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Phenomenality
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"((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam.."


  

          

this is an unorthadox approach for posting a piece, but we'll see if it clicks with anyone. i have to give some background.

1. http://board.okayplayer.com/okp.php?az=show_topic&forum=4&topic_id=2047177&mesg_id=2047177&listing_type=search
2. http://board.okayplayer.com/okp.php?az=show_topic&forum=4&topic_id=2056497&mesg_id=2056497&listing_type=search

and so from this standpoint, i offer an abstract perspective of my views on ~Life~ in general.. and in that Life, lives death.



~Eternal Return~

I gaze into 360 degrees of infinity
watching physics perfect pull
gravity's mathematical genius is the
circle cycle - -

aureole axis holds
waxing and waning moons
in its humble hands
cyclical sending and receiving of seasons
spring, summer, fall, winter
spring, summer, fall, winter
caressed within the round bosom
of day and nights continuum

rotation of Truth, the
orbit of birth and death
Life's blood circulates
beneath brilliant brine billows of
indigo emotion flowing furiously
pumping out and back in
regenerating, rejuvenating, recycling

encompassed within the circle
of the womb
lies the latent power
of a prophetic magnitude
the reinception of time
inducts cylindrical revolutions to
bring forth life and
birth beginnings only to blend them
into burying ends...
those ends blurring into starts of stars

ringed symmetry
encapsulating life inside
these circles
from the most minute matter
to vastness unparalleled,
the roundess of molecules
mirror shapes of celestial bodies

ancient circles;
-o0(( crop ))0o-
spiritual strength surrounding stonhendge and
the curve of colossal coliseums
mystically meld into shadows of
healing moccasins hoop dancing round
the fervorable force of fire rings while
native wisdom's wheel of medicine
meditates through smoke rings of redemption

It IS the circle of Life

It IS Karma

It IS choice

It IS our salvation

It IS the completion of immaculation

It IS the symbol of serenity

It IS the shape of the Soul

It IS....

(( the Eternal Return ))
©

Breathe E.Z.

~Vee~

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....:I'm Focused, Man:....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"We had chemistry cuz she was a Cancer.." (c) Common

<---- Birth Beginnings

  

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umm...wow
Dec 28th 2005
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yea...wow
Dec 28th 2005
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RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam..
Dec 28th 2005
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RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam..
Jan 19th 2006
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this made me cry.
Dec 28th 2005
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RE: this made me cry.
Jan 19th 2006
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RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam..
Dec 29th 2005
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RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam..
Jan 19th 2006
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Heyyyyy Ms. Phenoooooooooo ...
Jan 19th 2006
9
The links were good for the first few weeks.. lol
Jan 19th 2006
11
RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam..
Jan 19th 2006
10
classic... archive
Jan 20th 2006
12
RE: classic... archive
May 15th 2006
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Damn..........
Jan 20th 2006
13
something about this made me wonder what your religion is
Jan 23rd 2006
14

Jon
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1. "umm...wow"
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|latina212|


be fluid~~~
be water~~~

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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Wed Dec-28-05 07:38 PM

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3. "RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam.."
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mystically meld into shadows of
healing moccasins hoop dancing round
the fervorable force of fire rings while
native wisdom's wheel of medicine
meditates through smoke rings of redemption

