -- (And you *KNOW* betta than to hit yo moma -- But it tastes so good that you'd 4~get, if you didn't check ya'self!) -- *chuckles*
~OR~
You ever read summthin' so tight, your face just gets twisted and screwed -- Like GOTTTTDAMNNNNN!?!?!? --
Aaiight! -- Well I'm over here readin' this tasty shyt -- Wit a twisted face -- Wantin' to hit somebody -- -- And all I can say is: "GOTTTTDAMNNNNNN"!!!
I could say I'm thru with U -- But I'd be lying -- Cuz that ain't true! --
*Nice Work Ms. Lady*
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥
This piece was good and I wonder were your misspellings were done for a reason. It built up momentum, but for some reason the ending didnt' really resonate with me. Still it was nice piece of work..
KImberly
If fucking were graceful, I'd be your dancer
I have boarded the train to nowhere waking up to find myself somewhere
ending this piece was tough...maybe because this was really personal, and I'm not one that likes things to end, i'd rather work it through...but in this situation, i couldn't so maybe that's what shows in the work...but you and rgv are tough too!(laughing) which is what i love about the two of you...you make me work for my art...
the mispellings come out like that in my head sometimes...so i guess yes they are on purpose, because that's how my mind was working at the time... thank you all for checking in and allowing me to grow...love k
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.
u informed that i had been outside so long that the color of my woman walls had ripened past the ripest open seed of a peach. ... i had become too sweet to touch too woman to stand by your side.
and all of that just made me diagnol to your parrallels. how can you love with conditions wrapped up in fears?
truly you are. these lines above made me appreciate and remember a past....
I think this would be more powerful if there was some kind of rain metaphor established early on in the poem. That way the end would be a call back to that, instead of seemingly come out of nowhere. But overall I liked this piece.
Especially the part about the breath. Powerful image that expresses a lot.
but see...it wasn't about the rain(laughing)...i think that's where i went off a bit...mixing too many metaphors (shrugs)...imma fix tho'(smile)...miss k
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.
10. "RE: terrain - scorpion's kiss..." In response to Reply # 0
"how i love u can only be defined in dictionary terms... love;1.the sound of ur heart two steps away from orgasim. 2.the smell of ur breath after tasting me way down there. 3.Coltrane's "Sentimental Mood" 4. a movement not rested in this universe."
mmph...
your pen is lethal when pressed against fear and resistance to true love...
beautiful drop.
MUSE
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Speak and it shall manifest Breathe and it shall live Love and it shall triumph Give and it shall never be lost... ever... - MarcArthur St. Juste
"not one voice unheard" - VOICES NYC (Brooklyn, NY)
12. "RE: terrain - scorpion's kiss..." In response to Reply # 10
bug a boo!...whatchu doing peekin' 'round these parts!(lol)...so good to know...the pen has a lil' sumthin' left in it(smile)...thank for the love...mabe
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.
>the cracks in your SIDE walks >are much more interesting than your actual square
That says so much right there. I loved the entire poem, but when I read that, I was like DAMN. So so true...
We are nothing more than a sum of our experiences, and those experiences cause so many cracks in our squares... The cracks are so important. We wouldn't evolve spiritually without them.
yeah..i love investigating the smaller parts of ones being...that's usually the part that holds the most truth, the most senstivity, and the most honesty about who i'm dealing with...the "square" is just surface if you klnow what i mean...thanks for dropping by...miss k
if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.