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84208, ~DEAD SILENCE~
Posted by remarkable_thoughtz09, Tue Dec-22-09 03:58 AM
im just getting back into writing so please dont judge me. this was something that was just on my heart and i just want a lil feedback...
ALONE...
like a cold breeze in the middle of the night
dead silence, not even the sound of a local footstep
nonetheless , a footstep at all
the leaves fall ... wind blows like a mighty hurricane
damned and slain, without a trace of pain
sad drops of rain... covers my window pane.
no tears of joy just sorrow
hoping and praying for another tomorrow
but thats not in my future ...
my futures like my past...
full of lost lust, empty like a plaster cast
heading for DISAS ...TER
no strength to bear bad new
lost without hope, without fear, without clues
mad blues
cant wrap my mind around all that, its time to fall back
COLD ... like a breeze in the middle of the night
like im ALONE ... DEAD SILENCE
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84234, RE: ~DEAD SILENCE~
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Wed Dec-23-09 01:27 AM
(((Welcome))) ... and nice first post.
The silence was deafening! -- :P
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84238, WELCOME
Posted by ASIEM, Wed Dec-23-09 09:57 AM
read the rules the best way to get feed back is to give it that said...
i go this i hope to see more nice title nice flow roll wit it
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