sorry for the lateness. life stuff. the deadline for this round will now be next tuesday.

blaksilence
daniemuse
TOPIC: pasta
WORD: jedi

Jon
muddywaters
TOPIC: we need someone to give us one. we'll use 1st suggestion.
WORD: see above

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now that everyone has their topic, you all have until next Tuesday to inbox me your pieces
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muddywaters (or anyone facing me in a given round) still sends the piece to me like everyone else, but can also send it to MiracleRic (who offered to help) and ANY OTHER PARTICIPANT of his/her choosing so he/she can be assured i'm not tampering or cheating.
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PLEASE FOLLOW THE FOLLOWING INSTRUCTION (to make life 10 times easier):

when you send your piece to my inbox, put your name AND the person you're facing in the SUBJECT line like "Auriz Deep vs BarTek".

then inside the content area, title your piece with your name, like this:

ToeJam:

sfdsajfidojoijojojo
fsdjioasdjifosjoaa
jidsoajfosidajafoi
jfdioajfdiosjfaoa

jdfioajdoifajofidaj
jdfoiajdfoajofdsj
jfdisoafjsdoaifjosad
jsdioafjasoiasjo

dsfahduifhasifhsdai
dshfuidahiufhasifhda
dfhauifdhifahidsia
dfhsiuhfdiufshisdfhsi
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which brings us to LENGTH:
-the piece can be as long or short as you want. just be aware of the risks you take making something extremely short (people might not be impressed if it isn't very very potent) or extremely long (people might start skimming if they have to read an entire novel)
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if and when i get eliminated, i'm still going to be here for you folks. i still, after all, get the fun job of choosing words and topics and reading this stuff.
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if i left anything out, reply here with the much needed guidance.

just for everyone's own reference


KNOWLEDGE:
1.a love-story(how many mcs can do this w/o being corny)
2.alien abduction
3.a story from the perspective of a cartoon(or tv show) character
4.how u spend your time
5.how u started rappin
6.your definition of an mc or who you think are great mcs
7.bush or politics in general

WILLI DUDAT:
-how bout plastic surgery (ie botox, fake tits *can i say tits...oops i said it again*...LOL)
-which brings me to another topic: censorship...
-science
-addiction

TOE JAM:
a)animal instincts
b)the boondocks
c)christmas
d)the almight dollar
e)earth
f)flesh
g)genocide
h)homeless
i)innuendo
j)jedi
k)karma
l)the lox
m)media
n)n-word
o)outer space
p)pasta
q)quid pro quo
r)running for president
s)sabatage
t)oeJam
u)underwear
v)vision
w)weed
x)xenophobia
y)your job
z)ummm, how 'bout the zoo

DANIEMUSE:
nichtophobia (fear of the dark)
ice cream
your first love
the Simpsons
trees
mirrors
if you had x-ray vision
being a turntable
your biggest regret
being a teardrop

AURIZ DEEP:
-Sittin, maybe anxious, waitin for somethin to happen during which you can make a HUGE decision---(Yeah that's a lil specific, but we're lookin at how the conveyence of the two verses compare, so...)
-Makin the whole underlyin meaning/plot of a given movie into a verse-
-Bein Unconscious- -Right before, during, and right after sleep-

WHATEVA:
-Money
-War
-Sex
-Suggestions: add a few "must use" words or subtopics to each topic that have to be incorporated into the rhyme. Like if the topic was "war", for instance, the words you would have to use are Fallujah, Nazis, preemptive, and genocide
^^
Jon speaking: I'm going to use this suggestion, but for extra fun, it will be a word that is NOT an obvious fit to the topic.

THE BEST PART:
-a tree
-a bird
-a river
-water
-fire
-earth
-youth
-community
-gentics
-history
-anxiety
-death
-forbidden love
-guilt
-pleasure
-parenthood
-childhood
-family
-picking a song and writing a verse to it. or writing a dedication verse to your fav artists.
-roll playing? write from the perspective of a person, a place or thing.

MIRACLE RIC:
-bruised and fat eyes
-black tribes
-crack ties
-building blocks
-squeeling glocks
-precision persistence
-the decisions of infants
-love lost
-lust found
-grub costs
-and bust downs
-nightchilds
-and nice smiles
-chill times with ill dimes
-blood and ink
-drugs and drink
-skills shine

JAY FEVER:
-Butter
-Waterguns
-Grafitti
-Boob Jobs
-Staples
-Genocide
-Care Bears
-Frankenstein
-World Hunger

BARTEK:
-Love
-Energy
-Revolution
-Knowledge of Self
-Tormenting Thoughts
-Rage
-Growing Up
-Dying
-Family
-God
-Religion

BLAKSILENCE:
-Nature (you said not to take any of yours but i have to at least include this one)

MADNIS:
-being in the shoes of someone in a tragedy

topic:
"-how bout plastic surgery (ie botox, fake tits *can i say tits...oops i said it again*...LOL)" - from willi_dudat

word:
xenophobia

What do ya think?
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D. Scott
http://www.dscottandthefamily.com
http://anewqueendom.blogspot.com

giving you pasta and jedi like i did lol. touche.

