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...this is a really tight battle so i'm gonna walk y'all through the thought process i had on this one

shit, i'm not even 100% sure who i'm leaning towards on this one- let me break this down and see if it helps clear up my answer...

>Prolif:
>aiyo,
>check the archives, u get the worst crowd feedback/
>dude begged the admins for a 1st round rematch/

prolif started off pretty strong, i was feeling the flow in here- and for me, this string of punchlines was a pretty damn decent combo

>what u need black, is somen' to make ya' soul throttle,/
>some attention at home and maybe a role model/
>cause ya' scripts so hollow, black, ya' bars start to echo/
>Lif's flames spark and target through ya black market retro/
>u aint ghetto! u trailer park; u only hustle lies/
>thinking u finally made it now cause u own a double wide/

^^^that double wide shit was real funny

this one was pretty funny too:

>get ya' goals up, ya' lumps down, and ya' flows up!!/
>u should rap about ice the way u punked down and froze up/

but then after that i didn't feel them so much, this one didn't hit very hard for me:

>and we know wassup; - back and chest so pale/
>shook! screaming S.O.S. - dude u S.O.L.!/

and this string flowed well and was funny, but the punchlines were a bit on the generic side

ru paul jokes, rhyming "cool" and "school," ya wife said i'm the best, this is all pretty standard battle ish

>cause i specialize wit' u awed, in making crews flawed/
>u specialize in faking & imitating Ru Paul!/
>too tall on the mic for this midget in pre-school/
>hey ya'll - i'll be in round 2 in a minute, so be cool/
>had to school my pupil - give'm somen' to save/
>but please don't call him stupid cause he keep flunking the
>grade!!/
>Keets took a L on this test; got more bars than zest/
>"BZZZZ!!" ya' wife just texted me and said i'm the
>best/

continuing on this punchline was also kind of back/fact/track, it's pretty simple rhyme scheme an dsubject matter

>i would'a hit her back, but i was laughing from the fact,/
>that she said u the first emcee to never have a track/
>ya' record label called; they said, they'd never have u back/
>ya' crew emailed me dawg; they said, they never got ya' back/
>don't ever call that 'rap'! even though that's what u meant
>to/

and then after that section which was a bit weak for me prolif closed real strong with this last one- ended it on a real good note

>ya' best bet - log off for good and work on instrumentals!!/
>i'm in to burning mics wit' ease, and blowing up blocks/
>Prolific melt Keeters keys, then i thow out tha' Lok/
>

well, shakeet started off strong right here:

>Shakeet:

>I’m back at it/ the emcee automatic//
>Your styles bent outta shape like a flimsy Craftmatic//
>I spit tragic/ like babies who swallow plastic//

this is a great joke for this tourney- sickly funny, offensive and nasty to the max

>Lif never Pro enough to follow my semantics//
>My flow’s tantric/ sparkin like Buddha blunts//
>When I’m done you can’t get to Nirvana soon enough//
>I can’t be touched/ the Hebrew Ark Of The Covenant//
>Be sure when you click my post that you got on your oven
>mitt//

on first read i didn't see how this flowed but now i can see the covennant/oven mitt rhyme- the flows still a little rought here, but this is alright

>I got flavor for the masses/ from niggas to pasty bastids//
>My rhymes a healthy diet, but stacked thicker than molasses//
>I’m classic/ Sha clairvoyant, you stay with the jurassic//
>Your flow is dry and flaky, need some lyrical chapstick//

once again an alright section, this would have been ok but J5 ruined it for me, they rhyme "classic and jurassic" in what's golden- i just saw them last month so i've had their mix bumping in my ride a lot and that rhyme had kind of a "been done" feel for me

now this next one right here:

>I know you Marvel cuz I spit fire like the Human Torch//
>Lif talk a slick game, but just another monkey on the porch//

ROFLOFLROFLROFL!!!!! shit! i had to go to gibberish there cause the standard abbreviations and emoticons don't do this punchline justice. to me this is the kind of joke that is exactly what we all should be bringing to the tourney; original, sickly hilarious, wit' clever wordplay on top, and offensive as all hell on the bottom. this punchline landed really hard for me, one of the best of the first round

