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Giovanni
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"the Chili Bowl..."
Mon May-27-02 01:36 PM

          

I.

i heard Stevie singin' through an old jukebox
in the corner of the Chili Bowl* on U St.

i was orderin' cheese-fries...a chili burger...& iced tea...
snatch'd a vacant booth while my girlfriend sipp'd her tea,
waitin' on her chili-cheese-fries & turkey dog...


II.

my baby don't understand
why my stares be involuntary...why i be lookin' her up and down
like we just met...& why i call, "GOOD GOD!!" to her thighs
when she's walkin' ahead of me...

i can't help but tell her how beautiful she really is...
can't help but sneak her smile from her face on to my very own...


III.

it gets crowd'd...

i watch her on the phone doin' impersonations
& laugh while she smiles back at me and continues her conversation...


IV.

she says when i look at her too long, it makes her uncomfortable...
so, she puts her hands over my eyes...asks me why i look so long
into her smile, or her coffee-color'd ovals peerin' back at me...

but she don't understand
why my stares be involuntary...why i touch her so much, or
why i'm the way i am, when i'm in her space...

if she only knew how connect'd she is to my heartbeats,
she would understand why i need to be around her.


V.

i look around the place...see customers accumulatin' like dust
on a dirty air vent...Parliament Funk's "flashlight" is on the box now...

she puts away her cell phone & smiles at me
as she catches me dancin' in my seat, with my eyes closed...

her gigglin' brings me back to the reality of us, sittin' in a booth
across from each other...we both laugh...she tells me how silly i am...and we continue
laughin' at my expense...

i watch her while she's laughin'...rememberin' how many times she's told me
that i'm a good person, and good things will come back to me...

i'm thinkin' to myself, "it already has"...reach for her fingers...
& lock them in my own...


*"the Chili Bowl" is Ben's Chili Bowl on U St. NW DC.

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RE: the Chili Bowl...
May 27th 2002
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RE: the Chili Bowl...
May 27th 2002
2
gio- this is nice, man.
May 27th 2002
3
Wonderful
May 27th 2002
4
RE: Wonderful
May 28th 2002
5
RE: the Chili Bowl...
May 28th 2002
6
RE: the Chili Bowl...
May 28th 2002
7
v.lovable
May 28th 2002
8
i didn't know poets ate chili
May 28th 2002
9
wow
May 28th 2002
10
the Chili Bowl...
May 28th 2002
11
i think
May 29th 2002
12
thanks yall..
May 31st 2002
13
RE: the Chili Bowl...
Jun 03rd 2002
14
RE: the Chili Bowl...
Jun 04th 2002
17
that's every night
Jun 04th 2002
15
this is beautiful
Jun 04th 2002
16
RE: the Chili Bowl...
Jun 04th 2002
18
It's cold in up in here...
Jun 04th 2002
19
I understand you completely
Jun 05th 2002
20
and having met her
Jun 06th 2002
21
RE: the Chili Bowl...
Jun 10th 2002
22
RE: the Chili Bowl...
Jun 10th 2002
23

ASIEM
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Mon May-27-02 02:20 PM

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1. "RE: the Chili Bowl..."
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hey I like the imagery like being there. one thing when u wrote of watching her as she walked ahead of you. somehow i was outside the "Chili Bowl" watchin yall walkin down U street then abruptly
bought back when u said it was gettin crowded...
It worked tho cause it was like flashback...."Chili Bowl" scene III

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"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
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"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
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Amai_1
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Mon May-27-02 03:25 PM

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2. "RE: the Chili Bowl..."
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That's beautiful. Your woman's lucky.


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Aeon
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3. "gio- this is nice, man."
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i liked the way you didn't over do the linguistics, the way you just let feelings and sentiment color your lines, man. this is dope.

i know *exactly* the things of which you speak.

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ToeJam
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4. "Wonderful"
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This was such a well developed poem. You consistently gave just enough information to keep interest peaked and devopment progressing. And it ended with such a strong image, both sybollically and actually. A beautiful thought expressed beautifully. Peace, ToeJam.

  

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Giovanni
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5. "RE: Wonderful"
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i wanna thank all of yall for the luv.. really appreciated.. i wrote this yesterday (monday) when i was thinkin' of "Ben's Chili Bowl" and what we did Saturday.. thanks again..

