i heard Stevie singin' through an old jukebox in the corner of the Chili Bowl* on U St.
i was orderin' cheese-fries...a chili burger...& iced tea... snatch'd a vacant booth while my girlfriend sipp'd her tea, waitin' on her chili-cheese-fries & turkey dog...
II.
my baby don't understand why my stares be involuntary...why i be lookin' her up and down like we just met...& why i call, "GOOD GOD!!" to her thighs when she's walkin' ahead of me...
i can't help but tell her how beautiful she really is... can't help but sneak her smile from her face on to my very own...
III.
it gets crowd'd...
i watch her on the phone doin' impersonations & laugh while she smiles back at me and continues her conversation...
IV.
she says when i look at her too long, it makes her uncomfortable... so, she puts her hands over my eyes...asks me why i look so long into her smile, or her coffee-color'd ovals peerin' back at me...
but she don't understand why my stares be involuntary...why i touch her so much, or why i'm the way i am, when i'm in her space...
if she only knew how connect'd she is to my heartbeats, she would understand why i need to be around her.
V.
i look around the place...see customers accumulatin' like dust on a dirty air vent...Parliament Funk's "flashlight" is on the box now...
she puts away her cell phone & smiles at me as she catches me dancin' in my seat, with my eyes closed...
her gigglin' brings me back to the reality of us, sittin' in a booth across from each other...we both laugh...she tells me how silly i am...and we continue laughin' at my expense...
i watch her while she's laughin'...rememberin' how many times she's told me that i'm a good person, and good things will come back to me...
i'm thinkin' to myself, "it already has"...reach for her fingers... & lock them in my own...
*"the Chili Bowl" is Ben's Chili Bowl on U St. NW DC.
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hey I like the imagery like being there. one thing when u wrote of watching her as she walked ahead of you. somehow i was outside the "Chili Bowl" watchin yall walkin down U street then abruptly bought back when u said it was gettin crowded... It worked tho cause it was like flashback...."Chili Bowl" scene III
ASIEM "Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran (Be and it is) " A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder checkout this site http://4luvofpoetry.com
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..." ASIEM "Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran (Be and it is) " A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
This was such a well developed poem. You consistently gave just enough information to keep interest peaked and devopment progressing. And it ended with such a strong image, both sybollically and actually. A beautiful thought expressed beautifully. Peace, ToeJam.
i wanna thank all of yall for the luv.. really appreciated.. i wrote this yesterday (monday) when i was thinkin' of "Ben's Chili Bowl" and what we did Saturday.. thanks again..
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you capture the pictures in words and replay them slowly for us to read...i diggs that...you know that though. keep doing you Sun...I like seeing you and your girl together too..y'all look happy together...it's sweet, carefree like laughter filling the air around evening time on weekends when we was kids and didn't have to come in early...nice piece Gio..
Gio, i absolutely loved this poem. there was somethin' so natural about it... simplistic. i suppose every now & then it's nice to read a piece that's considerably meaningful yet light-hearted simultaneously.
what i like best a/b this piece is the picture it paints... like i ain't never been to nor seen the Chili Bowl but reading your words it feels like i was born in the place ) this was a beautiful read, gio... g'luck on the mic!
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Cuz you strait FROZE a moment in time.. and messed around w/physics and stretched seconds out for us to linger in a feeling that came and went much quicker than we'd like it to.. LOVIN this.. fareal!! *big smiles*
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but i know just how she feels. i've done the whole, looking up @ him and going, "why are you looking at me like THAT???" more times than i can count
thanks for explaining it for all us girls who've been blessed enough to be looked at "that way" but didn't really know how to say, "thank you."
*smile*
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Awwwwww -- The sweetness & sincerity of this flow depicts what fresh & innocent love is really all about -- ~Little Things That Provoke *Smiles & Giggles*~ & stars in your eyes! -- :^)
A guitar string vibrating, a measure of my soul, a breech in the silence -- I've always felt like words come through me & I write them down... they have no master --- gsquared ♥