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75484, throw away lines Posted by godsweat, Tue Jul-01-08 05:10 PM
okp, i'm working on the lp, aptly titled "the underscore"...and this is one of the many dozens of verses that didn't make the cut...critique
got kids i was blessed to see the rest deceased past laid to rest with me the message beeps no developments arrested speech count sheep nah, i don't even invest in sleep not even a wink death just caressed his feet as i run blocks gettin full on infested freaks and these biters like mosquitoes that injested deet they blow trees sip on this texas tea hypes compile their greatest hits like a best of me hate mail addressed to me i see no less than three a week address the beef so threats'll cease never, on mute or the deaf could speak please i'll move ya chest piece ain't talkin bout a pawn leave you gaspin for air ain't talkin bout a yawn run up on you with the weapons ain't talkin bout a con and ain't worried bout jail so i ain't talkin bout a bond that's double oh eight beyond years to come blocks is hot like they nearest the sun and they can't walk away so the fear is the run when it comes to an end so they hope it's a marathon and they sprint from the starting blocks straight to the ticker tape of their own garden plot see me i'd rather starve and rot and throw jabs waitin for the people guard to drop i know they'd rather see me barred and locked or stretched out, sketched out scarred and chalked you'll die hard waitin on ours to stop lord gave me the thumbs up we waitin on cars to stop
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75485, RE: throw away lines Posted by WILDOUT, Tue Jul-01-08 05:21 PM
if rhyming was raps youd be dapped to the fullest glory i think ull still be getting better in the next little while though nice flow
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75489, Didn't Make The Cut?!?!? ... What? Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Tue Jul-01-08 07:22 PM
Really?
Well ...
Maybe I'm already biased about your work -- but I thought ^this^ was hella nice!
The rhyme pattern / cadence was slammin' IMO ... And the verbage was lava hotness --- But then ... I'm just a girl ... so what do I know?!?! -- *shruggs* -- :P
I'd be cuttin' and pasting that shit back together and throwing it down with some hellacious sounds -- (((Forreal Tho)))
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75672, RE: throw away lines Posted by godsweat, Fri Jul-11-08 02:10 PM
another throw away...
i'm doin well, but well ain't well enough the game loves me not, drop like rose petal cups tired of the block, callin the pot, callin the kettle stuff gotta get my pedal up, sell enough, level up i settle up, tired of breakin bricks the hassle warp to pipe her down, princess in another castle caught like the last cold, gotta wrestle these rascals toss up diplomacy, but, neva caught a tassel it's gradual, didn't graduate, much rather traffic weight grade neva add up, no matter what math you take neva cross me, no matter what path you take quack, it's wrap, duct not maskin tape gettin slapped by harassin jakes, nickas clash and bang cars ride past slow, turn, flash and bang skanks with crabs and thangs, pedallers with hash and caine look you could trap and slang, or stash and bang i like grass and grain, sort of a health nut just playin the hand society dealt us
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75674, RE: throw away lines Posted by HueyNewton, Fri Jul-11-08 03:53 PM
i got lost then found in the vocab of wordplay, OH YEAH(!!!!!) nice flow ~
I am an oxymoron -xxx
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