GUUURRRRRLLLLL!!!!!!!

fuckin represent cuz im in mass too!
shiet!

im surprised cuz most cats from bean are duplicates (u kno its true)

im so fucking glad to see a female coming from that area that is original PROPS!
we should collabo on some boston shit!
werdum up

aight the rest will *inbox*
- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
This is a great website to discuss spirituality/religion, philosophies, and post poems:www.aware-discussion.net

the only reason why i'm sending mine into you
is because i'm trying not to be the kind of person who backs out of something i originally agreed to

but i just want to say that i think daniemuse shld win
because i haven't battled one person since i've been in this contest

and if one person would have typed 2 lines against me...
i prolly would have lost

and cuz daniemuse is better than me

but mines is in tho

most excited to have on board. i've thoroughly enjoyed what i've read, and by no means would someone have such an easy time against one of your pieces.

I'm lovin' your pieces. I love the piece you did that Jon just posted. I have nothing but respect for your talent. No more self-loathing for you. You deserve to be in this not just because you were the only one who turned in work, but because you have amazing talent to match your dedication.
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D. Scott
http://www.dscottandthefamily.com
http://anewqueendom.blogspot.com

TOPIC: pasta
WORD: jedi
(please read both and then reply with your favorite in the subject line)

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blaksilence:

i'm stuck in this shit reluctant as shit
buckin, how the fuk did i get seducted by dicks
can you believe this?
i mean i'm the near-queen princess leiah cleanbitch
wit cleavage double D shits that keep eewoks kneeless
i mean me-genius but darth said he had the biggest penis
i went to see it and wound up as some stringy shit in sauce next to some meat shit
i mean i woulda let him beat it, stick his meat in tweek then skeet it
i mean shit i got that clean shit if all he wanted was to eat it
now i'm sitting on this plate...waiting to be eaten
defeated and i all i scream is..."i mean...shit"
dumb ass half dead guy
prolly cum fast with your dead eye
i got the last laugh cuz u cant take off ur mask without a gasp
fucking half bad jedi

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daniemuse:

limp, lifeless, spineless
noodle-dicked pasta politicians
circling, swimming
in the direction of current trends
puffing up in expansion of half-truths
to appear more appealing
while
the "mamamia" of the universe
stirs with her spoon
of agitation, instigation and preparation
waiting for the right time
watching as the water of revolution
quietly tremble underneath
she stands patiently
toiling over the boiling liquid earthquake
until it has reached its height
signifying change
then it is time
to strain, to sift, to seperate
the light from the darkness
the haughty from the humble
the promise-keepers from the promise-makers
Mama Universe serves them up on a hot platter
baptizing them in the tomato-red blood of their victims
as a means of redemption and repentence
but first
they must be devoured
by lions of karma

I just realized I forgot to use the word "jedi" in my piece. Seriously though, in all fairness, I think I should be deducted a point for that. Man I'm slippin'.
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D. Scott
http://www.dscottandthefamily.com
http://anewqueendom.blogspot.com

Wow. I liked the way she turned pasta into something very, very relevant. Good showing from both though. Can't be easy writing about spaghetti and Luke Skywalker. LOL

"I'm scientific, but my reflex gangsta"- Black Thought

for this right here:

>limp, lifeless, spineless
>noodle-dicked pasta politicians
>circling, swimming
>in the direction of current trends
>puffing up in expansion of half-truths
>to appear more appealing
>while
>the "mamamia" of the universe
>stirs with her spoon
>of agitation, instigation and preparation

yess-er.

_____________________________________

The cry I bring down from the hills
__________belongs to a girl still burning
__________inside my head. At daybreak

____________________she burns like a piece of paper. - YK

Creative. Looking forward to the final round.

I haven't voted for awhile...and I'm sorry... but I'm back

Anyways, my vote is def to Muse... Silence juss didn't come withit... And I didn't see anything much about Spaghetti/Pasta in his, I mean, quick references, yea... but still... Muse had a whole metaphor... and it was great...

But I'm juss takin that shit outta context.

two totally different styles that i respect
blak you have me laughin throughout your verse and danie your shit is just so visionary

both were exellent but i lean towards danie because although i love to laugh, visions strike a chord for me...

nice job both of you...
- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
This is a great website to discuss spirituality/religion, philosophies, and post poems:www.aware-discussion.net

blaksilence, you're legitimate and actually your style fits more with what i'm into. it's fun and vivid

BUT...

daniemuse, you killed it. i didn't really understand what was going down until i got to:
>then it is time
to strain, to sift, to seperate<
at this point i smiled and had to immediately start over and fully grasp the genius.

if this was wutang, blaksilence, you'd be ODB, who i love
daniemuse, you'd be GZA, who's the sharpest and most respected

great offerings from both

>dirt&water<

both came nice...

short and sweet on behalf of black and potent length on behalf of muse...

tuff decision...my vote for black...

i just couldn't stop laughin...

