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71812, work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by mindful, Thu Dec-27-07 11:52 AM
i've taken to writing haikus about my job and the recent changes and b.s. that's going on around "these parts." they're actually helping me to deal with my "still being here."

Ritualistic

day in day out, it
never seems to change, how odd
that this is my life.

Confined

Cubicles were meant
to hold the insane. I’m not
crazy folks, not yet.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt


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you have to be humble when
you're dealing with God ©jill scott
71825, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by ASIEM, Fri Dec-28-07 11:24 AM
real life real people real situations
lmao @ just how real funny this is when able to see it outside of self
u dropped another bomb

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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71852, work haikus continued| fueled fire & indifference
Posted by mindful, Mon Dec-31-07 12:51 PM
Fueled fire

it’s New Year’s Eve, and
where am I? At work, of course,
slaving for the man.

Indifference

Trapped, corporate world slaves
on a new plantation, this
almost makes me cry.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt


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you're dealing with God ©jill scott
71868, work haikus continued| Almost Lunchtime & Suspicion
Posted by mindful, Wed Jan-02-08 01:18 PM
Almost lunchtime

It’s nearly lunchtime,
most of the day is gone, and
I can’t wait to leave.

Suspicion

Curious are the
trees swaying leafless to and
fro, questioning me.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt

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I've never considered myself
to be beautiful, and I still don't ©pam grier

no hate in '08
71869, Indifferent and Chipotle Tacos
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Wed Jan-02-08 02:08 PM
*Indifferent*

Do I really care
No - So keep your overtime
My sons pay me well

*Chipotle Tacos*

Chipotle Tacos
Soft and with guacamole
You're my concubine
71870, :) i love these nm
Posted by mindful, Wed Jan-02-08 06:16 PM

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no hate in '08
71905, work haikus cont'd|Indistinct & Tunes to get By
Posted by mindful, Tue Jan-08-08 10:42 AM
Indistinct

The naked trees smile
whispering to each other,
“she’s at work again."

Tunes to get By

Al Green shouts “Love and
Happiness” as I drift off
into a new world.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt


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no hate in '08
71908, :) babe we are two birds sharing the same feather quill
Posted by PG, Tue Jan-08-08 11:19 AM
I want to drop out
sit on a mountain and hear
the music of life
71910, i knew you could relate
Posted by mindful, Tue Jan-08-08 01:17 PM
lol... these are getting me through man, seriously...

and your contribution, i love it :) hope your days get easier there.
71924, RE: i knew you could relate
Posted by ASIEM, Wed Jan-09-08 12:32 AM
okay so you thought
i could not relate to tired
just cause i don't work

well let me say this
unemployed i might be
but lazy i aint

this 5 7 5
play on words is enuff work
to keep me busy

now haiku to sleep
haiku at work and tell me
later what you think

thanks for lettin me
have fun creatin poems
to make people think

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder




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71927, work haikus cont'd|Unlearned & Job Security
Posted by mindful, Wed Jan-09-08 02:49 PM
Unlearned

correcting errors
for the same mistakes could be
the death of me, *groans*

job security

one thing is certain,
my job is secure, because
no one seems to learn.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt

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I've never considered myself
to be beautiful, and I still don't ©pam grier

no hate in '08
71928, LOL, nice
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Wed Jan-09-08 03:23 PM
New Era

I am quite obsessed
With diverse caps for my dome
I'm stylin on you


Venus

Hard to understand
Why those heavenly bodies
Disrupt my orbit

71974, i truly like Venus :)|work haikus cont'd
Posted by mindful, Fri Jan-11-08 10:19 PM
financial complaints

it's friday again,
i worked overtime to get
nothing but pennies.


the savior

another weekend's
here to pull me from the tight
grip of work's sharp fangs.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt


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you are the meaning of everything
beautiful, i can't wait to breathe
your air. ©ledisi

no hate in '08
72705, RE: LOL, nice
Posted by Euphoric Mutiny, Thu Mar-13-08 12:41 PM
>New Era
>
>I am quite obsessed
>With diverse caps for my dome
>I'm stylin on you
>
>
>Venus
>
>Hard to understand
>Why those heavenly bodies
>Disrupt my orbit
>
>


this reminds me of when,

Sun makes a smile that spreads sky’s width

Sprinkling dangling colours and

Angling them aptly where

The world will notice and thank Him,

Leaves my brooding to meander

And go over the mountain

Where Sun took the whole day to arrive, only to hide...

But he’s alright, he’s not angry, merely

Dancing with Sky, romancing her to night,

placing on her breast diamond moods that rightly alter sight...