>So I exhort/ Put some real effort into your work//
>Peasant, keep lookin for royalty like Kool Herc//
>Shakeet’s berserk/ My lyrics gotta nympho thirst//
>I impregnate minds with science in one skeet squirt//
>Like Ernie and Bert/ you sweet like Mrs. Butterworth//
>In this rhyme arena, I got more game than Jesus
>Shuttlesworth//
>
>

and finally sha's last set of lines the impregnate minds line is nice and i really liked the jesus shuttlesworth shit att he end- you both seasoned pros by now and know to close off strong

wow, i really keep going back and forth on this. my first instinct was to go with prolif- he definitely has the edge in flow and it seemed like he was more consistent with flow and punchlines. even tho shakeet had all of my favorite lines in this he just didnt seem to be bringing the consistency

on closer examination i found shakeet's flowed better than i had initially given him credit for even tho lif still has the edge there. i also looked through lif's punches and as i pointed out they seemed to be a bit generic for me

anyways my final conclusion would really be that this was a draw with lif getting the edge in flow and shakeet getting the edge on punchlines- BUT having gotten a few draw votes myself i know that thats kind of anticlimactic

i'm gonna have to do what aus did on mine with this one and give it to shakeet by .000001 on the strength of him just basically making me laugh a little harder- this was real close tho

i also want to co-sign with whateva and say that if either of these rhymes had been up against most of the other first round stuff i've seen both these dudes would be going to round 2

FINAL VOTE: SHAKEET wins in the photo finish

...(the end)...

  

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King O' Da Ring Tourney III (ROUND 1) [View all] , KnowOne, Wed Jun-08-05 10:24 AM
 
