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wolfie
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Mon Feb-28-05 06:54 AM

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"the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealuatio"


          

---- the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealuation -----

i am lost between spaces of
hours gone
left right of the second hand and
misbegotten minute clicks
clock the time spent with cuckoos and chimes
on linoleum floors in cold corridors
caught spacelessly without faith between
decisive strokes of time I
suspend without body but active mind
preceeding the fatal fall I
falter before shattering.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~newolf~*~*~*~*~*~*~

the light: so, you're having a pre-pre-midlfe crisis?
wolfie: yes.
the light: well, that's wonderful!


icantspell

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
i got my 45 in the air waiting
Feb 28th 2005
1
just one day, i'd like to walk around in ur head
Feb 28th 2005
2
RE: the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealu
Mar 01st 2005
3
classic material
Mar 01st 2005
4
lovely
Mar 01st 2005
5
love it.
Mar 01st 2005
6
i wrote this in a hallway
Mar 03rd 2005
7
ooooooooooh
Mar 03rd 2005
8
RE: the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealu...
May 09th 2005
9
im in finals week right now...
May 09th 2005
10

Monster_Zero
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1. "i got my 45 in the air waiting"
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http://soundcloud.com/phyziks

"Furthermore, the only high that I am feeling right now is my natural magnificence."-BarTek while face down in an 8-ball.

  

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the perfect mistake
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Mon Feb-28-05 07:09 AM

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2. "just one day, i'd like to walk around in ur head"
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more than i do so on here:

left right of the second hand and
misbegotten minute clicks
clock the time spent with cuckoos and chimes
on linoleum floors in cold corridors
caught spacelessly without faith between
decisive strokes of time I
suspend without body but active mind

whatever it is you are writing out... continue to do so. peace~







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On
the corner of hope
and nowhere

i stood. ©revion

  

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the Light
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Tue Mar-01-05 09:19 AM

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3. "RE: the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealu"
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I had the image of someone curled up, foetal position, on the floor of an institution of some kind. The waiting felt drawn out and traumatic, but inevitable— almost tragic in its inevitability. I'm rambling, I know (!). I have no idea what the person was waiting for, but understand it was pivotal (thanks to the title). Had to read it a couple times as I usually use punctuation as a parachute. Liked the 'linoleum floors'— indicative of a bygone era in many respects, and also of coldness or sterility. Liked the alliteration in the last couple of lines. And 'shattering' is always a good word— emotive, and can be literal and allegorical simultaneously.

Trust all is well, *waves & cyber hug*
____________________________________________________

"The words the happy say
Are paltry melody
But those the silent feel
Are beautiful" -Emily Dickinson

"If something has to change, then it always does.
You don't need this disease,
no not right now." -Editors

"You know that we're all afraid of waking every day" -Hood

____________________________________________________

Loose Lips Sink Ships!
*stop by, say hi*
http://shattered-star.blogspot.com

"in faith
we shall board our imagined ship and wildly sail
among sacred islands of the mad till death shatters the fabulous

  

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SiempreSolaSoul
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Tue Mar-01-05 09:20 AM

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4. "classic material"
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for some reason i tend to like the shorter ones nowadays

this was graphic yet serene as crystal water

bless


-Aka Ezzsential

"there's more to life than being a foolish man's wife"~ Lauren Hill

-Aka Ezzsential

"there's more to life than being a foolish man's wife"~ Lauren Hill

  

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Intrepid Vixen
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Tue Mar-01-05 09:28 AM

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5. "lovely"
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I'm still trying to figure out what it's about to me. But, trust me, I'll be back to give it another read. I love these lines here:

decisive strokes of time I
suspend without body but active mind
preceeding the fatal fall I
falter before shattering.
~*~
Beauty is in my ear
I sketch beautiful
rhythms with a pen
canvassing
my thoughts
artfully articulated
into harmonies of
words
~*~ KSB ~*~

"My feelings or emotions or anything at all will reverberate throughout the halls of a poem."
~KSB~

"My fear is my only courage."
Bob Marley

~~~~~~~~
When One learns
to live without fear,
then One cannot be broken.

  

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hunuh
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Tue Mar-01-05 10:50 AM

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6. "love it."
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very well done, idk if its just me, but the rhythm of your piece was excellent. i was nodding my head as i read lol.

glad you dropped this.

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when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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wolfie
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Thu Mar-03-05 06:31 PM

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7. "i wrote this in a hallway"
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Thu Mar-03-05 06:31 PM

          

one of the worst hours spent in a while. just sitting there, knowing what was being said about me, but having to respect secrecy and just wait out there. the hallway was cold, the building is haunted, and i just sat there. it was painful. i hope this captured that.

ps thanks for all the love and support

~*~*~*~*~*~*~newolf~*~*~*~*~*~*~

the light: so, you're having a pre-pre-midlfe crisis?
wolfie: yes.
the light: well, that's wonderful!


icantspell

  

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InFluenCe
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Thu Mar-03-05 10:14 PM

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8. "ooooooooooh"
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this was one different poem... nice.... loved it... archiveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!

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i try to practice my war like tactics, but in the clutch of your touch my armor just collapses - mighty mos def

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PhotoSynthesis
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Mon May-09-05 06:18 PM

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9. "RE: the countdown before the decisive moment that cause distinct revealu..."
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This "sounds" like a ~waiting~ pCe -- With time moving slower than usual -- (Or at least seeming like it's moving slower)

I sense apprehension mixxed with frustration -- Like TIME ain't on your side!


Sorry for the delayed reaction -- But TIME be's like dat sometimes! --



^UP^

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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hdub
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Mon May-09-05 06:47 PM

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10. "im in finals week right now..."
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..and pulling all nighters like crazy

this poem reminded me of that crazy disconnected feeling when you up way too late by yourself

...(the end)...

  

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