I "saw" this after i came 4rm wrk though,
no matter how much they glorify it as a struggle
this "grind" just aint worth it....

pictures like this in my mind keep me focused on what's true...
i like that...

*Thank u*




















72194, work haikus cont'd|affair & set me free
Posted by mindful, Sun Jan-27-08 05:07 PM
affair

sought out someone else,
because i've grown tired of
struggling with you.

set me free

this life, keeps me chained.
i want so badly to leave,
you won't let me go.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt



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What is without periods
of rest will not endure. ©Ovid
72203, He's home
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Mon Jan-28-08 11:59 AM
I really missed you
We were closer as children
Still, time quells no blood
72218, *bumps up* i'm diggin'these
Posted by blak_yukon, Tue Jan-29-08 12:59 PM

<--really!,have one--


me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

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72238, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by tonka truck, Wed Jan-30-08 02:18 AM
statement death snow sway
paper flow no family calls
we bear love sin nurse

strained 2 usher life
mountians of polar caps kiss
peace slides watery heart

it's thawing fires
comfort care throw another
round of goats milk rest

at last the toxic
water consumes gift of g-d's
pain beat box stop talk

TE-TE
The End - To Everybody
72245, i really like the 1st two
Posted by mindful, Wed Jan-30-08 09:46 AM
you "haiku" rather well.

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What is without periods
of rest will not endure. ©Ovid
72299, awesome.
Posted by STIMULI, Mon Feb-04-08 04:57 PM

~underneath it all~
72307, RE: cursed 4 life?
Posted by freedomfighter, Tue Feb-05-08 02:36 PM
yes rocked between thumb
cotton spikes slavery strikes sun
black clouds bleeding green

never seen before
laws kindle lost choice paper
on the back of earth

working a 9 2
5 2 be rich spooning a
deeper dish scoop souls

Freeworld Order
Dangurus Mines
72315, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by Nowachaoticthing, Wed Feb-06-08 04:55 AM
the days are grayer
i'm more than what i've become
yet i await death

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- Robert Frost

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72329, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by freedomfighter, Wed Feb-06-08 04:15 PM
on a wooden chair
don't you feel it coming how where?
nature will carry

hey your good but you ain't that good
touching strokes as finger tips glide across wanding path
catch a laugh and let go the stress

"ki"

peace it's me!
dumb ass
72355, work haikus: disappointed & sunligh
Posted by mindful, Fri Feb-08-08 10:00 AM
Disappointed

Interviewing for life,
I’m back to the drawing board,
trying to save me.


Sunlight

The view near my desk
is what keeps me happy. I
thank GOD for sunlight.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt



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love takes time, work, patience,
and effort. are you ready for it?
72366, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by invisible ink, Fri Feb-08-08 01:43 PM
Confined

Cubicles were meant
to hold the insane. I’m not
crazy folks, not yet.


ha!.....don't u know it...kima
72394, Hope, Imperfection, Hope part 2, Faith
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Tue Feb-12-08 08:24 PM
**Hope**
God, I hope to be
A vessel for your glory
Even when I sin

**Imperfection**
I do fall often
Though my flesh, dense with leaven
Allows me to rise

**Hope (part 2)**
Maybe, after all
The blind night will free the sky
Now my heart sees dawn

**Faith**
Faith is breathing air
Unseen, and yet known as fact
So take a deep breath
72395, Annual review >times two<
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Tue Feb-12-08 08:53 PM
WHITE MAN, I CARES NOT
YOU ARE NO KING OVER ME
JUST GIVE ME MY CHECK

***********************

But all jokes aside
I'm what's hot in the aisles
What's up with my raise
72417, just give me a check is right
Posted by mindful, Fri Feb-15-08 06:58 PM
dude, and i had THE worst day today at work... *sighs*

these folks don't deserve me. lol... seriously. i'm digging the haikus. keep 'em comin'

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72431, RE: failing christian crusade
Posted by freedomfighter, Mon Feb-18-08 01:58 PM
fast track stress central
squeeze sauce meat sardines lunch break
no time 2 run out

death of paper pen
2 serial number lines wait
2 be taken care

of!
72458, failing christian crusade
Posted by mindful, Wed Feb-20-08 09:18 PM
is a dope title...

i like the first haiku in that short series.

