this hunger inside summons
hope, obliterating past excuses,
evolves views of love validating ease’s simplicity

then habitués each night…
rests every second thoughts set,
uneasy…near erratic and sinister yearnings…
through halting rumours of unending grief howling,
‘hell exists! leave life!’

in nihilism,
sanity’s attempted negation…intent’s yawing sojourn…

impediment marauds, preys each day in mute emotional naïve thoughts.

doubt: overwhelms understanding beyond truth.
opaque perceptions appetise quietly upon ego
– noir, overbearing, insidious, repelling –
total of the anger lingering…

leaves, escapes and ventures ever silent;
only now, love yells
violent incantations offering less…emitting nothing, then
emotions mellow on thoughts importuning other needs – softer

years evoke awareness requiring something
of finesse…
unrest, next, recedes enticing serenity testily

lived in versions evoking death
intently…never tasted…except now thoughts left yield
knowing…not of ways imbued nor granted
extreme xeno truth reaching erring minds emptily…

– incoherence needs cooperative hope’s effective reason, even near craziness’s end.

until new thoughts, ideas live…
self enters lucid freedom...
expels xero privations elicited lengthily, selling
doom once obfuscating minds

through hopelessness, overwhelming unique glory hungering
openness praying effectively, ‘now nihilism ends, serenity saves’.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

this poem was inspired by 3rd i's work and spurred on by discussions with foneticcus.

there are 3 pieces and 4 styles in this entire piece.

a total of 193 words but only 11 that truly make the piece.

i hope you enjoy this as much as the challenge of writing this thrilled me.

look at it as a puzzle to figure out the full meaning.

peace and respect,

natalie

edit: much respect to my muse for being my first guinea pig (love ya) and my mom for appreciating.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

hey break it down for me"weakmind'd"
ya'll know i have a 2nd grade vocab.
but i'm still try to peace it together though
you know- i want stop cant stop-whose line?

Freeworld Order
Dangurus Mines

your note really enhanced the piece for me... i don't know why. maybe it's because you expressed what we all feel when we write -- that we have accomplished something in the piece as a whole but only very small parts of it eally matter to us.

in general i thought the piece was excellent, i'm going to read this again...

~*~*~*~*~*~*~newolf~*~*~*~*~*~*~

the light: so, you're having a pre-pre-midlfe crisis?
wolfie: yes.
the light: well, that's wonderful!


icantspell

and i haven't peeped a single reply yet!!!

you know, at first i thought i was crazy. because i do that stuff all the time. look at a sentence that says "Some live in Milwaukee" and go, "hey, the first letters of each word spell s,l,i,m..."

not that i'm looking for my name everywhere. you KNOW what i mean.

and those 11 words...whew. portrait of pain.

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www.myspace.com/robsturma

I'll be back -- I gotta go get my dictionary and thesaurus! -- *chuckles*

I will tell you that upon first read -- This went right the phuck over my head! -- *sowwwwwy*

Maybe I'm just tired here @ work and need to rest my eyes & mind 4 awhile before tackling a read such as this -- But it seems awfully complex & indepth -- So I'll just re~visit it when my head is on str8~er! -- *tired smile*

>discussions with foneticcus

Oh! That explains it! -- *snickers*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

free, photo, 'n wolfie i'm really glad you guys are looking at this and somewhat enjoying it. go on and pull out the dictionary and thesauras...i had to! let me know what you come up with via inbox.

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

I'll leave the INBOXING to you Missy -- ;^)

I'd rather tell you here what I felt after reading this over a few times -- (If you don't mind) -- *smiles*

I can't say I understand the full gist of what transpired to cause this to be written -- But it sounds like you're the interpreter or translator of someone elses feelings or emotions.

The language you're translating is a mixture of languages -- The language of love -- heartbeak -- disappointment -- pain -- uncertainty -- discontent -- frustration -- insecurity -- soul~searching -- and possibly -- HOPE!


But like I told Otto -- It ain't my steeze to go around breakin' down and dissecting other folks work, nahmean? -- I read it at face value -- AND APPRECIATE IT AT FACE VALUE -- For what it's worth to my mind & eyes!

I'll leave the indepth critiquing to the EXPERTS! -- ;^)

And I'll prolly read this a few more times for clarity -- Check out the responses of others -- And maybe I'll be back for another round of refreshment!


