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P.S. the level of creativity in this small box is making my soul sing... I see the ocean and our insanities are swimming kindred.

Now back to those others...

Yes Jane did..
follow her that is
she took on the demeanor
of the man in the corner spewing the indecipherable babble
determined insanity
Philedelphia was obviously not her stop
for before she noticed her muse
gathering her small yellow puff,
she had not recognized the familiarity
of her cheesesteaked surroundings

Sarah had become Mecca
the escape
the mission
the new hope
the chocolate balls
that were eyes
shifted into the furthest corners of their sockets
looking for an escape from the hovering prescence of truth
with swift grace she danced with the uneven motions of the train
racing for an open door
a chance for freedom from her transgressions
a detour from truth to light
Brooklyn
that would have been her daughters name if not for...
nevermind
the running distracted her thought
luckily
she was unaware of the chase of truth
that she was being pursued.

Jane slid her thin frame between the closing glass
giving one last look to the possibility
of her kindred soulbrother
hoping the attendant wouldn't give him her note
until she had already gone
her eyes
slits of focused energy
sly pupils
of a fox
insistant on pursuing her prey.
In stealth
she moved as a seasoned assasin
being visibally unnoticed
racing toward confrontation
with the smell of blood on her brain
a barrn hole of her own
begging for reason
of precious disposal
invisioning the harsh scene which lended scarlet fingernails
she kept pace
four families behind her target
with children.
the first bus number was hard to predict
being that there were several greyhounds
heading north
which she knew was the direction `from the train ride
plus,
are not THE OTHERS
always headed north?
"route 1657 to Baltimore"
had been the last statement made by the
attractive Mexican ticket woman
selling the small bubble-coated lady a ticket
Jane knew her window was short
so she conjured a fictional tale
that would have made Aesop proud
gaining her a free ticket on bus 1657
she followed suit for the next three routes
through the sweet and not so sweet smelling stations
of cities on her way to Brooklyn
(she discovered was the destination on the third bus through evesgropping)
decidably far off of her original track.
Little aborter walked fast
and Jane, though frail and not that old
had a grandmother's disposition
and smoker's lungs.
upon reaching the crisp New York air
Jane gagged at it's starling stench
startling because it was unexplicably welcoming
although foul.
denying rest as a gift to her pursuit,
Janes heavy, deep draws for air
gained some unwanted attention amongst other patrons
luckily none of which were her wearing a yellow coat.
the station wall however, offered it's side for a brief recovery
and the chaser oblidged.
Limping toward the beckoning sunshine
that highlighted the end of her journey
in all of her seemingly innocent beauty
and glorious pain
Jane and Mecca met eyes
....
and then what happens?

_____________________________________
WITH CUZ (STACEY) GONE, I'LL NEVER REALLY BE HERE AGAIN

I swear I'm a marry an OKP


Nakia Genevieve are my middle names... Not my attempt to morph Phenom with Novembersgift... But...

  

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Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself [View all] , InGeniousPoet, Tue Aug-30-05 08:43 AM
 
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Demonstration-
Aug 30th 2005
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RE: Demonstration-
Aug 30th 2005
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RE: Demonstration-
Sep 19th 2005
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      I never scroll up
Sep 20th 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Aug 30th 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Aug 31st 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Aug 31st 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Aug 31st 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 01st 2005
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      RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 01st 2005
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           RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 01st 2005
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                RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 02nd 2005
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RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 02nd 2005
11
Boxed In
Sep 06th 2005
12
i like this idea. mine: Hallway To Heaven
Sep 06th 2005
13
RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 07th 2005
14
up...
Sep 10th 2005
15
i'll try--coercion really
Sep 11th 2005
16
RE: i'll try--coercion really
Sep 12th 2005
17
it SHLDA read like this:
Sep 12th 2005
18
up.
Sep 14th 2005
19
The Others
Sep 15th 2005
20
RE: The Others
Sep 15th 2005
21
      RE: The Others
Sep 16th 2005
22
           RE: The Others
Sep 16th 2005
23
                So I pass the baton back...
Sep 16th 2005
24
Is that how the story ends?
Sep 19th 2005
25
no marijane...it'll take a slight twist tho'
Sep 19th 2005
26
RE: no marijane...it'll take a slight twist tho'
Sep 19th 2005
27
      RE: no marijane...it'll take a slight twist tho'
Sep 19th 2005
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      The Others
Sep 19th 2005
30
RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 19th 2005
29
The Happiest Man Alive
Sep 22nd 2005
34
howz abouts we archives this???
Sep 23rd 2005
35
      I second that emotion...
Sep 23rd 2005
36
           can we get a third vote??
Sep 25th 2005
37
                RE: can we get a third vote??
Sep 25th 2005
39
downtown metro
Sep 25th 2005
38
RE: Writing Exercise---Indulge Yourself
Sep 25th 2005
40
soul music
Sep 26th 2005
41
up
Sep 26th 2005
42
RE: up
Sep 26th 2005
43
      Ressurected
Sep 29th 2005
44
rider eighteen
Oct 02nd 2005
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