definitely digable *nods*

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a new kind of down...
72446, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by blak_yukon, Tue Feb-19-08 12:35 PM
the boss is away
all this bandwidth for me
subways, eat fresh



me and the fellas would converge and heat up some Hot Pockets in preparation for Rap City.© Roc

dude, getting a response from the folks at freestyle is like watching water boil...© Tek
72456, goodbye sunlight & the idiot bunch
Posted by mindful, Wed Feb-20-08 09:12 PM
goodbye sunlight

sunlight is no more
our department has moved and
darkness covers me.

the idiot bunch

yes and no answers
are not for idiots, they
need to be spoon-fed.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt



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a new kind of down...
72466, RE: Haikus
Posted by ak_reborn, Thu Feb-21-08 07:25 PM

Haikus are jewels if written with exceptional thought and youve showed that.
72505, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by tonka truck, Tue Feb-26-08 12:38 PM
no respect sit down
vapors cause armpit stains dirt
thrown sustain crown jam

don't look find wisdom
elephant trunks jungle load
unload baby head

first delivery- use skills to see the seen
and become empty to draw lines around phantom atoms!

TE-TE
The End - To Everybody
72515, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Tue Feb-26-08 10:09 PM
If my memory serves me correctly, your writing has "always" been therapeutic -- to the reader -- as well as for yourself -- ;)

From what I can see, you've mastered the art of haikus with wit, wisdom & humor -- and I appreciate that!


*Carry On*


P.S. Hopefully things will get better @ work ...


72536, RE: photo it's always goo 2 see u
Posted by freedomfighter, Sat Mar-01-08 07:04 AM
behind wilt flowers
sunlight shows shadows 2
dark 2 see stand up

haven't seen you around but every now and then i catch
a glimpse of natures best assets

pull down the curtains next time if you don't want 2 be
caught

miss you
well halfway true
i miss what you do for the boards
it's like a 100 year old birthday
for a man who can't blow

hope to bump into you later
over and out!
peace one love

Te-Te

oh yeah did you catch my videos
on myspace before i deleted them
if not pinch your tits and wake the fuck up
72544, RE: photo it's always goo 2 see u
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Sat Mar-01-08 11:36 PM
You're a sweetheart freedom -- :* -- But no, I didn't see your deleted myspace videos ...


*Tits Pinched* -- I'm awake now! -- :9




72543, thanks lady
Posted by mindful, Sat Mar-01-08 10:00 PM
i've gotta interview on monday and another meeting with another facility. so, i may have something new to write about later :)

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72688, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Wed Mar-12-08 09:42 AM
I took a day off
For that Verizon FIOS
Hooky On Demand
72751, RE: job lost
Posted by freedomfighter, Fri Mar-14-08 03:23 PM
where it came money
children picking earth's ice dose
outfitted hip hop

most 2 lazy
mountians peaks 2 punches
no time 2 clock couch

i can't speak no job
volcano's preparing leaps
bond cutting down tree

cure 2 jealousy
going against nature rape
we it's just me free

employee at will
iron mine why can't i find
a temple 2 rest

2 bless 2 go 2
church my own ambitions comes
first unhog tie thirst

72802, Why I Am Currently Unemployed
Posted by RatpackSlim, Mon Mar-17-08 10:35 PM
brick and mortar stores
are not as fast as downloads
bye, record store job...
72810, ha. doesn't it sting though? God, I think I'm stuck nm
Posted by mindful, Tue Mar-18-08 05:28 PM

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72803, yup most def can relate to this one
Posted by Ezzsential, Mon Mar-17-08 11:32 PM
loved the angle of the cubicle part!




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72811, work haikus cont'd| stuck & loyalty
Posted by mindful, Tue Mar-18-08 05:34 PM
stuck

i've searched for so long,
though complacency is safe,
i still yearn for change.


loyalty

i'm as loyal as
they pay me to be. who cares
about me? no one.

©Tremaine L. Loadholt




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72834, RE: work haikus cont'd| stuck & loyalty
Posted by freedomfighter, Wed Mar-19-08 02:06 PM
only 4 minutes
seasonal time off return
desk pack up retired
73088, RE: it's alive
Posted by tonka truck, Tue Apr-01-08 11:23 AM
no C.P.R
air hard compressing liver
bottom of bag rush

found still intact dust
off bee's stinger line up TB
cough tele floor nurse

back in action again
who let the devil in hell
is only 4 saints

get out and slam the door behind you because i'm smoking!

TE-TE
The End - To Everybody
73877, RE: work haikus: ritualistic & confined
Posted by freedomfighter, Mon Apr-28-08 06:32 PM
hooked real pull give slack
earth expell all one needs birth pang
first you must learn rest

clocks don't keep records
how many grains sand dooms blocks
water tracks then leap in

Freeworld Order
Dangurus Mines