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75903, untitled
Posted by the_best_part, Thu Jul-24-08 09:50 AM
what is this strange fruit
that oozes from my womb
hot lava tears
blackened by
clenched fists
full of loss

between thighs
grief swells
pain throbs
longing to be
pounded
away

dead
the
screams

awaken
the
dreams

shove the earth
inside
and still
an emptiness
will remain

murder it
again and
again

i will find
a way back
eventually

until then

even u
will do me
good
just to
stab at this
hysteric filled
rind of
the strangest kind
of fruit
until it ripens
and relieves me
of its stench
and weight.

peace







75904, RE: untitled
Posted by southernboy_423, Thu Jul-24-08 09:58 AM
i love ur word selection....nice


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75909, RE: untitled
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Thu Jul-24-08 01:44 PM
Slivers of "hurt" / "pain" are laced thru~out ^this^ pCe.

I "always" like your writings -- *No Doubt* -- but the more I read ^this^ -- the more it hurts.


*Tear~fully Nice*




Beautiful Baby BTW ... :)


75912, RE: untitled
Posted by HueyNewton, Thu Jul-24-08 01:51 PM
i can always appreciate the true talent of a wordsmith like ya'self
this makes a poet ponder . .? / if i'm from saturn r u from jupiter?

I am an oxymoron
-xxx
75926, i think you're one of the writers on here
Posted by mindful, Thu Jul-24-08 07:15 PM
who truly pays attention (or so it seems) to your line breaks...

a steady flow can always be found in everything you post.

until then

even u
will do me
good
just to
stab at this
hysteric filled
rind of
the strangest kind
of fruit
until it ripens
and relieves me
of its stench
and weight.

*nods* nice to see you back again. Peace~

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76101, CoSign
Posted by KnowOne, Tue Aug-05-08 07:48 AM
n/m
75956, RE: untitled
Posted by ASIEM, Sun Jul-27-08 08:43 PM
i like this alot but for real is this an abortion? I am moved deeply by the impplications but the fact that women experience so many forms of strange fruit and bare so much burden unseen the man in me does not want to assume I overstand
76013, RE: untitled
Posted by the_best_part, Thu Jul-31-08 10:53 AM
its about the loss of a child. however that may happen. i suspect women that have had abortions and regrets about it may feel this.

btw, thanks for the reads/comments, folk.
76028, Big ^s
Posted by empro, Thu Jul-31-08 07:23 PM
You stay finding ways to make words flow so smoothly to me

Thanks for sharing

Stay up ;)
76031, RE: untitled
Posted by J Wyze from Crown A Thornz, Thu Jul-31-08 09:28 PM
dope.
76050, O
Posted by Zin, Fri Aug-01-08 01:20 PM
O 8 i c u