This was an excellent pCe, by the way Natalie -- You have a gift -- Continue to use it as a blessing to others! -- *Word*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

i appreciate you reading and telling me how you feel. 'cept...i'm just curious if you figured out the entire puzzle?

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

Has anybody whose responded to your pCe so far figured out the entire puzzle? -- (Via INBOX mabye?) -- ;^)

I must've overlooked summthin' here, cuz I didn't realize we're s'posed to be figuring out a puzzle -- *chuckles*

Why U wanna make me work so hard, just to enjoy what I normally enjoy on a recreational, laid~back & fun level?!? -- *HuH?* -- (I work hard on my job daily -- So when I come 2 OKP, I just wannna "ease" my eyes on2 some refreshing, enlightening, skillful or humorous type poetry/freestyles, prose, etc.) -- I ain't tryna WORK hard at figuring out poetry puzzles -- My job is challenging & puzzling enough, girlfriend! -- *LoL*

But for YOU my dear Natalie -- I'll check this out later -- And see what I come up with! -- *wink*

Which is why I said:

"And I'll prolly read this a few more times for clarity -- Check out the responses of others -- And maybe I'll be back for another round of refreshment!"

I still enjoyed the read -- Regardless of whether I figured out the puzzle or not, nahmean? -- *smiles*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

DITTO ...i'M GONNA HAVE TO READ AGAIN MAYBE 3 OR 4 TIMES CUZ WHEN I THINK I GOT IT ...IT CHANGES OR SOMETHING

HELP ME OUT WHAT ARE THE SACRED 11 ???

The truth is always subject to revision..

think of it like a cryptogram of sorts (not a truly proper one); a very basic one at that. there's a message with a message within it and another message within that one. (did that make sense?) and each one is related. there are 3 poems (of a sort) that make up the entire thrust of this piece.

the only person who's come close is blak_yukon and no one else has said what all the messages are hee, hee, hee!

let me know what you find.

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

you get me


Nat thank you so much for the piece. it's me totally. i love you
(but not in that gay girl-on-girl-action type of way) lol

www.myspace.com/3rd_i

3rd i: so u gonna be my child's god parent
Dawgeatah: i already have 3
3rd i: yeah but do u have a black one..like pokemon gotta catch them all.

i am a self-mutilator
of the worst kind...
(c)MyLife

awwwwww, third! that means a lot to me 'cause the craftiness of your work challenges me to really use my head not just my emotions to write. if i got you in this piece, then i have exceeded even what i was hoping for and that is truly special.

'nuff respect,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

inbox

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http://unclevicart.com/

me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

dude, getting a response from the folks at freestyle is like watching water boil...© Tek

let me know when you're completely done. you're almost all the way there.

