yeh this works real well specially since the entire piece felt so impersonal and antagonistic,
i could see she was grittin on him while he was more like prrring
graphic

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder