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hunuh
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Tue Mar-01-05 06:46 AM

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"where king james has failed,"


          

i will not.

her pupils were
the greatest
teachers i've ever known.
a muse with a noose,
we talked in the tongues
of pictures past.
a stoic pose
brought about heroic prose.
had she blinked
this ink would
no longer be sufficient,
an epic story cut short.

Romeo is still bleeding,
and no one cares.

her
eyes
made
me
want-

to be a poet.

slurred words match
the hue of two of
the most unforgiving
disciples my i's have
encountered. blasphemy
birthed these idle
hands that carress my
soul with a choke hold.

the gospel of gentics

made an untainted page
breath, inanimate life
follows, accustomed to
her light, and lives by
the grace of my pen.
the sin in the innocence
of a broken verse,
petty nouns and verbs
obscure poetic justice.

so
in
the
spirit
of
salvation-

god did away with black and white pictures.

sacrificed a broken
social scene's heretic
hobby. revisionist pictoral
history forever banned
as long as my words stand.

holy mandates
and my own
colloquial curiosity.

thank you.

(for lizzie.)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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Subject Author Message Date ID
aight!
Mar 01st 2005
1
nope.
Mar 01st 2005
3
      RE: nope.
Mar 01st 2005
5
           interpretation
Mar 01st 2005
6
           RE: interpretation
Mar 01st 2005
7
           RE: nope.
Mar 01st 2005
8
this is tuff
Mar 01st 2005
2
the only way man.
Mar 01st 2005
4
i am telling u rite now... i wish i were lizzie...
Mar 01st 2005
9
RE: where king james has failed,
Mar 01st 2005
10
Two Words ...
Mar 01st 2005
11
up.
Mar 02nd 2005
12
RE: where king james has failed,
Mar 03rd 2005
13
RE: where king james has failed,
Mar 03rd 2005
14
never read your work before...
Mar 03rd 2005
15
up.
Mar 06th 2005
16
archive
Apr 04th 2005
17
again
Jul 21st 2005
19
RE: where king james has failed,
Apr 04th 2005
18

Morehouse
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Tue Mar-01-05 06:58 AM

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1. "aight!"
In response to Reply # 0


  

          


has she read this?

"a muse with a noose"

word to that.



***********************************


"At least embarrassment is not an imitation.
It's intimacy for beginners,
the orgasm no one cares to fake.
I almost admire it. I almost wrote despise." -Alice Fulton

"The future is a grey seagull
Tattling in its cat-voice of departure.
Age and terror, like nurses, attend her,
And a drowned man, complaining of the great cold,
Crawls up out of the sea."
-Sylvia Plath

"I would like to be the air
that inhabits you for a moment
only. I would like to be that unnoticed
& that necessary." -Margaret Atwood

***********************************
http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=500290931


myself is sculptor of
your body’s idiom:
the musician of your wrists;
the poet who is afraid
only to mistranslate
a rhythm in your hair...
-E.E. Cummings

  

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hunuh
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:17 AM

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3. "nope."
In response to Reply # 1


          

idk how it sounds or comes across, so it stays hidden for a while.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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Morehouse
Member since Feb 25th 2003
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:23 AM

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5. "RE: nope."
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no doubt.

i dropped this muse poem on a longtime friend/love interest of mine and all she said was "that's real nice"...

i'm thinking, damn, that's it.
i hate expectation.


***********************************


"At least embarrassment is not an imitation.
It's intimacy for beginners,
the orgasm no one cares to fake.
I almost admire it. I almost wrote despise." -Alice Fulton

"The future is a grey seagull
Tattling in its cat-voice of departure.
Age and terror, like nurses, attend her,
And a drowned man, complaining of the great cold,
Crawls up out of the sea."
-Sylvia Plath

"I would like to be the air
that inhabits you for a moment
only. I would like to be that unnoticed
& that necessary." -Margaret Atwood

***********************************
http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=500290931


myself is sculptor of
your body’s idiom:
the musician of your wrists;
the poet who is afraid
only to mistranslate
a rhythm in your hair...
-E.E. Cummings

  

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hunuh
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:26 AM

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6. "interpretation"
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worries me more than anything.

because it can be taken two ways and both can be cool but one can make things way too awkward.

this piece is just a thank you, but it can complicate the living hell out of things lol.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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Morehouse
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:29 AM

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7. "RE: interpretation"
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i agree.

