your use of sound is amazing.
and visually, the line breaks look good while aiding the rhythm of the piece.
i kinda feel like you walk the reader through the piece a little... i need to learn how to do a little of that, i tend to leave writers hanging , but this piece is light but strong... i wonder if it'd be more powerful with less (i.e. tulips)
sry for being so wordy...i'm such a nerd and still in college poetry workshop mode lol
take care sis and i look forward to reading more of your work
btw... thanks for feedback on my piece

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