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

through hopelessness, overwhelming unique glory hungering
openness praying effectively, ‘now nihilism ends, serenity saves’.

~~~~

umm hmmm, sounds like a church hymn...i love the last stanza, it put it all together, like sniffing glue that's pleasantly potent--makes u see things u never saw before! by the way, ima start calling u three eyes now...*wink*


-Otto

lol.

www.myspace.com/3rd_i

3rd i: so u gonna be my child's god parent
Dawgeatah: i already have 3
3rd i: yeah but do u have a black one..like pokemon gotta catch them all.

i am a self-mutilator
of the worst kind...
(c)MyLife

"through hopelessness, readily overwhelming unique glory hungering
openness praying effectively, ‘now nihilism ends, serenity saves’."

=====================================================
n/m.

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

but i'm seeing things so i gotta do the inbox guess.

---i'm here---

"...do what scares you..." -- l. varela

i love your mind, dbg!

yes, keep going. inboxed u back.

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

need to re-read and think a lil bit more on it. am trying very hard to figure this one out without the help of a dictionary or thesaurus.

---i'm here---

"...do what scares you..." -- l. varela

lol! i needed them to write this. i trust you'll let me know when you find out.

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

and whenever the answer is revealed, i hope this one gets archived. it's one helluva piece and it seems to have captured the attention of the board.

---i'm here---

"...do what scares you..." -- l. varela

aw, dbg thanks for that. that's a pretty neat endorsement. i'll give it a few more days and see what you come up with then i'll post the full answer. i also have to go look for the name of one of the styles that i used...

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

*Anxiously Awaiting The Puzzle~Master's Explanation* -- ;^)

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

don't like upping my own stuff, but i figure there's a puzzle that needs figuring and i'm wondering if anyone besides blak and dbg has figured this one out...?

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

Natalie-Your wordplay is off the chain!! Im loving this piece here! Keep doing your thing....I got to write something now after reading this, see what u done lol..

Deepthought

"When I hear wack rhymes, I get fed up"- Krs-One

"Even when I'm bragging, I'm being sincere"-LL

Verse One:

Could you tell me who released our animal instinct?
Got the white man sittin' there tickled pink.
Laughin' at us on the av

i'm waiting to see what you come up with...



n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

okay, i'm working on this puzzle. Though, i'm not so sure if i'm actually solving anything. right now, i'm just figuring out how i interpret everything. I'll inbox you with those interpretations as soon as i can...


___________________________
-Phyllis-




...The caged bird sings
with fearful trill
of the things unknown
but longed for still
and is tune is heard
on the distant hill
for the caged bird
sings of freedom...

- Maya Angelou

___________________________________________
" of on thats ...
n!&&@$ ..."

have read this many times.....waiting until I can think of what I wanted to say as feedback.......and I am still blank......but the multiple reads should tell you how I feel about it. Nice drop SIs'....


Keep Flowin'...........

_________________________________________
"Too weird to live.... too rare to die..."

IG: KnowOne215 | PS+ ID: KnowOne215

i don't know, that i learned much from this piece....i became aware of your struggle with nihilism which seemed to be one of the only constant themes in the piece....in truth, i thought you crafted words, as opposed to concepts as it was difficult to find a content flow....the way you used some of your words was very creative, and i enjoyed that, but i was left, a bit dissapointed as i failed to see...the strain of your will to use the 3rd i.......peace. i hope i did not offend.

---
the pursuit of fame and fortune
leads to shame and misfortune
-tao

may i ask: did you read my 'NOTE'? it's the first post to the original post. read that then get back at me. and definitely no offense taken 'cause i'm glad you stopped to read this piece. see the puzzle then you'll understand the title even more...

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

___________________________________________
" of on thats ...
n!&&@$ ..."

Wasn't sure i'd see too many posts like this. This is professional or should i say positive professing of progressive philosophy. Experience the best teacher....

Takin hip-hop back to the beginning...

Peace to CMG for life.

Seis, you my heart... Check for I.D

Liked the way you've worded this classic piece, ty for sharing


My 3rd eye read every word while the other 2slept....


Dope

Waiting for the explanations...interesting style though
i don't see many of these here or anywhere

i give you props for that...ORIGINALITY(even though u say it's inspired by 3rd i)

******************************************
www.cdbaby.com/cd/iko
"i created a record label just to release this artist,listen to the music and you'll understand why"

Men write notes to her music - revion

NOTE 1:

The first part that went last:

"The truth is I don't love you like I used to."

If you go down the left hand side of the page and read the first letter of every line, that's what you'll find. This entire poem is about that struggle of needing to tell someone, that one has been involved with for a long time, those words, but not really knowing how to do so. Hence, the rest of the piece.


NOTE 2:

The middle piece reads:

"This hope evolves,
then rests uneasy
through hell,
in sanity's impediment:
doubt -
opaque, noir, total;
leaves only violent emotions,
years of unrest
lived intently,
knowing extreme incoherence...
until self expels doom
through openness.

This part is formed from the first word of every line.

NOTE 3:

The final part which is what most ppl see first:



