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I'm almost afraid to be the first one to vote on this. Cuz I know cats are watchin to see what the consensus is before they vote. But anyway, lets break it down:
>hdub: >i been rising faster than jacko’s dick in a schoolyard
^Yo you went hard with very first line. I laughed so hard at this. I see you took note of your verse last round where you came out a little slow. Good work.
>my strato-spits leave behind bastards-- ric you just drool hard >i school ‘tards— you my newest special victim >laying down the law i orders up slick twisted rhythyms in written >i’m more sick than sodomy- kidding??-- he’s gotta be!!-- i shock >ric- lobotomy!! >there isn’t- no topping me- dub’s ripping-- unstoppably >i’m spitting sweeter than filling, killing his chances like poverty
^clever filler
>don’t bother me-- i seen too much of ya ric- >been feeling amiss since hitting your ‘click wit’ them pics of ya >tits!! > >http://fileserv8.soundclick.com/images/m/song/miracleric+aztectouch2>.jpg > >PEEP THIS!!!!!! ^^^^^^^^^
^This was funny by itself, but the fact that you accompanied your written verse with a picture is hilarious. That made this whole section an evil, heartless, attack on someone's charachter. Which in battle rhymin is essential. Excellent.
>then ask yourself this question: >which one of his boys took that shot of ric in the fleshin’?? >just guessing- truly doubt it was a chick- >he’s never been alone wit’ a bitch ‘cause ric looks like a twix!!
^Also funny.
>a stick!!- light weight in life and in posts >ric’s toast wit’ no votes- vanishing quicker than ghosts >i hosts wit’ the most **meaning MC superior** >grab this joke by his throat, expose boasting exteriors >get his second neck broke- i rock, from tops to posteriors >no motives ulterior- i’m aiming straight at the crown >i faced the best in each round- and i’ve knocked them all down >like bobby brown- i make messes of divas
^Clever indeed.
>rics newest pose?- frown!!- so hot, spit the essence of fever
^Any reference to an emcee being hot as a fever is cliche and overused. I've done it myself. It kind of takes away from your originality.
>once the most hated in town- now dub’s found him believers >sharper than cleavers wit' more bite than a beaver >i stay giving young bucks growing pains like them seavers >get medals gold like retrievers- ric gets nothing but bronzed >i’m cooler than fonz- leave him froze and conned like billy d did >wit’ han >the tourney’s don- running shit like i’m gotti >now on to round four!!- yo!- beam me up scotty!!!!
^Good way to close. Not great, but good. All in all dub, you got a really hot verse here.
MiracleRic: “fathers day”
>I got ya card this weekend >It read: “yea dad, I know I was weak then… >But u gave me the building blocks >And now im considered real skilled with drops >And even tho u killed me pops >I still feel ya style is more ill then a million pox >U make me feel brilliant, hot, >And yet small and chicken >I know u the most raw with writtens >Battling u twice is tryin to quickdraw with mittens >Why should the king of the jungle brawl with kittens >But in case u spit a verse of heat and win, >At least don’t say hearse or skeet again”
^It was a clever concept to go with a father/son theme, but this whole section was unnecessary. I mean it wasn't bad by any stretch, just...I guess...clever filler is what I'm lookin to say.
>Aint that cute aus? But duke lost, >and there’s no time for breadcrumbs >its time for bed son, cause as soon as this web’s spun >Miracle will turn past cats from flashbacks into red rum >its over…kill like rocky part 5, >i was proud I could give my seed an archive >but enough with this ...hallmark vibe…
^HARD. That should have been your whole steezy all the way through. You commented yourself on the 'Hallmark Vibe' the verse was taking on. But this part is that heat we want.
>The board wonders why u even bothered to ...show >I God-fathered ya flow, steez, and rhyme scheme, >Im king! And nine fiends wouldn’t vote against >Me if u offered em free coke and visine >Along with hints of god’s schemes >My illness has no cure, meds, pops a purebred >Ive got the game sown up, ive even improved ur threads, >U all grown up, but a vet with ric’s calm text >Knows how to avoid an Oedipus(s) complex >First time u lost, hunter coerced voting… >This time, its cause u lack punches that’s worth quoting
^Again, this is that fire that we want. Excellent lyricism.
Aww man. When I first read the verses through, I was gonna give it to Hdub on the strength of that picture he put in his verse. *shakes head* lol But after dissecting this, Ric just came so hard in the latter part of his verse, that it kind of balanced out. But I can't vote a draw, which is what I want to do. I'm going to take my gut feeling of a draw out of the equation, and based on the math of how I broke the verses down, Hdub wins by the skin of his teeth.
Vote: Hdub
"I'm scientific, but my reflex gangsta"- Black Thought
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