***********************************


"At least embarrassment is not an imitation.
It's intimacy for beginners,
the orgasm no one cares to fake.
I almost admire it. I almost wrote despise." -Alice Fulton

"The future is a grey seagull
Tattling in its cat-voice of departure.
Age and terror, like nurses, attend her,
And a drowned man, complaining of the great cold,
Crawls up out of the sea."
-Sylvia Plath

"I would like to be the air
that inhabits you for a moment
only. I would like to be that unnoticed
& that necessary." -Margaret Atwood

***********************************
http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=500290931


myself is sculptor of
your body’s idiom:
the musician of your wrists;
the poet who is afraid
only to mistranslate
a rhythm in your hair...
-E.E. Cummings

  

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Otto
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Tue Mar-01-05 08:33 AM

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8. "RE: nope."
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that's real nice"...

i'm thinking, damn, that's it.
i hate expectation.

...agreed. i'll reply in a minute huhtah...

-Otto




  

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rgv
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:08 AM

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2. "this is tuff"
In response to Reply # 0


          

a muse with a noose,
we talked in the tongues
of pictures past.


ima fry u sum fish
and make u sum red rice
cole slaw
iced tea for this one
basket of shrimp


i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel

  

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hunuh
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Tue Mar-01-05 07:18 AM

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4. "the only way man."
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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the perfect mistake
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Tue Mar-01-05 01:39 PM

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9. "i am telling u rite now... i wish i were lizzie..."
In response to Reply # 0


          

for these lines alone:

Romeo is still bleeding,
and no one cares.

her
eyes
made
me
want-

to be a poet.

slurred words match
the hue of two of
the most unforgiving
disciples my i's have
encountered.

pure unadulterated... gold... *nods*







================





On
the corner of hope
and nowhere

i stood. ©revion

  

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ASIEM
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Tue Mar-01-05 03:16 PM

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10. "RE: where king james has failed,"
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you fused words and thoughts that somehow became a gateway a black hole even now what happens beyond the beyond? I'm out here, in here, please come and get me...


ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
checkout these sites
http://4luvofpoetry.com
www.poetology.com

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




www.myspace.com/asiem61

  

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PhotoSynthesis
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Tue Mar-01-05 03:24 PM

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11. "Two Words ..."
In response to Reply # 0


          

*Simply Awesome*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

  

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hunuh
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Wed Mar-02-05 06:57 PM

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12. "up."
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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wolfie
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Thu Mar-03-05 04:25 AM

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13. "RE: where king james has failed,"
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god did away with black and white pictures.

sacrificed a broken
social scene's heretic
hobby. revisionist pictoral
history forever banned
as long as my words stand.

holy mandates
and my own
colloquial curiosity.


i really liked this. the pace of the words was so fast it was as if you're running out of time and you're trying to get as many words out with as much meaning as possible.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~newolf~*~*~*~*~*~*~

the light: so, you're having a pre-pre-midlfe crisis?
wolfie: yes.
the light: well, that's wonderful!


icantspell

  

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Otto
Member since Dec 19th 2002
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Thu Mar-03-05 09:45 AM

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14. "RE: where king james has failed,"
In response to Reply # 0


  

          

Romeo is still bleeding,
and no one cares.

her
eyes
made
me
want-

to be a poet.

...damn, i wish *I* were lizzie...

eww. nah, but this is just amazing!

-Otto

  

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blak_yukon
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Thu Mar-03-05 12:16 PM

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15. "never read your work before..."
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gonna have to,ha...

nice,
blk


you will like vicversus...


This for yall keeping them bills payed / gas in the car with whatevers left / keeping something on the plate.(c) i said it.


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me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

dude, getting a response from the folks at freestyle is like watching water boil...© Tek

  

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hunuh
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16. "up."
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

when whodini made friends it was well spoken.

  

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rgv
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17. "archive"
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i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel

  

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rgv
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Thu Jul-21-05 10:19 AM

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19. "again"
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i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel

  

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Soulbrotha
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Mon Apr-04-05 10:54 AM

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18. "RE: where king james has failed,"
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A nice dedication. Liking the feel of this.

"Do to others what you would others have done unto you." - The Lord Jesus Christ

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SB tweet:www.twitter.com/soulb

  

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