{audio} Twisted Love Song (Need quick feedback)

I need quick feedback before I finish working on this song.

- Try and listen to the song before you read the lyrics
- Let me know if you understood what I was talking about so far
- Also, let me know what you think of my delivery
- Were there any parts you didn't hear properly?
- Sorry, the audio is Lo-fi.
- Apologies to those who checked myspace a little earlier but didn't find the song. It's on there now.
- THANKS a lot for the feedback
- AUDIO: *3rd* song on here: http://www.myspace.com/heremakhetonline


{Lyrics}
Relationships come in all shapes and sizes
Some are sick, twisted lemon and melons for making melonade
I mean, lemonade, Hell, let's go with melonade, uh hu uh uh hu uh
In French maid outfits made in France,
that speak French kiss and femme fragrance
Oh sweetness, be my sweet miss
Better yet, be my sweet Mrs.
Lay on my freaky-ness, uh
Oh lioness, you're tearing me apart,
You're ripping me a new heart
Look at whatchu got me writing like I'm in high-schooling, again:
She loves me, yes, But I can have her, not, yet
You crazy me driving
You driving me crazy, nuts
My head into pieces and dots
You got my teeth open, I don't
even know what that means, but
you got me saying out loud to your man
...
(Teaser, I know LOL. You'll here the rest later. You'll hear why I called it Twisted. It's really good.)

http://www.myspace.com/heremakhetonline