>dandelions slaves to the gentle wind

^^^ slaves was a bit too jolting here. the association is a bit heavy handed amongst all that calm...

>or just to slip
>my mind slowly in between
>your words
>and become a yearning
>a promise
>that i cannot keep

^^^ that was the star, to me. it was so double entendre & so gorgeous in its sly, wink-wink grace...

>this moment
>could be the very end
>and that would be
>just fine

^^^ brilliant.

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