That is BADDDDDDDDDD ASSSSS!!! Truly it was. I loved the alliteration, straight word play, my mind opened up like a quake and became a black hole. I loved it, but one thing I'd do differently. I would have ended it after the word "redemption." I just felt like adding the other parts about Karma etc. was already said. The womb, the circle, the hoop. Ahhhhh, so nice. Everything so intricately put together that how can it ever be broken?? That's good!!
~~~~~~~~
When One learns
to live without fear,
then One cannot be broken.

  

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Phenomenality
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6. "RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam.."
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thank you, lady.. truly.

>mystically meld into shadows of
>healing moccasins hoop dancing round
>the fervorable force of fire rings while
>native wisdom's wheel of medicine
>meditates through smoke rings of redemption
>
>That is BADDDDDDDDDD ASSSSS!!! Truly it was. I loved the
>alliteration, straight word play, my mind opened up like a
>quake and became a black hole. I loved it, but one thing I'd
>do differently. I would have ended it after the word
>"redemption." I just felt like adding the other parts about
>Karma etc. was already said. The womb, the circle, the hoop.
>Ahhhhh, so nice. Everything so intricately put together that
>how can it ever be broken?? That's good!!
>~~~~~~~~
>When One learns
>to live without fear,
>then One cannot be broken.


Breathe E.Z.

~Vee~

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
....:I'm Focused, Man:....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"We had chemistry cuz she was a Cancer.." (c) Common

<---- Broncos Bitches!

  

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mylife
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it's beautiful.

you made words make worlds.

i'm riding for these now...

www.rivalive.com
www.epitomesoul.com

you can do whatever you want as long as you don't call it what it is...

  

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Phenomenality
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thanks, hon. appreciate it.

>it's beautiful.
>
>you made words make worlds.
>
>>i'm riding for these now...
>
>www.rivalive.com
>www.epitomesoul.com
>
>you can do whatever you want as long as you don't call it what
>it is...


Breathe E.Z.

~Vee~

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
....:I'm Focused, Man:....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"We had chemistry cuz she was a Cancer.." (c) Common

<---- Broncos Bitches!

  

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revalation
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Thu Dec-29-05 12:08 AM

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and I am left without breath until the end when I am coerced to breath again...wonderfully written...this luv is poetry...


umm.....umm...tasty beauty.....plump with life...thick with breath...soft caress....in you wisdom I delight....

  

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En Vista
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Hey Phen - read this before - still feeling it.

~One~


Half of what I say is meaningless; but I say it so that the other half may reach you. Kahlil Gibran

...Is it because I value reality that I’m beginning to hate cordiality?

  

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9. "Heyyyyy Ms. Phenoooooooooo ..."
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Never~The~Less -- This flow reads mentally, emotionally, & spiritually beautiful --


But then -- I'd expect nutthin' less than the best from my beautiful "Indian Princess" sistah --


I haven't seen your work around much -- But I haven't been around much myself, so playing "Catch ^UP^" is imperative.

I'll be reading this flow again for total saturation on my imagination -- *smiles*




A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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to make a really long, dramatic story short.. a good friend of mine, a beautiful 20-yr-old young man named
Adam, had a heart attack on Dec 24th and was in a coma.. they shocked him 13 times to bring him back.. sometime
in the days after he suffered a massive stroke and brain scans came back with no activity in his frontal
lobe.. he was brain dead for all intent and purpose. after a week of trying to process the tragedy and going
thru the gammet of emotions from denile to anger to grief.. they decided to unplug him.

the one topic was about him and daily updates on his condition and the other post was after he died.. me trying
to wrap my brain around his death..

and thus.. this post was born.

Breathe E.Z.

~Vee~

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
....:I'm Focused, Man:....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"We had chemistry cuz she was a Cancer.." (c) Common

<---- Broncos Bitches!

  

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ASIEM
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10. "RE: ((Eternal Return)) ~ A tribute to Adam.."
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wow this is that precipise that lies between heaven and hell between the spiritual and carnal being that manifestation of what is and forever will be Hu Man...

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder

  

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straight up, this was extremely awesome...

nuff said...
- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
when my soul speaks:
when watchin VH1 soul and they play back to back videos that i like, when I'm intertwined with intimacy, goin' to a Jill Scott co

  

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archive again

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder

  

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this piece is bad as hell!!! Wow... I'm so sorry for your loss mama but at least Adam's memory will be respected with this... you have a gift...


Ahh D'Angelo how I love thee.... when you comin back nigga???

www.xanga.com/Bonita_Applebaum24

  

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14. "something about this made me wonder what your religion is"
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if you have one.

the links didn't work for me so i don't know what inspired this
but it read like truth...laid plain

semi-scientific/ astrological / spiritualistic?

truth

but laid so plain that i wasn't left questioning or wondering

i just spent the whole time nodding along like old ladies in church

on some 'yea, that's right'

quotes:

the whole thing.

_____________________________________

The cry I bring down from the hills
__________belongs to a girl still burning
__________inside my head. At daybreak

____________________she burns like a piece of paper. - YK

  

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