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mindful
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"crowded"


  

          

she's so close to him,
smelling the tobacco stench
bedded in his mouth, she decides
to turn and face their window. her
hair is matted from years of half-assed
combing and lack of conditioner,
she scratches it
to somehow remove the thought of him.
*it's so crowded in here* she lies
in bed knowing he'll wake up
wanting to play with her pussy
before their alarm sounds. he snores,
calling his ancestors to their room
and closing the space between them;
her only thought is *i got to
get away* chained to him for
6 years and counting, she has
lost her smell. the woman she
once knew has packed herself up
and gone to heights she'll never
reach.

he awakens. arms rustic and tinman-like;
he adjusts the string in his jammies,
slaps his lips together, and pulls
her deep into his chest. she
cannot escape his hold, his grip,
his smell. she cannot escape
this life.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt

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you should know that
when you smile sincerely
it has a beautiful effect--sunshine

  

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crowded [View all] , mindful, Sun Jul-16-06 02:29 PM
 
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RE: crowded
Jul 16th 2006
1
RE: crowded
Jul 16th 2006
2
Could so see this
Jul 16th 2006
3
RE: Could so see this
Jul 17th 2006
4
*smiles* hey now
Jul 17th 2006
8
*smiles* hey now
Jul 17th 2006
9
i love the title
Jul 17th 2006
5
.
Jul 23rd 2006
22
RE: crowded
Jul 17th 2006
6
RE: crowded
Jul 17th 2006
7
RE: crowded
Jul 18th 2006
10
thanks for the breakdown gio
Jul 19th 2006
13
RE: crowded
Jul 19th 2006
11
RE: crowded
Jul 19th 2006
12
i'm interested in this Asiem, why
Jul 19th 2006
14
      RE: i'm interested in this Asiem, why
Jul 19th 2006
16
           i was wondering if that's where you were getting
Jul 20th 2006
19
Motion Picture Associated
Jul 19th 2006
15
RE: crowded
Jul 19th 2006
17
RE: crowded
Jul 20th 2006
18
I thought I responded to this a while ago...
Jul 20th 2006
20
u aint never lie.
May 02nd 2007
30
things like this make being a woman, terrifying too nm
May 02nd 2007
32
consistent improvement
Jul 23rd 2006
21
although the scenario is typical
Jul 25th 2006
23
RE: crowded
Jul 26th 2006
24
Obviously ....
Apr 25th 2007
25
sufocating
Apr 25th 2007
26
thanks Photo
Apr 25th 2007
27
very vivid
Apr 25th 2007
28
RE: crowded
Apr 25th 2007
29
this...
May 02nd 2007
31
thanks
May 02nd 2007
33
RE: crowded
May 03rd 2007
34
And this is the bit that caught my breath
May 03rd 2007
35
wow
May 11th 2007
36

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