Young man stood on the block so long he'll rot dustin'
Working fast food only time he hit a hot button
Balloons and pimples the only time he pop somethin'
Benefittin' natta, cuz dog he got nothin'
Like gum wrapper in his mouth, needs to stop frontin'
Its not a game especially when the cops comin'
No cell phone, can't SPRINT from the truth, stop runnin'
Can't rap, the only time he saw tracks was out huntin'
Cool Boarders the only time he bout stuntin'
That Paris poke'mon only time he was out London
Only beats he made was hands on a table, not drummin'
At the police station only time he cop somethin'
Only Mil he had was Oats after it stop lumpin'
And the only time he was F'd up...is when his report card was flunkin'
Matta fact, only time he was G'd up was when he had a problem stutterin'
Only bread he handled was Mary Jane with a whole lot of butterin'
Only smokin' he did was tailpipes, not mufflin'
Only time it rained on his block was with lightning and thunderin'
So stop wonderin' bout the boy that I'm dissin'
Cuz when you see him, he aint fake.........He's probably....a Christian

2Lettas-1Love----JESUS------

"And it's not that You're passive; Its just that Your grace is as active as Your wrath should be" -Crossmovement's PHANATIK

You know.. this song kinda reminds me of a more hip-hop version of the Offspring's 'Pretty Fly'.

The technical shit:

Technically this is a sound song. Not the greatest I've ever seen, and not archive material, but its a pretty good song. You're flowing, not reciting rhymes in a strict AB AB or anything like that, which is important. I think it could sound a little more natural, but overall you did better than most I've seen here. Once again, not the best, but, if I can use Tek's analogy, this is a 20 point game. Wordplay is also on point, not using the same played out rhymes we've all heard before, and not using them in the same way that everybody does the first time they write somethin'.

The Intangibles:

What you so pissed about, man? If somebody's fake, all that means is that they are imitating what they see. 99% of people do this, some more than others. It means they want to be something, even if they're not. I realize some people are retarded about it, but its not because they're trying to exploit its because they're using a surface facade to hide their insecurities. And I've seen the worst of it- (A 5'2 midget of a man screaming 'FUCK YOU CRACKER!' at me cause I didn't bend over backward for his ass. And yes, he's ghost-white- lighter than me, my friend). I'm just curious.. I mean you hit the nail on the head, but whats your motivation to call 'em out?

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Sig-

"I wandered around darkened hallways,
Lab-rynth, filled with,
Blood vessels and plasma,
Caught glances of windows-
Peeking OUT, exoflective,
Invective messages left on my own voice mail..
And by looking out from within?

I

WORD! I feel U, but no reason...just thinking creatively and tryna end with a twist.

2Lettas-1Love----JESUS------

"And it's not that You're passive; Its just that Your grace is as active as Your wrath should be" -Crossmovement's PHANATIK

Aight, I just wanted to make sure you weren't one those people thats like.. "He ain't real, fuck him, dumbass" Judgemental types. Cause, if you met me in RL, thats what you'd probably think of me.

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Sig-

"I wandered around darkened hallways,
Lab-rynth, filled with,
Blood vessels and plasma,
Caught glances of windows-
Peeking OUT, exoflective,
Invective messages left on my own voice mail..
And by looking out from within?

I

I see!

2Lettas-1Love----JESUS------

"And it's not that You're passive; Its just that Your grace is as active as Your wrath should be" -Crossmovement's PHANATIK