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>I really feel for Jonathan. But I’m not sure whether my >empathy is skin deep or whether it just turns me on more. I’m >seeing his wife, but in a way sodomizing him. I saw him and >his wife at the movies yesterday. I think they were going to >see some love movie where the characters meet unexpectedly may >have another significant other, have very different lives, but >some how end up together. But that doesn’t happen in real >life. In real life, people just fuck. And that is exactly >what Janet and I have been doing for the last six months. > > Six short, wonderful, ear popping, skin covered in baby oil >having slippery sex months ago, we were at one of those >company picnics. Not having a wife, 2.5 kids, or a dog in my >backyard going woof woof, I went for the sake of appearances; >Janet’s was not the least of them. The natural light of >Silver Lake Park perfectly accentuated her hazel eyes, a mix >of brown in green going neither her nor there. They were >something so special that deserved more than a someone who’s >life revolved around copy machines, interoffice memos, >promotions, brown nosing, and the general bullshit of a >company CFO, a title that’s getting thrown around nowadays to >talk people into working longer hours. No, she needed someone >who could fill in that time because they got off at 4:30 >everyday, not including flex time, while your husband is >steadily trying to meet the midnight deadline. > > > We exchange pleasantries. Jon asks me whether I’ve completed >the TPS reports for tomorrow. Janet asks can I come over for >dinner sometime. I tell her I’m much too busy, unless she can >hook me up with someone as lovely as herself. I walked away >smiling, knowing her the diamond encrusted ring on her finger >means nothing more than a toy trinket to be found in >supermarket bubble gum machines. >
2. I like it, you have a way with description. It sets up a scene well...but I'm not sure that it's complete as a scene in itself? I'm a need somethin to happen, for there to be a conflict, a mini-climax. But I could see this being the opening, set-up scene in a film.
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