That was hard to put together 'cause my goal was to use only the letters from the word at the start of the line to find other words to express the poem's theme. (I know there's a name for that, but I can't find it; can someone help me out on that?)

I thought long and hard about making it funny and completely contradictory to the final subject (not loving someone), but I haven't evolved enough to that level of skill (I'm still stuck on 'this is the topic and that's the whole topic'; sucks, but there it is *sighs*). Maybe next time

So, there you have it folks. I got some good inbox back and forth on this and to those of you (you know yourselves) who attempted it and were intrigued and curious to know the motivation for this piece, I do appreciate the time you put in. It made it even more fun.

Oh! I almost forgot - the title! I think it's a little clearer now, but I'll say this, too: sometimes, it gets really hard to take a stark look at oneself and see the truth of one's situation and so one has to turn inside to really see things as they are and not as we would have them be; and just like life, not all poems are just what's in front of us and our very own 3rd i showed us all that in one of her pieces (which inspired me to write this). So, yeah, we gotta see more than what's there and the 3rd i can help do that - although sometimes it's gotta be cajoled into opening.

Thanks again, for reading and sticking with this.

Peace and respect,

Natalie

==================================

"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

Explanation -- Much Appreciated! -- ;^)

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

hahaha, oh no, no, no,
i would not have caught all of that AT ALL!!!
yeah, i was trying to look all hard at the content and figure something out....what, exactly? I have NO idea!
thanks, that's really, very cool!
___________________________
-Phyllis-




...The caged bird sings
with fearful trill
of the things unknown
but longed for still
and is tune is heard
on the distant hill
for the caged bird
sings of freedom...

- Maya Angelou

d'oh!....damn, shoulda made them suffer more!....think,bastids!....think!



blk

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me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

dude, getting a response from the folks at freestyle is like watching water boil...© Tek

I say this with much respect, love, and admiration...

I'm way too stupid for this post.

"To be a poet is a condition, not a profession."
- Robert Frost

http://inevitabletruth.blogspot.com/
http://www.lulu.com/content/187759
http://www.hdfest.com/Barry/allreviewsbarry.html
http://wishbonec.wordpress.com/

Gotta Luv Ya! -- *smiles & giggles*


Oh yeah -- ME TOO -- *shruggs*


Come sit in da corner with me and put on this dunce hat, chaotic! -- *heheh*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

lol! now you know i'm looking at'cha sideways feeling very amused, right? no way, chaotic. and the same goes for you ms. photo y'all are makin' me feeling kinda shy, too (i have no idea why????). go figure. thanks for checking, though. and if you don't mind...what put you off balance with this piece?

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

Where should I start? First of all, I salute your effort, talent, commitment, skill, intellegence, and education.

With that said... I don't think that there's anything in the poem that i can point out as putting me "off-balence". If i am, in fact "off-balence", it is most likely due to my own limitations. To be perfectly honest, I was blown away, way BEFORE I found out that there were hidden messages.

Even if i take this piece at face-value and didn't even attempt to find the hidden messages, I find that my feeble brain is ill-equipped to comprehend a vocabulary of this magnitude without the aid of a dictionary or universal translator(I trust you know that I didn't try very hard because, as i've mentioned before, I'm very lazy.)

So, as you can see, my 1st response to this piece, although intended to be amusing, is also extremely accurate.

I'm too stupid for this post. And i'm cool with that.

"To be a poet is a condition, not a profession."
- Robert Frost

http://inevitabletruth.blogspot.com/
http://www.lulu.com/content/187759
http://www.hdfest.com/Barry/allreviewsbarry.html
http://wishbonec.wordpress.com/

Yeah, what HE said! -- *chuckles*

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

even though i'm smiling and am amused (you really know how to do that to ppl), i'm really humbled by your words, chaotic.

*whispers 'i needed the dictionary, too.'*

honestly, thanks,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

the 2nd poem...

& was well on my way to getting the first too, but i was reading the post AND working it out in notepad, so i stumbled upon the answer & spoiled my own suprise. :0(...

BUT...

i'm glad i was dope enuff 2 get 2/3...*beaming*

===========================

"Pimping ain't art...but grabbing guns is?!"
(c) Menphyel

"I've come to realise that I never loved Hip-Hop as a whole,
just a particular era that happened at the same time as
I was actively checking actively for new music."

2 out of 3 is excellent! i'm happy you had the notebook out

peace,

n.

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"I'm a curbside prophet with my hand in my pocket and I'm waiting for my rocket to come." - Jason Mraz

"Conformity is the refuge of a stagnant mind."

Can I get an Amen? -- (Second that emotion)

^Up^

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/photosynthesis_music.htm

i guarantee this wont get missed for archive and it should be in there just like BHM!!!!

fuck a sig!!!


why MiracleRic thinks me and him clic aight, here's the reason, u real with yours, i am once i bring my guard down, we both stupid as hell, we both got our talents, want a lot of the same things, like a lot of the same things, we both

this would be the third request.

inboxing know and del now.

-----
"You Sensitive Bastard", Rob Sturma's latest book of poems, is available directly from the author. It's a pretty book with a real ISBN number and everything.

www.myspace.com/robsturma

n/m

_________________________________________
"Too weird to live.... too rare to die..."

IG: KnowOne215 | PS+ ID: KnowOne215