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70494, obeying
Posted by ASIEM, Mon Oct-08-07 02:14 PM
Someone
told
me
the
sun
is
shining
so i
moved
the
clouds
from
in
front
of
my
eyes
to see...
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
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70495, brilliance!
Posted by ThaAnthology, Mon Oct-08-07 02:24 PM
The title...perfect.... I love this.
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70520, the fact that
Posted by mindful, Tue Oct-09-07 05:29 PM
i'm so literal in my thoughts when i read things; i imagined a man (strong, if you will), moving the clouds w/ his mind (not his hands), just to be able to get a piece of that shine...
this right here...
i
moved
the
clouds
from
in
front
of
my
eyes
to see.
is definitely where it's at. why this form? what came to you first (title or the poem)? nicely done... *nods*
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70593, RE: the fact that
Posted by ASIEM, Sat Oct-13-07 11:06 PM
never rob inspiration therein lies mystery
ha i digress :)
mindful u see deeply i must say
Thanks Anthology u been showin alota love lately
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
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70596, RE: the fact that...
Posted by ak_reborn, Sun Oct-14-07 03:42 AM
it is short but meaningful, and that this piece creating several thoughts in my mind.
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70640, obeying
Posted by Jahlovall3305, Wed Oct-17-07 11:24 AM
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The clouds becomes images. Someone is standing in the way, How can i see how do I obey.
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71890, RE: obeying
Posted by ASIEM, Fri Jan-04-08 05:12 PM
the word obey, here, implies the deepest humility while surrendering to the highest form of trust (belief)
(kuun fiya kuun) BE AND IT IS
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
www.myspace.com/asiem61
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71953, complex in its simplicity....
Posted by KnowOne, Fri Jan-11-08 02:38 PM
NICE
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71962, RE: obeying
Posted by wisdom31, Fri Jan-11-08 04:38 PM
Very poignant and profound at the same time...
Keep the B-more words flowin'...
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I'm the poetical poltergeist I heist tracks from the past
And return em to the present time in rhyme form---Pharoahe Monch, "Extinction Agenda"
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72032, RE: obeying
Posted by Phenomenality, Wed Jan-16-08 02:58 PM
the written cadence is different, but this is a very rumi-esque piece.. a mixture of intoxicating complex simplicity yet ripe and yeilding with the softness of mantra-flow..
which, btw, is a HUGE compliment because he is a muse like no other to me. ;o) reminds me of one of my favorite rumi lines: why do you stay imprisoned, when the doors are so wide open?
simply beautiful, my friend.
>Someone
>told
>me
>the
>sun
>is
>shining
>so i
>moved
>the
>clouds
>from
>in
>front
>of
>my
>eyes
>to see...
>
>"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then
>nurture it wit more ink..."
>ASIEM
>"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
>(Be and it is)
>" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in
>love is fair" Stevie Wonder
- Breathe Easy -
:: Dreaming ::
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