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5. "I thought you gave"
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me (as the reader) exactly what I was expecting from the title and the author (a vivid piece of narrative writing that I could enjoy). My favorite lines are below:

Street lights a carnival,
slices of watermelon spit pits at
Italian iced ladies with lipstick that
tastes like Chicklets

Can I love how I want to?
are there limits to the magnet?
Are my heart, my mind, my cock
expiration dated? Now is all there is,
and now is fine, I have more to offer you than
anyone who is here now, and I ask for nothing

beyond the

equity of the moment.


You've always had the *knack* for luring me into your work. This piece was not an exception. Great work, g. *nods*

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The Equity Of The Moment [View all] , gsquared, Thu Nov-12-09 11:06 PM
 
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RE: The Equity Of The Moment
Nov 12th 2009
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Nov 12th 2009
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Nov 13th 2009
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RE: The Equity Of The Moment
Nov 13th 2009
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RE: I thought you gave
Nov 14th 2009
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      U Wrote ^This^ On A Napkin?
Nov 22nd 2009
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RE: The Equity Of The Moment
Nov 23rd 2009
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Dude...
Nov 26th 2009
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RE: The Equity Of The Moment
Nov 27th 2009
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