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bio: thoughtremedy, 20 years old. polish, and south african. i began conversatin with my pad when i turned 15. i bodybuild, play ball, philosophize, and analyze.

Dedication: My queen, Sharmin Hassaniani

"In Dreams"

golden brown locks
molten earth eyes

gasp!

she breathes
silent fury resonate through caves of her deepest
travelling with rock her wind fills the earth blood

she is observer
of ancient and present times
she writes fate for patrons of love
with gentle exhales of her song mouth

harmonius balance passes her pores
soliloqui flow her streamline tears
so smooth
a hummingbird study her rhythm

she walks
strong will that bend my metaphor
mirror strong legs
moca chocolate silk her thighs
i do divide
each eye focused on each stride

my perception is relaxin her sway
closer
i feel to that base
curin and curvin my hunger
as she back my way

clad in ancient cloth
dancin with her approach
she nears her lay

tonight we put a hold on the heal
i place my hand on her head
and recite my way

babydoll
i remember how
you climbed me with your vocal chords
my spinal cord embody your vibe
i swear you changed my walk

i reminisce
the reminiscence of your expressions
incense spice scent
smoke like swirls conversatin
many generations
of you and i in past manifestations
once gardener once water
i evoke sword from blade of grass you planted

i review
your prism like emotion
refractin and reflectin thoughts
at your discretion
i immerse in the colors you projectin
travelin kaleidoscope experiences
observin all your phases
i became your satelite
lunule away from absorbin all your stages

she sleeps
i will join you in our one verse
over beedie
and platonic discussion

in dreams
awake
a young girl
tattered clothes
travels to the well for water
small universe
dreaming of unicorns
prince warrior's
innocence binds her gaze
two big brown eyes seeking truth

humming to herself
tales of small things
she a queen
her world is her own
find her
in the depths of her song
searching for someone to call her name

Sharmin

she reach the well
for her
it is abyss
she speaks to it

"my consciousness"

dropping the bucket she is bitter
a full bucket is heavy
raising the water mirror she is eager
facing herself she is neither

"dare i look inside my soul and open my eyes
what will i find?
i have looked at you my mirror
ever since i was old enough to bear your load
you have shown me nothing but burden
next time
i will have courage to look deeper"

she told herself

momentarily she argued her mind
realized she was late
was quick to hurry her pace
the bucket was heavy
a shortcut in need
she looked to the river
running across the bridge
she lost her footing

spilt the water
and fell into unconsciousness

In Dreams (c) Copyright 2002 ~ thoughtremedy

---
the pursuit of fame and fortune
leads to shame and misfortune
-tao

  

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post your best piece here! [View all] , paperdollpoet, Thu Jul-18-02 10:32 AM
 
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Jul 18th 2002
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Me too
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      Finally
Aug 27th 2002
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i'm down...sounds wondeful but...
Jul 18th 2002
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let me
Jul 19th 2002
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OKAY!
Jul 19th 2002
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All rights protected... according to Fireband. I'll sav
Jul 19th 2002
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I am all for it...
Jul 19th 2002
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RE: post your best piece here!
Jul 19th 2002
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yes..
Jul 19th 2002
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copyrights
Jul 19th 2002
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Jul 19th 2002
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Tell you what....
Jul 19th 2002
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dwgates@casworldmedia.com is the auction contact.
Jul 21st 2002
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RE: dwgates@casworldmedia.com is the auction contact.
Jul 21st 2002
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Jul 21st 2002
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Aug 28 comg soon!!
Jul 23rd 2002
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RE: post your best piece here!
Jul 23rd 2002
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RE: post your best piece here!
Jul 23rd 2002
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      here!
Jul 23rd 2002
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           AnitaJ & WILDOUT
Jul 27th 2002
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don't sleep folks..
Jul 24th 2002
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this space reserved for
Jul 24th 2002
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up
Jul 25th 2002
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An enigma with a stigma attached
Jul 25th 2002
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wow!
Jul 25th 2002
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      RE: wow!
Jul 25th 2002
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      sweet beezus!
Jul 25th 2002
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           RE: sweet beezus!
Jul 25th 2002
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      lol
Jul 26th 2002
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my drop...
Jul 25th 2002
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up
Jul 31st 2002
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My Go.....
Jul 31st 2002
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RE: My Go.....
Aug 26th 2002
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Madawaka's things
Jul 31st 2002
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Not really my best,
Aug 01st 2002
34
Oh yeah, Shoutouts to
Aug 02nd 2002
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The Endless Melody Of Love by Ergobliss & Anita J.
Aug 02nd 2002
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*frowns*
Aug 02nd 2002
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doesn't matter at all
Aug 02nd 2002
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i want u to read something
Aug 02nd 2002
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Aug 28th LAST DAY.
Aug 05th 2002
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RE: post your best piece here!
Aug 05th 2002
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don't say i didn't warn you...
Aug 08th 2002
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aug 28th!
Aug 09th 2002
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get your shit together!!
Aug 12th 2002
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ugly ass mongrels
Aug 12th 2002
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Needing You
Aug 13th 2002
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don't make me choke some of ya'll!
Aug 14th 2002
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RE: don't make me choke some of ya'll!
Aug 14th 2002
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okplaya
Aug 14th 2002
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why don't ya get
Aug 14th 2002
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      they saw the post..if they wanted to do..they would hav
Aug 15th 2002
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up for the sleepies
Aug 15th 2002
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you think i ain't gonna up this thing to death!!
Aug 16th 2002
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here's my entries.
Aug 16th 2002
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and
Aug 16th 2002
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      RE: and
Aug 18th 2002
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finally...
Aug 16th 2002
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"The Truth" by Exodus
Aug 18th 2002
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up..
Aug 19th 2002
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opportunity knockinig
Aug 20th 2002
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only a couple more days before you are assed out..
Aug 22nd 2002
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here's mine
Aug 22nd 2002
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collaboration w/ muse
Aug 22nd 2002
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my bio
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my bio
Aug 23rd 2002
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A mental change of self
Aug 22nd 2002
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here's my drop..
Aug 22nd 2002
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can i drop a hiaku?
Aug 22nd 2002
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up
Aug 27th 2002
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as follows . . . .
Aug 22nd 2002
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yeah..ya'll are doing good!
Aug 23rd 2002
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last week!!
Aug 24th 2002
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get your shit together!!
Aug 25th 2002
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hey, lei...
Aug 25th 2002
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Bio...
Aug 26th 2002
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      just under the wire:
Aug 26th 2002
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I made it!
Aug 26th 2002
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ok biscuit here's mine
Aug 26th 2002
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The Blood(Protect It)
Aug 26th 2002
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up
Aug 27th 2002
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sentiments & sediment
Aug 27th 2002
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RE: "STAR" & Bio
Aug 27th 2002
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today's..that day
Aug 28th 2002
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black water.
Aug 28th 2002
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so amazin
Aug 28th 2002
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RE: post your best piece here!
Aug 28th 2002
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for the hell of it
Aug 28th 2002
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Here's mine
Aug 29th 2002
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END!
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