"It's the return of the gangsta, thanks ta..."

-du

*sigh* i hate to dock people points when they're my own opponent since it seems kind of cheap and makes me feel a bit lame, but rules make the game go round, so i have to dock muddywaters 2 votes since it's 2 days from Tuesday. don't hate me.
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TOPIC: plastic surgery
WORD: xenophobia

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Jon

"stop talking to myself and clicking letters
mr who and mr who 2 do trick and catch us
then inject xenophette needles in ears and neck, butt
and Wiggle Man too! so watch what you do! me!"
--- He-273-B

"i was like 'we're stuck', right? you'd be thinking 'cluck'.
but Stupid picked us up. prolly looking for an effin-uck.
woodsy 'wine-dee' creepy night stuff. we took his truck
here's the keys, our little a's need c's so hook us up already!"
--- Mindy (Mandy's partner and friend)

"trapped between the tree seas, moon creeps to tease me
freeze! i see a clearing and...PEOPLE! no longer creepy...
big field, the people by bleachers...they force me through the fence??
'patients not allowed off the yard' they think i'm dense!
explain and strain the more i plead the more 'he's insane'
white-sheets with dim faces walk around limp-brained
PERFECT green, sloping soft, football lights tower off
into the sky, eerie solo strolls of random zombifieds"
--- Stupid

"Dear Sophia, xenophobia showed me whole kaboodle
she told me where d-o-c's here hope to steer the Noodle Shop
i know we can't cozy, you say i look remotely absolootle
zero like used to, but my souls don't get the boobles..."
--- He-152-L

"welcome Who 9, today we operate the Y patients.
__i'm glad you see the light behind the way this place is
if cats must look like cats and raisins should look like raisins
then everyones should look like everyones based on my tastings"
--- Dr Mondavi

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muddywaters:

hi my name is quasar from a planet way far
guest appearance at a bazaar, my appearance bizarre
i know this…you humans been noid ever since
humanoids learned flaws on their bodies they could twist
i mean fix, twist we say, umm reconstruct
your planet violated universal codes of conduct
this transgression, we labeled it body repossession
has us thinking, it’s about time for your extinction
did I speak that?
the cats out of the hat,
wrong expression? our agitated aggression
annihilates your perfection obsession
take me to your leader, the surgeon general
army of surgeons chief that caused this critical
we observed your regression, you were tryin to change
everybody on the planet to make them look the same
disgustin… perky nipples leak intoxins that kill the cells
monthly appearance-lifts received, you feel the fail
take place as stabilizers leave your face
error codes are deleted or either replaced
your race seems robotic, xenophobia psychotic
the irrational fear of foreign objects is chaotic
extractin fat from wide hips to place on thin lips
is prescribed by plastic masters that tell you to strip
and voice their opinions on your shape and size
mindless cutting on the body is sensationalized
well… my time is shrinkin, let me get to my mission
permission from my planet means your planets demolition
this was caused by your quest to seek body amenity
we won’t miss you much as you all have one identity

naw i'm playing

>dirt&water<

n/m

D. Scott
http://www.dscottandthefamily.com
http://anewqueendom.blogspot.com

jon tho.

mainly because of this:

>"trapped between the tree seas, moon creeps to tease me
>freeze! i see a clearing and...PEOPLE! no longer creepy...
>big field....

and the letters-dash-numbers andshit.

but muddywaters is nasty tho:


>hi my name is quasar from a planet way far
>guest appearance at a bazaar, my appearance bizarre
>i know this…you humans been noid ever since
>humanoids learned flaws on their bodies they could twist
>i mean fix, twist we say, umm reconstruct

yea man.

_____________________________________

The cry I bring down from the hills
__________belongs to a girl still burning
__________inside my head. At daybreak

____________________she burns like a piece of paper. - YK

I didn't get what Jon was trying to do. Like he didn't know the definition of the word.

Muddywaters gets the vote...

(But Jon might get the girl)

Jon, it was nice, but not AS nice... and readin yours I felt it ended too soon... It was kinda hard to follow, but I could summarize it up... And then it ended... I was like... Really?

But I'm juss takin that shit outta context.

um.
i gotta go with muddywaters, your verse was very creative and abstract
jon- i just couldnt grasp what you were talking about although it seemed creative- (sorry)

- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
This is a great website to discuss spirituality/religion, philosophies, and post poems:www.aware-discussion.net

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King MM
Member since Dec 01st 2004
103 posts Sat Jan-21-06 07:03 PM



"*+*Teardrops-*&*-Boxing*+*"
Sat Jan-21-06 07:06 PM by King MM



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