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94013, I format the rhymes step by step|
Posted by c71, Thu Jun-20-19 05:09 AM
implored by those who devour sour candies like a dandy
pursued in the course of nature evolving when we solve
the conundrum that comes from having a view set
towards the upper decks kept in check by implied
guilt trips like pink slips nipped in the bud
shudder to think what would be coming next
within the context expected to recover from
setbacks counteract the impact implicit
rhymes revisit old hits then flip lines
crucial times like Ray Cappo and Porcell
can't close my eyes surprised that
the format closes doors shut conduct
rhyming forays into the maze displayed
in public subject to examination
frayed nerve endings rendering meanings
that seem dreamlike it's your life
so keep it tight
94016, RE: I format the rhymes step by step|
Posted by SynsCei, Fri Jun-21-19 05:05 PM
I dig it man.
PG's critiques of the ones he's done on mine, has basically been like:
Solid wordplay, but the references kinda water it down.
I've used that critique to try and up my rhymes with feeling and not references.
Clearly, you post like 2847 times a day (it's not a jab, it's a playful elbow), so I hope you read this and continue as I enjoy reading your writtens.
94019, thanks, appreciate the encouragement|
Posted by c71, Sat Jun-22-19 07:47 AM