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I'll go ahead and say it if nobody will...
Jun 06th 2005
1
Questions/Comments/ish' Talk
Jun 06th 2005
2
RE: Questions/Comments/ish' Talk
Jun 06th 2005
3
      RE: Questions/Comments/ish' Talk
Jun 06th 2005
4
How many bars? 16, 20,....?
Jun 06th 2005
5
RE: How many bars? 16, 20,....?
Jun 06th 2005
6
RE: How many bars? 16, 20,....?
Jun 06th 2005
7
its up to you... just remember....
Jun 06th 2005
8
RE: King O' Da Ring Tourney III (ROUND 1)
Jun 06th 2005
9
that one jumped out at me too....
Jun 06th 2005
14
Respect for that, God...
Jun 07th 2005
29
      sorry i'm taking so long...
Jun 07th 2005
36
freal
Jun 07th 2005
27
      all right y'all...
Jun 07th 2005
88
Shoulda been us in the finals but
Jun 06th 2005
10
ha, i knew u would give me ammo
Jun 06th 2005
11
      step live nukkle
Jun 06th 2005
12
           everyone does
Jun 06th 2005
13
                Sigh
Jun 06th 2005
15
                     LOL Yo you so cocky it's hilarious.
Jun 06th 2005
19
                          This is not the time to be humble
Jun 06th 2005
20
                          he has to act cocky...
Jun 06th 2005
21
                               who's shook?
Jun 06th 2005
24
                                    Fix me a sandwich!!!
Jun 07th 2005
30
                                         RE: Fix me a sandwich!!!
Jun 07th 2005
71
                                              calm down
Jun 07th 2005
103
RE: King O' Da Ring Tourney III (ROUND 1)
Jun 06th 2005
16
lmao...
Jun 06th 2005
17
      lmao
Jun 06th 2005
18
           RE: lmao
Jun 06th 2005
22
                sigh again
Jun 06th 2005
23
                     RE: sigh again
Jun 06th 2005
25
                          RE: sigh again
Jun 07th 2005
26
Frontline
Jun 07th 2005
28
RE: Frontline
Jun 07th 2005
34
Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
31
Sikstyle takes it
Jun 07th 2005
32
lol...I'm just noticing that..smart avi.n/m
Jun 07th 2005
111
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
33
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
35
wow it's funny....
Jun 07th 2005
38
      RE: wow it's funny....
Jun 07th 2005
41
      i didnt say it wasnt close....
Jun 07th 2005
47
      RE: wow it's funny....
Jun 07th 2005
45
           get your own conversation...
Jun 07th 2005
49
                RE: get your own conversation...
Jun 07th 2005
91
                     RE: get your own conversation...
Jun 07th 2005
97
sik takes it....
Jun 07th 2005
37
close fucking battle!
Jun 07th 2005
40
Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
56
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
62
oh my god...
Jun 07th 2005
63
      RE: oh my god...
Jun 07th 2005
81
           knowone already deleted this clowns first post....
Jun 07th 2005
89
Sik
Jun 07th 2005
68
this is close enough to be called a draw but....
Jun 07th 2005
78
Whateva Gets my vote...
Jun 07th 2005
82
RE: Whateva Gets my vote...
Jun 07th 2005
85
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
92
Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
99
Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
104
** sig for reference
Jun 07th 2005
106
congrats on the battle...
Jun 07th 2005
110
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
112
Whateva
Jun 07th 2005
117
Whateva
Jun 08th 2005
132
Sikstyle
Jun 08th 2005
185
RE: Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 10th 2005
238
Sikstyle VS Whateva
Jun 12th 2005
243
Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
39
try as you might...
Jun 07th 2005
43
RE: try as you might...
Jun 07th 2005
44
      one of your big punchhlines....
Jun 07th 2005
51
           RE: one of your big punchhlines....
Jun 07th 2005
52
                actually no....
Jun 07th 2005
54
                     RE: actually no....
Jun 07th 2005
55
                          you lying again....
Jun 07th 2005
59
                               RE: you lying again....
Jun 07th 2005
65
                                    oh you back....
Jun 07th 2005
67
                                         RE: oh you back....
Jun 07th 2005
73
RE: Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
46
