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gsquared
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"The Shoulders of the Universe"


          

The code to the
lock on the
motherlode,

cascades of sequential
understanding fueled by
love and other emotions and

beauty and things, wild flowers and
beetles on leaves upside down,
the royal blue in the sky, swells of
red later, moistures here and there

my muscles are tired from long walks up mountains,
my skin feels like me
everything can tell me something and
I know
how to listen,
i'm open, i want you to know me

it's young to be me, i don't know how to fall,
a crow is nearby, i saw a yellow bird with a
reddish head, things aren't ugly anymore

i hear trains at night, I pull my pillow
over my head, it's cool and dark, i want
to go to California for the weekend soon,
there are waves there and people too

i build things that stay built, i'm simple though
i am learning to flow, i saw Femi Kuti

mexicans are angels sometimes, i eat lettuce and
a lot of fruit, whatever is cheapest, it's good, it

helps me to
sit my
head
between the
shoulders of the universe,
everything is me,
nothing can resist itself

in health, humble, a rippling breath whispering
something sweet to be carried softly
atop the water, over and
around red rocks and
fallen trees, cool,
soothing, free...

everything is me












"Motion of the Ocean Lotion
Rubbing together
Like kindling sticks creating forest fires
~Slow Burn~
My turn to speak in tongues"

--Photosynthesis

  

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Damn..
Jul 31st 2005
1
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Jul 31st 2005
2
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Jul 31st 2005
3
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Jul 31st 2005
4
i could read this over and over...
Aug 01st 2005
5
Ditto ...
Aug 10th 2005
6
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Aug 11th 2005
7
Vote to Archive
Aug 12th 2005
8
2nd That -- Vote to Archive
Aug 13th 2005
10
      3rd
Aug 17th 2005
13
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Aug 12th 2005
9
tight
Aug 15th 2005
11
RE: The Shoulders of the Universe
Aug 15th 2005
12

Lucky187
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Sun Jul-31-05 01:33 PM

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1. "Damn.."
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Damn dawg. Whats up? This was a nice piece.. kinda calming just to read, I especially liked this line, and I can't quote cause I ain't lookin' at it, but it basically said

'sometimes mexicans are angels'

I liked that. Reminded me of an Ex, and somehow in a pleasant way. Don't know why you put it- don't know what half this shit really means dawg, but it was.. serene. Nice drop bro, cats is sleepin' if they don't start tellin' ya the same.

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"I wandered around darkened hallways,
Lab-rynth, filled with,
Blood vessels and plasma,
Caught glances of windows-
Peeking OUT, exoflective,
Invective messages left on my own voice mail..
And by looking out from within?

I

  

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HueyNewton
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Sun Jul-31-05 03:45 PM

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2. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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Femi Kuti saw an ad for them here in the bay area . .
i can dig it man!!!!

they showed us phYsically, we could reach infinitY, but mentally, through the century, we lost our identitY
-Rakim

  

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nappiness
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Sun Jul-31-05 07:01 PM

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3. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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"my skin feels like me"
this line is when i started getting into the piece.

it has a lot of foresight and is somewhat an affirmation of sorts.

good stuff...

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PhotoSynthesis
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Sun Jul-31-05 11:42 PM

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4. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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Sun Jul-31-05 11:43 PM by PhotoSynthesis

          

This sounds like you're in a beautiful place right now -- (Emotionally, Physically & Spiritually) -- -- (((Centered))) -- -- While still exploring and learning daily!

I wish I could've gone with you to see Femi Kuti -- He's really blown ^UP^ since his daddy died -- *sigh*


*Wonderful pCe* -- I likes ...






A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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invisible ink
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Mon Aug-01-05 11:58 AM

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5. "i could read this over and over..."
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my muscles are tired from long walks up mountains,
my skin feels like me
everything can tell me something and
I know
how to listen,
i'm open, i want you to know me




that's my spirit...miss kimabe

if you didn't define yourself for yourself you'd be crunched into other peoples fantasies of you an eaten alive.

audre lorde

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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6. "Ditto ..."
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What ^she^ said --


A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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Focus23
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7. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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>my muscles are tired from long walks up mountains,
>my skin feels like me
>everything can tell me something and
>I know
>how to listen,
>i'm open, i want you to know me

Been there before.
Enlightenment, of sorts, could also be referred to as hind-sight.


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InGeniousPoet
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8. "Vote to Archive"
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I am filled with a wonderfullness that is just beaming from this piece. someone pleace archive this. this is beautiful poetry. period.
________________________________________
"With peace and love in my lungs,
I hold my breath until the Poet returns."

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PhotoSynthesis
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10. "2nd That -- Vote to Archive"
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*Yesssssss*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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n/m

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KingRameses
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9. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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"i build things that stay built"-A line worthy of being tattooed on someone.
Very abstract,stream of conscious writing packed with colorful imagery,
-Impressive, and now for seconds.

  

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UncleClimax
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the "its young to be me" stanza tripped me out..

"mexicans are angels sometimes" - reminded me of Crash.

but um yeah....i liked the ending bit a lot too...u got some good stuff goin on here..very buddhist...u practice?

yeah man...i could see this in the archives....consider this another vote.

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Nowachaoticthing
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12. "RE: The Shoulders of the Universe"
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This reads like a beautiful, peaceful journey.
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"To be a poet is a condition, not a profession."
- Robert Frost

  

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