Your comments made me think a lot about this piece and its effectiveness. That last line, even though I love it, compromises my message and leaves me too open for rebuttal. Nothing can be argued with up to that point, and then the whole discussion can turn into an argument on that exact point instead of the overall message of the poem.

So thanks for pointing that out. Don't be afraid to make comments! There's not enough people willing to share their true opinion on this page.

Much love, organic.