RE: Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
50
Zin wins
Jun 07th 2005
48
frontline
Jun 07th 2005
69
Zin
Jun 07th 2005
75
Zin
Jun 07th 2005
76
Zin
Jun 07th 2005
80
Zin with ease...
Jun 07th 2005
87
RE: Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
90
RE: Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
96
Zin
Jun 07th 2005
105
Zin...
Jun 07th 2005
113
RE: Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 07th 2005
114
MAN ....
Jun 07th 2005
121
Z!N
Jun 08th 2005
133
Zin VS FrontLIne
Jun 12th 2005
244
Rajeniro757 VS Auriz Deep
Jun 07th 2005
61
RE: Rajeniro757 VS Auriz Deep
Jun 07th 2005
64
auriz deep
Jun 07th 2005
66
Rajeniro757 wins
Jun 07th 2005
72
Rajeniro757
Jun 07th 2005
74
Alright
Jun 07th 2005
77
      and what the fuck are you doin
Jun 07th 2005
98
           this dude...lmao
Jun 07th 2005
101
           Outspit your warmups?
Jun 07th 2005
102
           Aight, sign me up
Jun 07th 2005
109
                Ope!!!
Jun 08th 2005
153
Rajeniro757
Jun 07th 2005
79
Rajeniro 757 in a blowout...
Jun 07th 2005
93
Raj
Jun 07th 2005
100
Rajeniro757
Jun 07th 2005
118
born and raised in hampton
Jun 08th 2005
137
Rajeniro757
Jun 07th 2005
119
RE: Rajeniro757 VS Auriz Deep
Jun 07th 2005
120
Rajeniro757
Jun 08th 2005
134
Raj...
Jun 08th 2005
138
Rajeniro757
Jun 08th 2005
187
Rajeniro757 VS Auriz Deep
Jun 12th 2005
246
Yo it's 4:30 already. Half of the field will be d-q'd. Sad.
Jun 07th 2005
83
RE: Yo it's 4:30 already. Half of the field will be d-q'd. Sad.
Jun 07th 2005
84
Hee heh heee heee hee
Jun 07th 2005
86
as much as hdub was in this post...
Jun 07th 2005
94
look up^^^....
Jun 07th 2005
95
the suspense is killing me...
Jun 07th 2005
107
      RE: the suspense is killing me...
Jun 07th 2005
108
DVS VS hdub
Jun 07th 2005
115
RE: DVS VS hdub
Jun 07th 2005
116
DVS
Jun 07th 2005
122
dubs
Jun 07th 2005
123
RE: DVS VS hdub
Jun 07th 2005
124
at first look draw...
Jun 07th 2005
125
The hottest battle as of yet
Jun 07th 2005
126
RE: The hottest battle as of yet
Jun 07th 2005
127
      RE: The hottest battle as of yet
Jun 08th 2005
128
      RE: The hottest battle as of yet
Jun 08th 2005
135
Hdub....
Jun 08th 2005
129
RE: DVS VS hdub
Jun 08th 2005
130
DVS
Jun 08th 2005
131
RE: DVS VS hdub
Jun 08th 2005
143
HDUB WINS...
Jun 08th 2005
186
tie.. best battle so far.. i'ma reread this one later
Jun 08th 2005
188
fuckit, i'm not voting. both should advance lol
Jun 09th 2005
192
DVS
Jun 09th 2005
189
welp, at first i wasnt going to vote
Jun 09th 2005
211
DVS VS hdub
Jun 12th 2005
245
FYI!!!!!.....
Jun 08th 2005
136
I'm crispysnare
Jun 08th 2005
146
Prolif VS Shakeet Lokh Em
Jun 08th 2005
139
Wow...
Jun 08th 2005
140
i wanna cosign but...
Jun 08th 2005
141
so you copyrighted SOL for your own use?
Jun 08th 2005
147
      i dunno, u cats keep sayin it
Jun 08th 2005
151
           that must be a sore spot
Jun 08th 2005
152
                where ur audios at coward
Jun 08th 2005
154
                     Oh they comin clown
Jun 08th 2005
155
                          yawn
Jun 08th 2005
156
                               Comic relief
Jun 08th 2005
157
                               i meant...i aint in a rush with audios
Jun 08th 2005
158
                                    nukka ask about me?
Jun 08th 2005
163
                               you see this dude is all talk...
Jun 08th 2005
159
                                    I got you
Jun 08th 2005
161
                                         you think...
Jun 08th 2005
164
                                              Youll never
Jun 08th 2005
166
                                                   if he hadnt underestimated u...
Jun 08th 2005
168
                                                   u murked me
Jun 09th 2005
201
                                                        RE: u murked me
Jun 09th 2005
220
                                                   RE: Youll never
Jun 08th 2005
173
                                                        Im at work
Jun 09th 2005
202
                                                             son i am from brooklyn...
Jun 09th 2005
225
RE: Wow...
Jun 08th 2005
142
Prolif
Jun 08th 2005
144
nice battle
Jun 08th 2005
145
Prolif
