Any feedback will be appreciated. I'm tryin to change my style gradually. This is very important because I'm on stages all the time. Thanks



All the saints in the building dat know I'm reppin my God
Whateva Satan kicks out I punch in like time cards
I'm nice boo....
Pen, paper, pickachu, and evolution stone
Cuz I leave a shocking affect wheneva I Raichu
Forget me says me so I too
Whateva God says I do, Jesus besides You
I neva been one to strike, I love to eat from ya Word, and I have a ball over a plate like stike two
To strike me and strike three Satan would like dat
I got struck like you wrote me a letter cuz I'm write back
Twice dat, matta fact in multiples
Don't accept Christ, you in hell like an open nose
When Jesus walks open toes without doctor scholl's
When He talks it's read like open scrolls
Naw, its read like books, plus read like LOOK
The blood gottem' red handed, hands red like crooks
Hands read like palm readers
Sermon on the mount He's a bomb speaker
Through bomb speakers that blast the lyrics
So hard the pages flip to John 3:16 and grasp the spirit
Placed a silencer on the truth cuz when blasted only few wil hear it
You wonder why inside is the spirit
Cuz His side in His side they took a spear and they speared it

I don't think I like it! -- x(

Your verbage is tight -- On Point Lines and allladat -- *No Doubt*

Cuz U know, that U know, whatcha KNOW -- *Spiritually On Point*

But...

It didn't flow smooth to me -- and your grammar was kinda ... *hmmmmm* -- choppy / broken ... nahmean?


I'mmma fan of your work tho, and U know thisssssss maynnnnnn ... :D

Thanks so much Photo. I appreciate the feedback. It definitely was different for me. Thats da reason I needed the feedback. I even have trouble trying to say this one out loud. When I read it to a beat in my head its fire, but when I try to recite it,.......I don't know. Much love and thanks again.