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AnitaJ
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Tue May-28-02 05:15 AM

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6. "RE: the Chili Bowl..."
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you capture the pictures in words and replay them slowly for us to read...i diggs that...you know that though. keep doing you Sun...I like seeing you and your girl together too..y'all look happy together...it's sweet, carefree like laughter filling the air around evening time on weekends when we was kids and didn't have to come in early...nice piece Gio..


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peace and blessings unto you...
always,
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Sampaguita
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That was maad peace...thanks for bringing back my own memories of the chili bowl while I was at H

It was pleasant...

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minikiss
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8. "v.lovable"
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"in my journey to find truths and answers
i decided to search within self, and in self
i was able to find answers" Giovanni

never forget that!!

what can i say but simply beautiful. Guys think like this? word?

i

love

this

TTTTThis i loved

v.lovable

I

L
o
ved

Its an endless process.......and they ask if love is possible??

shining example of what love is what you make of it.

Ive had a first
but do love her
like she be
Your last

peace and breathe easy!!!

"the origin of a mans heart is black" laurynhill

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DonKnutts
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Tue May-28-02 08:38 AM

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9. "i didn't know poets ate chili"
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delrica
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Tue May-28-02 11:12 AM

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this is beautiful, gio. simply beautiful. :-D

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word_smyth
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11. "the Chili Bowl..."
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whew! *wipin' the sweat off my forhead*

Gio,
i absolutely loved this poem. there was somethin' so natural about it... simplistic. i suppose every now & then it's nice to read a piece that's considerably meaningful yet light-hearted simultaneously.

thanx 4 the read...

-wordsmyth

  

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12. "i think"
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what i like best a/b this piece is the picture it paints... like i ain't never been to nor seen the Chili Bowl but reading your words it feels like i was born in the place ) this was a beautiful read, gio... g'luck on the mic!

-trace

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Giovanni
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really appreciate the feedback..

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"Transfer"? Just visit http://myspace.com/alanking81

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"I used to walk through the valley
like Psalms 27"
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Giovanni
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up..

-----sig starts here-----
interested in buying my chapbook,
"Transfer"? Just visit http://myspace.com/alanking81

or

http://myspace.com/bustransfer
(see what people are saying
about "Transfer")

"I used to walk through the valley
like Psalms 27"
--

  

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memo
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Gio...breg

This was absolutely Beautiful...like butterfly kisses on summers dew.

i can't help but tell her how beautiful she really is...
can't help but sneak her smile from her face on to my very own...Brilliant. Peace

  

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15. "that's every night"
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when i'm with my baby....cant help but to keep staring wondering if it's real! GIO...i love u baby...u capture everything...peace


i simply want to be the love song dangling from her lips-Saul Williams


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bonamie
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16. "this is beautiful"
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I'm glad it's still here
I needed it







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I have only one solution: to rise
above this absurd drama that
others have staged around me- Frantz Fanon



DC for the RE in 2003

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we aint the two and i aint the one- lyte

  

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18. "RE: the Chili Bowl..."
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you never cease to amaze me.....it's wonderful

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Cuz you strait FROZE a moment in time.. and messed around w/physics and stretched seconds out for us to linger in a feeling that came and went much quicker than we'd like it to.. LOVIN this.. fareal!! *big smiles*

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And I have a great appreciation for people who know how to be in love. You are most ceratinly one.

Dope work.

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i see exactly why you'd feel that way...

but i know just how she feels. i've done the whole, looking up @ him and going, "why are you looking at me like THAT???" more times than i can count

thanks for explaining it for all us girls who've been blessed enough to be looked at "that way" but didn't really know how to say, "thank you."

*smile*


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Awwwwww -- The sweetness & sincerity of this flow depicts what fresh & innocent love is really all about -- ~Little Things That Provoke *Smiles & Giggles*~ & stars in your eyes! -- :^)

A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence --
I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥

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read this piece every time it was upped, but never really commented on it.

i can see every bit as clearly as a picture or a scene from a movie and felt emotion along with. very nice. you did your job.

kinda makes me want to go there.

mute

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