Jun 08th 2005
148
Prolif
Jun 08th 2005
150
shit i couldn't decide so i took about 7 shots of absolute
Jun 08th 2005
178
He don't wanna see me again. Trust.
Jun 08th 2005
183
      ayo
Jun 08th 2005
184
Prolif
Jun 08th 2005
180
Prolif
Jun 09th 2005
190
Prolif takes it...
Jun 09th 2005
193
RE: Prolif takes it...
Jun 09th 2005
194
How can y'all ignore this line?
Jun 10th 2005
236
Prolif VS Shakeet Lokh Em
Jun 12th 2005
247
MiracleRic VS flashiusclay
Jun 08th 2005
160
BUAHAHAHHHAHAHAAAA
Jun 08th 2005
162
yeah I know
Jun 08th 2005
177
MiracleRic
Jun 08th 2005
165
RE: MiracleRic VS flashiusclay
Jun 08th 2005
167
MiracleRic
Jun 08th 2005
169
MiracleRic
Jun 08th 2005
170
RE: MiracleRic VS flashiusclay
Jun 08th 2005
171
i'm not gonna vote on this one....
Jun 08th 2005
172
RE: MiracleRic VS flashiusclay
Jun 08th 2005
174
E-Corpse LOL, Co-sign
Jun 08th 2005
175
MiracleRic....
Jun 08th 2005
176
hold up !!!
Jun 08th 2005
179
how he expose me??
Jun 08th 2005
181
      Hmm...
Jun 08th 2005
182
MiracleRic
Jun 09th 2005
191
what about the Mayan Priest shit?
Jun 09th 2005
200
      i actually thought that line was cool
Jun 09th 2005
204
Am I the only cat taking Flash?
Jun 09th 2005
195
P.S. I caught that "Sears Roebuck Tuxedo" reference....
Jun 09th 2005
196
Thx DVS for the support
Jun 09th 2005
198
      Not sure.....
Jun 09th 2005
207
           Good Lord
Jun 09th 2005
209
           RE: Good Lord
Jun 09th 2005
210
                OK OK, fair enuf
Jun 09th 2005
214
                     RE: OK OK, fair enuf
Jun 09th 2005
217
                     Aight
Jun 09th 2005
229
                          RE: Aight
Jun 09th 2005
231
                     more talk....
Jun 09th 2005
223
                          there is no doubt in my mind that my shit will be better written
Jun 09th 2005
227
                          dub
Jun 12th 2005
248
           These were good
Jun 09th 2005
213
                Well that's your opinion
Jun 09th 2005
215
                     This is a forum
Jun 09th 2005
216
                     well put.
Jun 09th 2005
219
                     I'd be the first to say im not as polished as id like
Jun 09th 2005
218
                          but to call my flow garbage is hate
Jun 09th 2005
221
now i cant claim flawless victory :(
Jun 09th 2005
197
      Congratulations anyway
Jun 09th 2005
199
      oh, now this doesnt count
Jun 09th 2005
203
           Stupid cat
Jun 09th 2005
208
                no...U cant see flow
Jun 09th 2005
224
                     How can you see flow?
Jun 09th 2005
226
                          RE: How can you see flow?
Jun 09th 2005
228
                               bla bla yadda babble
Jun 09th 2005
230
                               RE: How can you see flow?
Jun 12th 2005
249
      Ha! C'mon man...
Jun 09th 2005
205
           RE: Ha! C'mon man...
Jun 09th 2005
206
                I have seen (heard) the evidence Miracle Rick
Jun 09th 2005
212
                     RE: I have seen (heard) the evidence Miracle Rick
Jun 09th 2005
222
                          RE: I have seen (heard) the evidence Miracle Rick
Jun 10th 2005
232
MiracleRic VS flashiusclay
Jun 12th 2005
242
      wow
Jun 12th 2005
250
Ummm...
Jun 10th 2005
233
RE: Ummm...
Jun 10th 2005
234
i was wondering about this myself...
Jun 10th 2005
235
      RE: i was wondering about this myself...
Jun 10th 2005
237
           ALTERNATE!!!!!!
Jun 11th 2005
239
                ur avatar
Jun 11th 2005
240
                     well............
Jun 11th 2005
241
ThaAnthology VS nuke
Jun 13th 2005
251
BarTek VS MCee
Jun 13th 2005
252
Biohazard VS mzwilliams
Jun 13th 2005
253
southernboy_423 VS ToeJam
Jun 13th 2005
254
jayare214 VS McHanson (Double DQ!)
Jun 13th 2005
255
def1 VS TRIQUENO
Jun 13th 2005
256
ROUND 1 RESULTS
Jun 13th 2005
257
RE: ROUND 1 RESULTS
Jun 13th 2005
261
Round 2 An alternate is needed!
Jun 13th 2005
258
i say either me or Sikstyle...
Jun 13th 2005
259
RE: i say either me or Sikstyle...
Jun 13th 2005
264
Sha is game. Can a rookie get some love?! lol
Jun 13th 2005
260
RE: Round 2 An alternate is needed!
Jun 13th 2005
262
      I would pic on of the 3 but....
Jun 13th 2005
263

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